"Too few ratings to be ranked"
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"walk in the park"
"A nice jog down the driveway"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
its like reading but worse
no just no
on 6/30/2016 4:45:36 PM with a score of 0
There are basic essentials in a story. One is good grammar. This story had none. I would sincerely recommend you delete this and make a MUCH better attempt at writing a story. This is by far the worst story I have read on this site so far. Try reading other stories for inspiration.
on 6/19/2016 1:52:22 PM with a score of 0
Hey. This thing was full of aids. But at least you tried :')
on 6/19/2016 5:55:04 AM with a score of 0
I'd like to throw this in a volcano, destroy the volcano, destroy the landform that the volcano was on, and burn the remains.
This is really, really awful. Not to be mean, but you have to be able to take constructive criticism.
on 6/18/2016 5:25:06 PM with a score of 0
Just kidding, this is true art.
A masterpiece, I would say.
But really, it's horse shit mixed with AIDs, leukemia, progeria and malaria.
And a side of dysentery. You can never go wrong with dysentery.
on 6/17/2016 6:40:18 PM with a score of 0
Free point. Useless otherwise.
on 6/17/2016 3:35:45 PM with a score of 0
Me: Yay, I guess?
on 6/17/2016 2:59:02 PM with a score of 0
Thanks for the point?
It does seem like you put a small amount of effort in, enough to make me think you could write and actual story that wouldn't be deleted if you weren't going for 'random and intentionally awful' for whatever reason.
on 6/17/2016 8:46:29 AM with a score of 0
on 6/16/2016 11:10:21 PM with a score of 0
Free point! (Other than that, this storygame only caused me to scratch my head in confusion.)
on 6/16/2016 9:40:43 PM with a score of 0
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