Silverymoon

Luckily Google Translate and Google Chrome function in tandem, so I was able to read this story fairly easily in choppy, broken English. With any luck, you too are using Google Chrome so you can read these reviews in choppy, broken Polish.

The story was short and strange. I did like the imagery in it at some points. But in its current state it's not going to get any sort of decent rating, so maybe try again.

Since I had to play with aid of Google Translate I'm can't say anything about the actual prose quality, but the story is obviously very short and did seem a little rushed. There was only one good ending that I could find that you're sort of funneled into no matter what you do in the beginning. And there were mentions of characters (Vem?) that were treated like they were supposed to be important despite never being introduced.

If this was just meant for the author's friends, just so you know, you can unpublish it and then go into the Storygame Properties and set it to Sneak Peek. That will let you share the URL with whoever you want without this story being public on the site for anyone to comment on.

For a beginner story, it's not too bad, but also not the thing that's likely to get good enough ratings to stay published. Not being in English will hurt ratings too, not everyone is going to bother pasting pages into Google Translate when a solid wall of jumbled consonants and an under 2000 word count is about as coherent as the average 1/8 click and move on noob story whether they speak the language or not.

Como vostede publica unha historia noutra lingua diferente ao Ingles sen usar o propio tag de lingua distinta. Eu decidin co mais apropiado era responderche en Galego.

Really, Just put the damn another language tag. That or unpublished and show your friends the link