Player Comments on A Cup of Tea

It was actually very well written, but there were a lot of flaws outweighing the interesting and charming writing style you used here.

First of all, there were a few spelling/grammar errors floating around every once in a while, but not many. A quick proofreading and spellcheck can easily fix this small problem.

The character development was decent, but definitely not great. I would have had more length so you could bave added more emotion and backstory and time for the characters to have feelings the reader can actually think of and feel for the characters.

As Plelb stated, this was very short and suprisingly didn't fall under the 1/8 length category. Next time, spend more time on your storygame and make something longer, something you can be proud of.

I'll say 4/8, make it longer and fix the errors and you could have something really good here :)

... I really hope that wasn't somebodies actual phone number. >.<

The idea is there and your writing seems good. But this is chooseyourstory.con, not readastory.com and this has only one linear progression. This could be amazing if you took a moment to write out more branches and length into your story. Also ends way too soon. Basically this is a good start but needs to be finished.

You just made yourself a god and then said your name was tea.8/8

Uhm... What? So I fell and now she can never love me? Why would that be a bad thing? She helped me up and offered me tea. Now would be a good time to start a conversation!

not too bad! wish it was a little longer but it was definitely cute :)

That's it? I was hoping for a longer story with more choices.......I'm a bit disappointed to be honest. But good effort I guess.....

Could have been way longer. There were few errors, which was nice, and it was funny and charming, but I felt it was too short for me to enjoy. And there was only one good ending, all the other endings were the equivalent of a 'you died'. I did enjoy what little was there.

3/8.

Too short, too little story. But OK, because it was a little humorous and only took a minute or two to finish.

A bit too short for my liking

It was short but semi-well-written. Maybe have the story continue on after the first encounter?

This story must be a demo right? It's so short it's length should be 1/8. Please publish a longer story next time. I would have bothered with constructive critism but it's only a 10 page story...

it makes no sense

I like it, It's kinda Good!

so okay, 1 choice...

No good endings... Wow.

Interesting...

Not my....

A very well written piece of shit.

The story was kind of straightforward with little description to it. The choices I made got a short story but it was a fairly fun game.

Meh. It was okay.

Umm... Seriously? umm....

I didn't really want "tea"... perhaps I didn't get into the spirit of the thing :) It was well written but could have been developed more

Meh

My story was very short, and how is your relationship ruined because you wore sneakers? Some of this makes no sense, and I would want it to be a bit longer for some results.

A fairly short game with a relatively straightforward storyline. Not really much to it, but good writing skills.

This had potential as a starting scene to a longer storygame. As it is, though, it's way way too short.

This was rather short and linear, I feel that you could really expand. Maybe add a few more branches? Your writing is very good and there were good elements in it. 4/8.

420-6669.

Nice job hiding them :P

I NEED SEQUEL. I want to see where this goes...

Extremely short... But very nice writing!

Quite short. A fairly straight path with not too many options. Made as mediocre. But I do have to say the text is of good quality with bits of humor and a nice story. Pretty good for someone fairly new.