mcdonalds escape

Oh yeah, one more thing. Why the fuck is this in the school based category.

Just stupid, worse than your find the exit game.

Once again lacking full sentences and the grammar!... Oh the grammar.
I could tell right away this would be bad. The game is so short and it really doesn't matter that you're at McDonald's. Honestly being at mcdonalds does not contribute to the story at all. You could just be going on a walk and someone starts chasing you. Same game.

And this one page really makes me pissed. "You run, but there's an obstacle."

For the love of god! What is the obstacle!!? I can tell you put about five minutes into this game. Ye know your game sucks when you publish it a day after you join the site.

And finally, I know I'm sounding harsh. But this critique is necessary to make you a better writer. Please do not publish unless you know you put the time and the effort to make a really good game. But for now 1/8.

Just...flat-out bad. I'll be frank with you. The grammar hurts my eyes, the story is undeveloped... Why am I at McDonald's? Where did this clown come from? Who am I? Where did I find that pizza?
1/8.

What is this shit?

Bugger off, learn to write, and for the love of God, DON'T reproduce!