Medieval Adventure

This game has potential. I liked the framework of the adventure and the ability to gain items and allies along the way.

It would have been vastly improved if there was more than a single line of description on each page. As it stands, the story's quite bare, and the lack of pictures means there's not much there to engage the reader. I zoomed through it in probably less than five minutes. Still entertaining, but not engaging.

Also, the fact that a 'team of men' is presented as an item with the picture of a bag implies a rather grisly way of taking them with you.

4/8

There are lots of drawbacks of this story. It could be really interesting, but there's no characterization, or plot for that matter. I'm a knight. That's all I know. That and I have enough gold to throw around whether I take the gold from the orcs or not. There's a point where it says something along the lines of "You tell the man your story" and then he is so moved, that he lends you his help in the form of militia. That's great. Do we get to be in on this moving story? There are also bugs such as you save the girl, and she follows you, but nothing is said about her again. Also nothing is said about the 'message' you have for someone in the castle. Or near the castle. I can't remember. These are just some things you might want to consider expanding on, in order to make a better story.

too short, some things look like links but don't let me click on them, and it just repeats forever until you give up. fun enough, but not really good.

Quite entertaining. The large amount of action made me want to keep playing. Just a tip; don't make it sound so rushed. To do so, add parts of the story line between choices. Overall more fun than homework.

... Well, for such a short game, that was extremely repetitive. The whole game can be summed up with:

You see bad guys. What do you do?

A. Fight them
B. Run away

... Rinse and repeat about five times.

Short story with a good setting.
Dissapointing

very,verrrrry short my man

it was a decent game if you were to make it a little longer then this then i would play again

Very nice adventure indeed. Some spelling errors, but they didn't affect the experience. All in all, I enjoyed this adventure.

I found a link that led to a page that had no links and said "This is a new page."

This seemed pretty lazy, you should check your storygames before you publish them.