"Too few ratings to be ranked"
played times (finished )
"no possible way to lose"
"Make sure not to blink"
"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.
Player will travel through a mystical world in an effort to defeat the legendary Bigfoot
...That picture at the end...
on 10/30/2014 2:05:12 PM with a score of 0
That's your idea of Bigfoot?
on 10/30/2014 12:03:38 AM with a score of 0
Short. Very short. Granted, what was there was actually decent, with a self-contained plot and nice pictures, but there was really no build-up or payoff to finishing this game.
I might also point out that on the page where you give us the sword and shawl items, there's a picture of the sword and a picture of the shawl, then two default pictures for the corresponding items. That was a bit jarring and broke immersion. You can assign picture to items in the storygame editor - it's one of the drop boxes on the items page. Drop me a PM or make a forum post asking about it. Plenty of people on the site would be happy to walk you through it.
That being said, I do think you're a solid writer with the potential to make good games. Just make them a bit longer and spend more time building up to the climatic fight. Having the fight last longer than a single page is a good idea too.
Ultimately, I gave this game a 3/8. Not terrible, but lots of room for improvement.
on 10/30/2014 12:02:22 AM with a score of 0
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