The Matching CHAPTER 0NE

Ok first off I know you don’t own shadowhunters or whatever cringe fan fiction this is based on. Second I hope to god you don’t own me that’s illegal like this story should be.

I’ve never watched the shadowhunters show and was not properly introduced to this random ending. I did not like the brevity of it nor did I like the change of character POV from your character to jace in such a short span.

That might work in an actual novel but this a freaking short storygame and it looks badly done. Also a lot of your dialogue was just describing what was happening don’t show me tell me what’s happening from the character’s perspective! This is ridiculous!

Also why am I invested in your nickname? Just say you is it that hard?!? Don’t put your nickname for the freaking character you play as. Who is jace? Why should I care that he banged you then left and now your character is sad?

What is the main threat? There is no conflict, no heroes journey, and no nothing. Just some cringe romances that haven’t had time to properly develop. If you have a romance fan fiction go submit it somewhere else!

Don’t try to sell me on the idea that this is an actual story. It needs work and there are some many gaps in logic and I have to look up crap from the show to find out why I should care about this terrible fan fiction.

Why is this rated above a 3? I have no love for this terrible, terrible story with little branching plot and no general coherency included born out of some cringe tumblr post. 1/8 send it forth into the flaming abyss.

I was not a fan of this. The (insert nickname) thing really was terrible. Also was it just me or was the formatting weird. It felt like there was too much space between the lines. Overall unfortunately, I can not recommend this story to anyone.

I like the idea but the ending...I can't even call it a cliffhanger. I just don't get it. It's unfinished I guess

Would it not kill you to give the reader a name? Or if you really don't want to give them one, then just leave that part out altogether?

just bad just really bad just stay away from this horrid story

It started with one person and then ended with another. What the hell?

Constantly having (Your Nickname), (Your First Name), really broke the little immersion I had.

The pictures and large paragraphs can't hide the fact that this story is just The City of Bones with Clary's name replaced with "Your First Name".

I gave it the two, because I was having a bias.
The bias was currently "All fan fictions are terrible"
I re read it.
Still not my cup of tea, though not /bad/
Gave it a four, because its the middle man. It isn't bad, but it isn't /good/ to me.

Not a Bad Story to be `Onest, who rate this 2 think just clicking through the story, 6/8