Storm the school.
A
family friendly
storygame by
Katya
Player Rating
3.42/8
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Based on
201 ratings
since
Played times (finished )
Story Difficulty
3/8
"Trek through the forest"
Play Length
1/8
"Make sure not to blink"
Maturity Level
5/8
"Aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
Tags
War
If a terrorist organisation takes over your school, what will you do?
Player Comments
Wow, that was the most unrealistic terrorist situation I've ever seen.
You're a sixth-former, so you're a schoolboy/schoolgirl, and you speak fluent Russian and have no trouble shooting these terrorists dead with a gun that you probably shouldn't know how to operate. What, are you some kind of undercover junior cop in training or something? How did you overpower this grown man holding a gun to your head?
As you inexplicably go around shooting terrorists and stashing their bodies in the closet as if it's second nature to a schoolkid who's in the middle of their exams, the result is that these terrorists don't really seem that threatening anymore. They can't even speak English, so they already sound rather amateurish, and now this teenager goes around killing them. That must be pretty embarrassing for them.
There's also no real background to this hostage situation. You can let the terrorists kill this other girl and the game ends on the first choice. You could probably turn it into a school shooting at that point, but that's a different story altogether.
Your writing wasn't bad, but none of your readers are going to root for a protagonist like this. They're at school, they're not going to be able to beat up a fully armed terrorist with their bare hands. Introduce other scenarios. Create a sense of tension which isn't entirely dispelled by "whoops I went the wrong way". Give us a few more choices. But stop making this protag so overpowered, or nobody's going to believe in any of it.
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Saika
on 8/15/2017 6:15:04 AM with a score of 0
The plot was good, but it was linear, there were also a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes as well as a few punctuation mistakes. I also have a problem with how easily the protagonist accomplishes things, that part was not very realistic and made things a little weird.
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DeathIncarnate
on 7/25/2015 11:32:47 AM with a score of 0
Somehow I get the impression that this is every teenage boy's wet dream. :p
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Avery_Moore
on 7/14/2020 11:30:17 AM with a score of 0
it ok
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junior13
on 5/1/2020 5:34:16 PM with a score of 0
I am a HERO. Take that, classmates. You would’ve just let the poor girl die. Cowards. I’m a hero!!
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— Hi on 2/17/2020 2:57:00 PM with a score of 0
This does not make sense.
Firstly, you've been learning Russian for only a year, and then you know how to say stuff in Russian that you normally never use? So strange.
Next, you're in school, and then suddenly a Russian person rushes in the classroom. Are there no one in the school, only you and your class? Or is everyone blind?
Thirdly, how is it possible for a student to snatch a gun, kill people, climb roofs and all those secret agent stuff? Especially after getting such a shock?
The grammar was good, and I guess the options were okay. But really, the storyline is just for a student to fight out of the school and arrest a criminal or something? That totally doesn't make sense unless it's a superhero school.
Description of the character is needed, too.
Overall, I think if you used a different idea/storyline, it would've been pretty decent. Rated 3/8
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StoryTurtle
on 6/29/2019 10:53:51 AM with a score of 0
This story was very linear, and the protagonist was way too overpowered. Boring
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C6H8O6
on 4/9/2019 12:42:55 PM with a score of 0
This is the most boring game on the entire website
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— Pink girl on 2/3/2019 10:45:41 AM with a score of 0
It was alright, but really short
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Francesca1986
on 11/1/2018 5:11:40 PM with a score of 0
How about having more choices then "die or don't die"
Also, pretty sure a sixth grader can't accurately kill several guards without feeling bad or missing the shots.
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epicethan127
on 2/5/2018 2:16:26 PM with a score of 0
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