Player Comments on Ghost House

Even if this was your first storygame, I'm not holding back on this one. I feel offended by the sheer amount of abbreviations in this storygame. The one I saw the most was "thru", and that really irks me. This is a writing website, and such use if language is an insult to our community. Storygames like these need to go before they taint our site.

The writing is a mess, and I find it really difficult to focus on the storygame itself because of how poorly written it was. There wasn't even really an idea behind it at all. There no plot, so that makes this even worse. I hate storygames where I click two or three links and it's over, so that's dropping your rating as well.

Honestly, if I wanted to read shit like this, I'd just head over to Kingskills and have him write me a novel. I wouldn't be surprised if this dickfart of a storygame was actually written by him. Half of the words in this are spelled incorrectly, abbreviated in an annoying way (like you're texting your friend and you're so lazy you don't feel like typing the whole word), or just completely unrecognizable. Grammar is also a big issue and this needs to be fixed immediately.

I'd just like to add the fact that adding an option to kill myself is just retarded.

1/8

Not good. Very very not good.

This "storygame" is a mess. Grammar and punctuation are horrible, and it completely distracts from whatever the story should be. This is written like it is supposed to be funny, but it's not. AT ALL.

Overall, story is bad and probably not even worth the effort I put into this review.

THIS IS TERRIBLE end of story

It's alright. That's the word I'd use to describe it. You need to use better grammar PLEASE. That would give you a better rating. I found myself skipping words while reading. It's not bad, but not great.

Killed myself at any chance I got. Great game you got here. :)

Love how like the second option you get ever is to kill yourself...

Grammar errors. I liked the humor. The story needed more details in order not to be confusing. Perhaps more choices could have been offered.

Man I would have killed myself too. Reading that was awful.

Oh God. Please proofread and edit. The spelling, punctuation, and grammar are bad enough that they impair the reader's ability to understand the text.

Lots of good humor, I believe this probably the only story that I wanted to find all the deaths in because they were so funny. There are some spelling and grammar errors but nothing to egregious. There isn't much here but what is here is pretty good.

And the entity opens a dimensional door, sucking the house and the characters into another world..to be continued... Way too short, but it was good enough for a snack.

I kept killing myself xD

Not bad for a first story, make it longer and it could get a 5 or 6/8.

i kept killing myself, but that was the best part of the game due to the funny endings.

A bit too random for me. It was okay but I didn't really get it.

Terrible grammar and spelling. Not much of a storyline and what was with all the options to kill myself?

Could do some improving in parts.

I already died... phooey.

I enjoyed it, there are a few mistakes but nothing which would spoil it :] just keep at it! And just keep writing!

Better than my first storygame

A proofreading would have helped since there were quite a few capital letters where there shouldn't be or lack of capital letters where they should. Personally I don't think you should have asked people to rate kindly because this was your first game. Generally, I find if someone's a good writer, their story games will be good regardless of whether it's their first game or their last. I didn't think this game was bad though, just could have been better.

I won first try, so yeah, 5/8

it ia like predator from aliens vs predator. ohh fuck me, god i like to smell nasty feet, i love being gay like all the world

I actually liked this one a lot.XD It was hilarious in my opinion, and the kill myself option was hilarious. The death scenes were quite funny, and I had fun getting every ending.^_^ Nice job!

this was so fun I cant beleave a pig was there and i like it alot

Creative, but it just didn't do it for me.

um.......not sure what that was. needed grammar. too many capitals.

love it but I relly wish it would not give ya th opshin to kill ya self

Strange story at first. At times it seemed I was talking to myself a little too much. I was engulfed by the door...I thought that was very creative. Good story.

good story
Also, dont ask if people want to kill themselves, they're trying to win, not die (unless thats the point ;P)
Nice job

Not bad, but a tad linear. Work on that.

Why does the story keep giving me the option to kill myself? That seems rather counterintuitive. Your "Priesthood" game was better written, but as a first effort, this seems better than many of the others on this site.

I think its definatly more than a 4, its awesome! and in some parts funny, "heck if im going to let it get on chewy..."

This is both scary and funny, a different kind of narration, but I like that in a story. Not bad for a first story.

Not bad at all :D

Some nice potential here, nearly clever endings with twists. Like Seth said, the writing could use some work. It looks to me like you didn't revise/edit before you published, and it would be much better if you did. Plot a little thin (why does a ghost hunter have no idea what to do?), but decent for a first effort.

As a first game, it's not too bad. There's some definite effort, but the writing could be polished up quite a bit.

i didnt care for the constant "kill yourself" option.

Not too bad of a story, but very linear. Most of the reasons for death were a tad random. Of course as a first game, it's not that bad.