The Devil's Fire

If I understand correctly, this storygame needed re-doing so the author unpublished it, but it was so good that it was re-published by the mods. Even without taking into account that it's incomplete, The Devil's Fire is a fantastic storygame, and on of the best on the website.

The writing is really good, and only hampered a little by some typos. The third person narrative is refreshing on this website, and Ashen_Snake has made great use of this perspective. The explanation at the end only made me appreciate it even more. You wouldn't expect it, but not using first or second person has actually really helped to give insight into the mind of a very disturbed protagonist. It also allowed for a very interesting prologue as well as other moments that happened away from Bana-Jxo.

I felt like the different coloured fonts were distracting at first, buy you soon grow used to it and there are some pretty clever uses for it later on. It's also nice when it's clear who's talking.

The fights played pretty nicely and smoothly, providing the player with a challenge without being frustrating. They were pleasant to play through and were kept few and far between, allowing the story to take precedence over the game, which is a good thing.

An engaging tale of the inner struggles and horrors that the main character went through. Bana-Jxo/Julian and Tokio were without a doubt my favourite. There are a host of rich characters, although I must admit some didn't jump out of the page as much. Mainly, these were the villains, who I felt were lacking in development. I don't know what else could have been done. Perhaps find a way for Julian to interact with them rather than jumping straight into a fight?

Looking at the number of ratings and comments, this amazing game hasn't been played enough. Play, it people! You won't regret it.

8/8

I can't believe that this story was once featured. Were the standards this low? The plot was actually as comprehensible as Silicon Lipstick. It also didn't help that the author kept spamming me with pictures from Google and that due to the age of the story, the links to them were probably also broken.

The text was also oversaturated with colors and none of them actually served a narrative purpose. I just want to wash my eyes with bleach after slogging through four chapters. Somehow this story is even more frustrating than the walmart game.

The only thing I did find impressive were the fights scenes (man, they were repetitive, but it was probably lots of coding work).

OMG!!! THIS WAS AMAZING! I LOVE IT! MAKE ANOTHER ONE!!!

This was actually pretty damn good. I found each combat encounter to be pretty entertaining.

beautiful
just fckin beautiful

I didn't get the plot or the story line whatsoever. It all seemed so random.

It was confusing and hurting my head that to the point I hate it but I still finished it because I WANT TO COMMENT ON IT

I thought this game was very interesting and exciting

"Hello!


Ashlee (Ashen_Snake) here. Not many people do this in their endings, but I felt like it, so blarg. Just scroll down if you don't care. That's fine by me. :)


I started this adventuregame in 2005, probably, when I was 13. I admit, the first year was off and on updates, monthly updates if anything. But I really sped it up more, because I really do love the story here and I wanted to show it to you. It was originally a novel I was working on, and when I joined myadventuregames and finished The Free Hand, I felt that it was the perfect novel to convert.


Granted, only 30 pages of that said novel were finished.


Anyhow, I really liked the character of Julian Moore/Bana-Jxo. I just wanted to make a character that was sweet and cruel, villainous and heroic, and all the while a suffering guy who just wanted to be normal. I also have a thing for disturbed characters, but who doesn't?"

Wow, if you really wrote this at the age of 13 then you must be a genius in writing stories! Hopefully you become a professional writer one day. =)

OMG loved it! I can't even express how AWESOME I think that was! If you had continued it as a novel, I DEFINITELY would have read it! I really love characters like that, where they know what they're doing is wrong but just can't control it, especially with the particular... clownishness... of Julian's character.
I ended up using the photo of Gregory's family to convince him not to kill me, which I thought was really sweet. This was an amazing experience for me, but I just have one complaint: I couldn't see any of the pictures in the chapter where Julian later finds the book. I really want to know what they were! Also, why does the BEST ending leave off with Julian DYING?! I get very attached to my characters, dude! That hurt! Overall, though, I fucking loved this!


Oh! And one more thing: This comment was never written. It's all in your MIIIIIIND!