The time of Darkness

Vin is a terrifying psychopath. I tried to make him as passive as possible without dying and he still kills at least eight people. Never once does the story make him sound even the slightest bit guilty, even when he kills his godfather. Also, the four men, aren't they the godfather's friends? Wouldn't they at least be a little upset when a child murders their friend unprovoked? Vin agrees to go with him and when he won't give his name, the game forces you to straight up murder him. I would at least sort of understand if they had experience in killing people and were part of a child gang or something, but they run away from a kid at the beginning because his dad is a murderer. Why does Vin feel nothing? He murders his godfather and is just like, "oops." He kills an intruder then just goes straight back to bed like it was nothing. This kid has issues.

Timmy, the antagonist and this horrible murderer, is a better person than Vin, the protagonist. We barely see Timmy killing anyone but Vin is over here making widows left and right. Then Freddie is just making fancy homecooked meals for his psychopath little brother and four strangers. Why do Freddie and Vin even care who killed their parents anyways? If they have no idea how they died, then they were most likely too young to remember. Meaning they were also probably too young to remember their parents at all. Would you, as a child, go after a serial killer for someone you don't know? Also, a bazooka is 1.37 meters long and 12.75 pounds. Vin, a child, carries that thing around for the entirety of the game without any random bystanders saying, "why does that kid have a freaking bazooka?" This would be fine in a comedy where things don't have to sense, but this is an action story, where plot holes should at least be explained away. Then again, Vin would probably just shoot them for looking at hime funny because he's a psychopathic serial killer using the murder of his parents as an excuse to kill everyone.

Sorry for the extremely long comment, but the plot holes had to be addressed by someone. I won't mention the grammar in much detail in fear of being redundant with the rest of the comment section, but it could've been much better. 4/8 because some of the action scenes were very well done regardless of how little sense the setup for them made.

There's definitely some effort being put into this story, but once again, the writing level is so first draft-- spelling mistakes, lack of tense agreement, fragments, run-ons, the list goes on.
Also, there are quite a few instances of plot-wagoning: like when you choose the rifle, you get the bazooka anyway- or when you choose "finish him off" with your godfather, you end up riding in the car talking to him.
We're not even getting into whether or not I like stories that are kill, kill, kill-oriented.
Clearly, you can write a story with some length to it- now put some polish on it.

Laughed to tears, bravo!

What you mean that password for the second is 234? Where do i enter the password???

That was just really scary, but horror stories are my favorite!!!

Was hard to read at times because of the run-on sentences and spelling/grammar errors.

What on earth was going on here? I just ended up going on a killing spree no matter what I did. Also, there's scripting errors. The man asks me for a gun, but I'm not allowed to give him a rifle. Only the pistol will work.

The story just felt really disorganized, with quite a bit of grammar and spelling mistakes. I just didn't really get it.
Oh, and if you ever find a bazooka that's small enough so I can hide it in my pocket, message me and let me know. I'll be interested in buying it.

Well, I shot this guy in the face with a bazooka that I got out of my pocket. Seems legit... O_o

A very good story, though you wrote like Vin was Greg for a few pages which confused me and other readers for sure. The length of it was longer than I expected but the story could have ended pages before if you didn't add a few unnecessary details. My intentions are good, intended to help you. ??