Forensic Toxicology

Pretty solid game. I was actually invested in solving the murder. The author clearly has a solid understanding of forensic toxicology lol. Also, it's cool to see Ontario being represented in some CYS games.

I only have a few complaints. The first is that there wasn't really much in the way of character development. With something like this, obviously, narrative and characters take a back seat to the subject matter, but it was a little dry.

The second is a bit of a nitpick, but whatever; the "convict" option isn't really representative of how the court system works. A forensic expert wouldn't be able to unilaterally convict someone; the accused's defence council could hire their own expert, who would detect your fuckup. This could still be a bad ending; maybe your career gets damaged because you wasted the taxpayer's money.

The third is an easy fix. A lot of your dialogue tags are wrong. There are commas and periods all over the place. Review this article, please. https://thewritepractice.com/dialogue-tags/

Otherwise, that's a really solid game, and something to be proud of.

I liked the storyline a lot and found it really interesting to read.

Was an interesting storyline

Absolutely incredible. The detail and structure was astonishing. Very very well written and thought out.

This story is a bit underrated, probably because of the dreadfully dull title. The writing was pretty compelling, and especially enjoyable was the dialogue and policeman banter. I like whodunits, and this story is especially good at the procedural elements that other whodunit stories can be lacking in. If extended and developed, this story could have been a very good storygame. As is, it's a proof of concept, good demo, or first case in a full whodunit storygame.

it was okay

Decent story.

Impressive for a first story. You clearly did all your homework with the science jargon.
Can't wait for your next story!

Page 35 is unfinished or just screwed up

Good job for a first story, you seem to have done your homework with all the chemicals and tests.

Quick question
Are there meant to be links on page thirty five?

I hope to see more from you.