A Mutt's Purpose

I mostly skimmed this story and it told me all I needed to know. It's a cliched dog that meets people and serves its purpose by being with humans?

It just seemed like a kid wrote this since the plot is one-dimensional with you either mating and raising a wolf pack or your true purpose according to this author by protecting the kids. Also, you die of insanity if you don't fulfill your purpose what kind of writing is that?

I mean honestly, if this story was longer and had more thought put into it I would care but this is just kind of boring to read. Also, the loops back to the beginning and the annoying links were unnecessary.

This story was coherent, but it was trash.

First off, was it really so hard to write some new pages or take away some of the options after they had been chosen already so that there weren't all these endless loops? For example, if the dog runs into the forest after being with the people, they have an option to go back to the road, which leads to the same exact situation with the people as before. That could have easily been fixed if the author had just taken a little extra time to write a new page where the dog decides to go back to the people instead of starting the whole interaction over again.

And that same choice is labelled, "I've played this game before!" Although it usually is not, fourth wall breaking can be pulled off and can be funny. This was not one of those situations. It was annoying and cringy and the first thing that really brought out my contempt for this story. In fact, just thinking about it wants me to go lower my rating. I'm going to do that after this is posted.


If you don't go with the humans, this becomes a wolf-imitation story. Sure, I was almost amused when the dog ate the nuts *hehe* and didn't like them, but the story was too far gone for moments like that to be of any use.


And the dog gives its puppy a "proper burial"? Since when do dogs give one another proper burials? Did it make sure to bury it on consecrated ground? What the hell is that?


Then there's a dreadful romance page that if you don't go along with you end up dying of insanity because you have no purpose. You just successfully raised several pups to adulthood. Why is guarding some human children a true purpose but not raising your own puppies?


And what's with the apology for gender-locking. Of all the things in this story worth apologizing for, that was not one of them.


Don't bother with this. The grammar could have been worse, but everything else could have been far, far better.

I did the pug one too! :3 check that out if u are intrested! <3

Don't apologize, even ironically, for the gender of your protag. That's foolish.

Honestly, that was a cute story and had a nice concept. However, there were some problems.
One, it kept changing from "you" to "I". Try keeping one POV, either "you" or "I".
Two, it said I was a boy, then I was a girl? Make sure to check and know what the reader's gender will be.
Other than that, this was a pretty good short story.

Is it just me, or did my gender change a couple times throughout the reading of this story? First I was a she, then on the next page I was a he, then a she again. This story was short and sweet, I won't quibble with it too much because at least the author wrote something and I haven't even begun to contemplate writing my own story yet. But this story was just okay.

Rogseath does not approve, and neither do I.

This was a cute story. It was pretty short. I would like to see you add more detail and back story.

I loved this!especially the reference from warriors! Thank you for this amazing story! i just wish it was longer.

There was a lot to read and it overall the story was very short. So it was kind of a let down. I wanted this story that I was going to grow and do a lot with but instead I got this story that's about as long as a piece of grass.