a Sci-Fi by Chase223 and Steve24833

Commended by TharaApples on 4/22/2021 1:50:58 AM

Player Rating6.80/8

"#19 overall, #3 for 2015"
based on 1124 ratings since 12/23/2015
played 29,658 times (finished 958)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

Take control of General Achilles, a human General trying to lead the human fleet to prosperity through politics and military means, while dealing with keeping humanity and it's allies together, dealing with a barbaric race of raiders and a powerful alien alliance. Will humanity crush it's enemies under it's boots? Will you form a peaceful coalition between all species? Or will you become humanity's downfall?

This is my first game, which I made with the help of Steve24833. I really hope you enjoy it. Please comment on any bugs, mistakes or other screw-ups I made. 

Hey, the sequel's here, Achilles II: The Chykri. Enjoy it!

Player Comments

I thought it was good. I actually skipped the first few pages, but eventually got more into it. I got an ending that involved peace with the Alliance and unifying the Galaxy. I'd like to think it's one of the better endings, haha.

Issues I had:
- I think you should have used items for the info dump on the first page. I'm sure some of it could have come in handy later, but right away it was too intimidating to bother reading.
- There were several times I had two choices that were worded the exact same way, but had different results.
- I never really was able to quantify what my strength actually meant. I know it refers to combat strength, but we never learn what our opponent's is, so there's not much value in knowing the number.
- The game was long, which is nice, but it seemed to be pretty linear is regards to where it went.
- I was fine with the "Problem -> Solution -> Repeat", method of playing the game for the most part, but when the war happened I would have preferred to be a little more proactive. I was never given the chance to do assassinations or spy, or learn what was happening from behind us. Despite us losing many resources, we just kind of ignored it.

All in all I enjoyed it. It has flaws, but it accomplishes what it sets out to do, so it's a solid 6/8.
-- Killa_Robot on 5/20/2015 4:14:26 PM with a score of 50
Okay, first off: this storygame is such a welcome relief from the huge pile of short, uninteresting games that have come out lately. It's well-written, the scripts and variables all work (as far as I could tell) and it all makes sense as one coherent package, including multiple chapters released together, instead of multiple truncated attempts at a game (which has become far too common).
Glowing compliments aside, the one aspect you could definitely improve on for next time is the transitions. the first chapter especially seemed like each page was totally disconnected from the next. A problem was posed, I picked a solution, the results were displayed, and suddenly a totally new problem was happening. Give me a story or something to drive me through the 1st chapter; by the time the 2nd and 3rd chapters came around, the game moved forward with a clear sense of overall purpose and direction. (although it was a little slow at times). The statistics drove a decent portion of the game, but it's the characters that make it come alive--and we don't deal too much with the characters in the first chapter. Once I stated getting a feel for who everyone was, though, everything started flowing much more nicely.
As a final compliment, your knowledge of Greek mythology is awesome. I loved all the references during the military upgrades selection (what were those Valkyries doing there, anyway?) the mythology added a little flavor to the game, and I appreciated it for that.

All in all, a great storygame, and I'm definitely looking forward to #2!
-- MagmaArmor0 on 5/18/2015 10:43:49 PM with a score of 45
hay that was great: I just beat the game and I am really happy for what you made: the plot is good; theree si not really any grammer errors and I can tell ffrom that you have worked hard to bringing this to life
-- cwcfan19 on 6/27/2020 8:02:46 AM with a score of 0
I was expecting this story to be about the Greek hero Achilles, but what i got instead was a roller coaster of happiness, doubt, stress, and deep satisfaction. Well done, bravo, bene factum and I can't wait to crush some badass aliens.
-- Patroclus on 5/13/2020 12:42:01 AM with a score of 0
Oh hey, I did it.
-- GeneralAchilles on 5/13/2020 12:39:32 AM with a score of 0
Good shit
-- JT on 1/13/2020 4:58:26 PM with a score of 50
SO FUN. I had no idea what was going on the whole time but I enjoyed every second of it. 10/10
-- JHEZZTER22 on 1/9/2020 10:14:00 AM with a score of 0
That’s pretty good!
-- Jeffx on 11/29/2019 9:26:14 AM with a score of -5
It was awesome. However the creator does need to fix some of the choices that won’t let me pick it. Overall, a really good storyline and plot.
-- Pug_boi on 11/28/2019 12:44:10 AM with a score of 50
Really good and realistic.
-- gg on 11/19/2019 11:29:19 PM with a score of 0
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