The Haunted Library

nice

miss g killed me. I felt there was no point reading this after the first sentence but I powered through. I triedn to sleep again but kept waking up there should of been an ending where I sleep then wake up and its the next day and I just go back home instead of reading the rest. I gave it a 6 rating because ots really scary the part that I read

This game is not great, but not boring either. I don't really think the genre you made for this story game does it justice because it felt more like a puzzle game more than anything.

There are a few things I would suggest if you were to edit this storygame,

1. I would make the paths longer, I kept falling back to sleep after one click and It didn't really give me many options. If you were to expand the choices the reader would be able to have more options instead of failing immediately after a wrong answer.

2. This is a very frustrating storygame, The reason for that is because the dialogue is the game even though you picked a different option. What I mean by this is that you need to change up the fall asleep a little bit, at least make it relevent to when you fell asleep because it feels like you completely re-start even though you are still continuing the game.

3, I look out for spelling mistakes but I couldn't find any, sure there were some places where it was wordy but I couldn't find any incorrect sentinces.

Overall I like the concept, the exicution wasnt bad but it can definately be improved by adding new paths and different dialogue when you fall asleep.

I think that this story could be a 4 or 5 out of 8, but just because I was frustrated Im going to give it a 4/8.

Not bad

A short but descriptive story with a nice flow.

I liked how you set the story background from the start, the rain and the fear of getting punishment for making the library book wet established the atmosphere for the scary encounters in the library later on. The whole story is guided by accidents - something which is really essential for the helplessness in scary stories and you grasped the feeling naturally. Great job.

The story ended a little abruptly for some paths and I never got to know what the dark shadow was. I would have liked to know more about the background of the school, etc. so there could be more foreshadowing on why there is a monster/ghost in the library.

Overall a cool short story. 6/8

ong I just wanted to sleep.