Simon's Day

This was quite amusing. It actually has quite a bit of length if you make the "correct" choices, to the point that there's quite a few different endings. Some of them are pretty dumb, but I've seen a lot worse. It was very basic overall, but eh that's what I expected.

Oh, but what have we learnt from this intrepid storygame? Why, just a few things:

1. Helping an old woman across the street will get you arrested
2. Don't offer to pay for a meal with 3 girls when you have no money, and according to this game, you never will
3. You should definitely get together with the 25-year old woman who is a student at your school, even though you're 16 (????)
4. Vanity kills
5. Attempting to skateboard will kill you

The story was supposed to comical, and it kept me interested for some reason. Add more detail and description in future games, perhaps a few more branching paths, and it could be even better. I'm just glad you didn't go for the lolrandom route.

Cool. I think it's at least better than homework. Don't recommend putting a death at the very first choice. Why? Lucky me, I died straight at the beginning, thinking this game was gonna be total crap. But no. It's decent, but could surely be misleading. Otherwise pretty good.

I think some deaths, mainly most of them, weren't likely and a bit tacky. I recommend you change some deaths like staring at the mirror. Maybe, like, um... there's a fire or the mirror falls on you, still having it be humorous.

Some of the story options were way too short and boring. Mind you, I'm only commenting on the problems. Otherwise, this game is really neat. More options are recommended, but could also use more detail. For example, the three girls at the pizzeria. What hair color? What age? What personality? Dressed in what?

This game was so cool, I would love if you made another one. Thanks for reading this comment, and have a good day. ??

Meh pretty bad

I like how it was straight forward but PLEASE make it longer than it is now if you make any other story.
-Thewinner

Too simple.

The bit i hated was cause my name is Simon, and I did everything true to my nature...huh im gonna die staring at myself :P

I Liked The Idea And Thought That If Worked On More, Could Make A Amazing Story

i went to pizzaria with the girls

I'm pretty sure Simon isn't unlucky, he's just a Mega Douche

literally finished in 5 seconds
here's a tip: leave the death choices until later in the game. it could've lasted way longer, i think. i'll replay