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(cont. from previous) -be honest...

However, all in all, while not an amazing storygame (especially the "game" aspect), it's much better than many of the other new ones here.

While a bit linear and sometimes not too engaging (Fate 1 and Fate 2?!), I must applaud you for your tasteful meaning!

Coming into this story, I was expecting for there to be long, drawn-out speeches about how "WE MUST FIX INEQUALITY NOW!!!111ONE111!!! AT ANY COST NOW NOW NOW NO MATTER WHAT"

However, you did far better than that. You actually presented realistic scenarios, with endings that showed that one can have a good ending, as long as they know how to play the cards -- no matter how hard they are discriminated against -- right. There were also several "okay" endings, with realistic consequences.

While not a REALLY good storygame, it was definitely not as bad as I thought it was going to be when I went into it. I must admit, it did engage my thoughts on the matter, and will definitely serve well as a final project for that class... Even though it's not exactly a useful course, to

I madd it! Big time Hollywood star! Woohoo

This was quite good and I liked the focus on bringing inequality and racism to attention. In that, this might be considered a candidate for the Edutainment category if only for the social issues. You had some nice branching going on and I liked how the story progressed.

There are some little hiccups however. I don't know why your first page is blank with no text and just a single link. I thought my computer had frozen or something. Thankfully the real story starts up after that.

And what's with the "Fate 1" and "Fate 2" pages? Is it chance? Give us some words to go off here.

I understand it was a project, and while I find it an interesting idea to use real-life stories there wasn't much here to really explore.

This story shows a fairly decent balance between silly and serious. This helps carry the story along when the writing or story line becomes strained. Good work. Keep writing. Never give up the dream.

I became a big shot (not based off race)! Good story, good writing, good length. 6/8

awesome

Baad, I give it a 0/8

It was a little unusual.