Player Comments on Lost Keys

The following is one of the actual endings to this game: "I've decided that you don't deserve to play this game. Go away."

Whoever wrote this must have thought themselves quite humorous for all the random story elements they threw in in an attempt to make the story funny. I'll admit I did laugh at one point, but only because the author spelled vengeance wrong. When the author tries to go all self-aware and meta like their story is the Stanley parable I began to lose interest.

Lolrandom story games are kind of like those round-robin exercises you did in English class where the story started out with one idea, but then veers off a cliff and never looks back so by the time you get your original story idea back it is completely unrecognizable. I feel like there were some missed opportunities the author didn't notice. There was no option for me to hook up with my ex nor was there an option for me to live a clean life. The story forced me to become a criminal and beat up Robin Williams!

Like I said this story was very random, and it seemed like the person who wrote this was just having fun. However, that does not translate into a story worth reading as I began to lose interest once some of the links started overlapping with previous choices. The story needs more plot and less humor. I wasn't invested in the main character and the story seemed to punish you for not doing what the author wants you to do which is go steal some cars and blow up locksmiths I guess.

It's not that bad at all, though it is rather random toward some of the ending. It's pretty well known around here that random deaths that give no warning as to what may happen in the near future is annoying and not appreciated.

The grammar is terrible. As I've said in almost every review, proofreading is very important to any written work, and should be taken seriously. It's good to get help from some friends if needed, so that you can have more input and a better story overall. You could always just check out the links on my profile as well, which can help with your storygame immensely.

I think a bit more description is needed, because the story feels bland and isn't very interesting at all. Every story needs a backstory with information that's useful and enhances the experience for the reader. The pages are short and have only a few sentences and sometimes only a few words that's are harmful to the rating that will be received.

3/8

The grammar wasn't the worst in the world, but it also wasn't anything to necessarily applaud. The biggest problem was the syntax, most notably the overuse of the simple sentence. Simple sentences should be spread out in a piece of writing and used mostly for emphasis or when delivering a punchline. Using four to five of them in a row makes it feel like reading a children's book for beginner readers.

There were a couple good jokes in here, I'll admit that, but the majority of the humor relied on just being random. Randomness isn't funny, it's just...random. Sure, standing up in a lecture hall and yelling, "potted plant," at the top of your lungs might get you a few laughs, but if you kept jumping up and yelling random things, you would grate nearly everyone's nerves. It's the same when writing stories. Sure, a random event or two can be funny if used correctly, but otherwise it's just annoying.

Overall, grammar was mediocre, there was a massive overuse of simple sentences, and the humor was more annoying than funny. The author has potential, but I'm giving this story a 2/8

Fever dream ong

This is a fun, zany little story. It reminds me of another I played called 'The Postie Rips It Up'. Basically, they are both very chaotic and short, with plenty of weird and wacky dialogue options. I love this!

This crap is so funny I give it an 8, I don't care about anything else, it's just too funny.

not the best

This is indeed quite a simple story, but there are certainly some things that can be learned from this story for those looking to write stories here on this site. Yes, this is a simple story, but even a simple story can be expanded and detailed. When people read stories here, they really want to be transported from their current life and into another place and sometimes another time. That’s why people read, in general. So to help them reach that place, rich, detailed descriptions can be included. Something as simple as the first page where you stop for gas could be over 1,000 words of detail. You could add information about the looks of the gas pumps, the dust on the pumps, the spinning of the dials if it is an old pump, or the brand-new digits on the new pump. You could add information about the number of pumps and what other cars might be at the pumps. There could be smells of oil and gas. You could describe the signs in the windows and the current sale on “the coldest beer in town.” Even in very simple instances, there is always more that you can describe and show, and the more detail like that you can include, the more the reader will be transported into the story and out of their boring life.

Achievements:
- Stole a car
- Broke into a store which wasn't locked
- Beat up a guy I'd never seen before
- Drove around in a Ferrari like a boss

Regrets:
- Never found my fucking keys.

Wha?

There really is no way to win this game without committing a crime. The locksmith ate me for some reason.

The randomness of life is present in this game.

Random and funny.

it was jst too weird for me

Story is linear and well, I sort of got a meh feeling from it.

I loved the random humor at points, but it could be longer.
6/8
I liked it!
:D

Blame Hoffman.

witty randomness and really funny... i loved it. Also, i won, which makes me like the game more. i cant imagine why

FUNNY!!!

funny

Way too short. WAY too short. Yeah...

Lol the ending I got was pretty funny and made up for anything else I was going to say xD

Seth says MEH!!! Random, but I find myself starting to like random stories. Nice story. 3/8

Aww man, I love your sense of humor, you have a direct line to my funny bone!^_^ The flagpole option really made me laugh, and when you decide to " scuba" dive.8 out of 8!!! Here, have a cookie!^_^ Now eat it before it turns into a radioactive monster. DX

Very witty,the writing style is weak.....You got 5 points for wit....

...if he is an olympic medalist then why he works as a locksmith...?...?

ok

Just had to add, the witty randomness grew on me quickly! Some of the writing and choices are so ridiculous, I laughed until it hurt! Good job!

Wow, pretty darn random, but I enjoyed myself regardless!

not that funny

Remember kids, when you have a problem solve it with violence. You'll be driving a new ferrari in no time. Why is it I laugh at the stupidest random things? Maze Man, you never fail to make me laugh.

8/8 for me! This was great, I think I tried everything in it, including the two different ways to win (kind of the same, but a bit different) and all of the choices, including the death ones. It was really fun and funny as hell I had a great time reading this, thanks!

great game!

Linear, but a very funny and entertaining story.

By the way, why does the Locksmith eat me?

lol, this story is hilarious.

He ATE me?

Strange, but kinda fun. Extremely random, this would work better if the writing were more descriptive.

If you didn't have superpowers, how'd you get up there in the first place?

Very strange, but reasonably fun. Could work on some writing and more descriptions, as well as story.

I don't get the keys part.

he ate my keys?!?! lol funny. not too varied but still good.

Pretty good. Mildly entertaining.

what the.........

Crapidoodledoo this game is more fun then poo!

Awesome, but not as good as your others!

Hilarious. (Danm I said that. Stop being funny, I dont like giving out good scores but you forced me to) Fine: an amazing score of 8/10

MAKE MORE! MAKE MORE!

Joseph Fetchen bites. The mall is better(I love my new car).

No real way too win. I don't want a Ferrari!!!!!

Truly awesome! Make it longer!

Hey Victor,great game it was very pleasurable.

yeah i won! i won! the real way.

man are your games good and funny.

Fun game. I enjoyed playing it.

lol. great game! you should make another about the guy who lost his ferrari. and so the cycle continues...

I got shot in the head with a Magnum. Just like real life...

Mazeman! COMIC GENIUS. I love the way you have those weird and wacky endings and sneak in celebrity insults. This game should be featured, just to show what creative minds can whip up with this.

Pretty funny. By the way, if anyone has a green fence, could I borrow it? I need to tie my shoe.<br>

u can win the game by dying, omg

Not bad, but not gta.<br>Fast paced and good length, but seems to lack coheison and real thought (except for the bit with your ex)

I liked this game. Long and funny. How could you mistake a scuba suit for a sousaphone?

yey. a ferrari.

I own two bears.<br>One is pink?

THAT GAME WAS SO COOL

Ok I really beat the game this time but. Disreagurd what i say below. This is why Mazeman is cool. Even though the end is...damn

Solostrike this is why I hold you in high regaurd

quick and funny read. Thanks for the laughs.

And variety! Sweet, got the ferarri.

Gahh! I got eaten by the locksmith. hehehe

The game was funny, reminds me of Tommy Boy when he broke in(:

Fun game! HOw about another?

I had fun with this one. Many different routes. Mazeman is a genius.

this is a cool game. there are many different ways to play--some long, otheres short. Mazeman's games are funny and fun to play. keep it up mazeman!

Ok then...............

Hey Rob i'm glad you liked the game, how old are you and why are you here?

it was cool

this game will leave you laughing till the end. many differnet endings, none of which are boring

This game rocked! I recommend it!