Player Comments on Medieval Adventure

This game has potential. I liked the framework of the adventure and the ability to gain items and allies along the way.

It would have been vastly improved if there was more than a single line of description on each page. As it stands, the story's quite bare, and the lack of pictures means there's not much there to engage the reader. I zoomed through it in probably less than five minutes. Still entertaining, but not engaging.

Also, the fact that a 'team of men' is presented as an item with the picture of a bag implies a rather grisly way of taking them with you.

4/8

There are lots of drawbacks of this story. It could be really interesting, but there's no characterization, or plot for that matter. I'm a knight. That's all I know. That and I have enough gold to throw around whether I take the gold from the orcs or not. There's a point where it says something along the lines of "You tell the man your story" and then he is so moved, that he lends you his help in the form of militia. That's great. Do we get to be in on this moving story? There are also bugs such as you save the girl, and she follows you, but nothing is said about her again. Also nothing is said about the 'message' you have for someone in the castle. Or near the castle. I can't remember. These are just some things you might want to consider expanding on, in order to make a better story.

I drank from a pond and now I'm here.

Good immersive game!

it was a good story, easy to understand and other games could have more development

I think it's great but it could use more options

Very cool

good for you...to poop on (too BORINGGG)

It's okay... I guess...
I mean, it's well written, but borig. There isn't much of a story, let alone, lore. However, it's a good idea using items in-game. My recommendation is to put the kight through a perilous journey against a dragon. (maybe add a plot twist later on). Thanks.

The game is cool

too short, some things look like links but don't let me click on them, and it just repeats forever until you give up. fun enough, but not really good.

Quite entertaining. The large amount of action made me want to keep playing. Just a tip; don't make it sound so rushed. To do so, add parts of the story line between choices. Overall more fun than homework.

... Well, for such a short game, that was extremely repetitive. The whole game can be summed up with:

You see bad guys. What do you do?

A. Fight them
B. Run away

... Rinse and repeat about five times.

Short story with a good setting.
Dissapointing

very,verrrrry short my man

it was a decent game if you were to make it a little longer then this then i would play again

Very nice adventure indeed. Some spelling errors, but they didn't affect the experience. All in all, I enjoyed this adventure.

I found a link that led to a page that had no links and said "This is a new page."

This seemed pretty lazy, you should check your storygames before you publish them.

bad

This game is just horrible. Should be for boredom problems only.

Nice game, though it should be a little bit longer.

Blank pages. Fix those, and it might be pretty good-ish.

Incomplete, blank pages, lacked detail

Amazing work

It was just boring. Grammar mistakes. Barley any content

Very little detail, less than a sentence on every page I encountered. Needs work.

Too short.

I got to a blank page!

Much too short

Too short, and there is no detail at all! I mean like, what happened to the girl, and I'm a bookworm so I know when there should and shouldn't have detail.

It was okay but it was short and lacked detail.

It was okay. The basics are there but this needs to be fleshed out into a story with background information etc. At the moment it is simply a series of actions.

Develop the plot and describe the scenes more and you'll have a decent story game.

Badly written. Lack any details on plots and other stuff.

Not a lot of plot or closure...

Meh :P

Worst thing and really
Really

Good good

an awesome game

I guess it is kinda good

Not enough action for me. I need thrillers and longer story lines. I don't just want a couple of lines and then choices that don't even work. If this is your first time, I can suspect this, but if this is your second, review your first stories comments and learn the positives and negatives of the story.

Done already?

It ends very abruptly and is very badly written. The items could have pictures too.

That game was so cool!

nice little game :) needs pictures though

It was alright for a game of 2004, when there wasn't any cat porn fan fictions. Basically, for the standards set in 2004 - it's an alright game. Today - 10 years later - it wasn't very good.

It wasn't good, either.

That wasn't bad.

...What?

you have an outline for a story but no character building or description to support it at all.

Interesting but wish it lasted longer...

It was okay, but the story and characters weren't very good at all. It was also very short. Not a bad quickie though.

Needs way more. Jumps around without any plot to make sense. And 15 mins to defeat hundreds of soldiers? More effort and this idea could be great.

2/8.

it was ok, could have been longer and have a better flow...

Wasn't much thought, no action and what were the items for?

Uhh... It's really, really weird. I mean I don't think there was a page on the whole game that had more than a line of writing on it, but for some reason I still found it kind of fun.

What were the items for? O.o

Seth says MEH! Too short.

Well, it was ok, but you need more description in your sentances. By the end I only read the links, they gave about as much desciption as the text. And what was that about a message for a castle?

Awesome Does Not Accept!
First of all, it's not even done. (Go into pub at one point led me to a blank page.) I also didn't really understand what I was doing, and I never really delivered the message to the castle? I hope you or someone makes a longer version of this though because look at my Super Sonic Bros. Series. Those took me a lot of time to make, although they are not the best. I never got to use the items though.
I liked the effort though. If you have any questions, ask away.

Next to no detail on the pages. A little hint; if it only takes five minutes (or less it looks like) to write a page, it's not good enough.

It was good

no way to die

Way too short, there is no way to lose/die. The pages are like, one sentance and there are only like 2 choices. We have stuff in our inventory but we can't even use them, so why have them?

u earn items but there is no where to use them!

What? 3/8

I was mildly amused.

This game was too shallow and short.. and like everyone else says the choices were short and there was like no way to die in this game at all... I mean seriously.. what are you eight?

Amazing game

needs expansion

I can't like it or hate it.

It was so boring I didn't even read the choices.

Really? One sentence per choice? I'd say it needs some work.

Very confusing at points but very fun.

little short but I found it fun to play it several times

Short and little detail. Feels more like a testing story than a finished one, some more details and a few more choices and this would be greatly improved.

elaberate on the events, make the pages longer and you may have a great story

I won and thats what matters. Put some variables into it next time.

PUT IN STORYLINE!

Cool game, but... the story: why doesn't it exist?

Not many options, and the setting isn't displayed though. Too linear.

Fun game, though pretty short and linear and you should have used Variables, but still a cool game.

There needs to be more background to the story for the reader to have any sense that there is meaning to his actions.

mhm, no. Bad Game.

too easy.

there crap sorry to say u need o make tham like runescape

I like how I choose my own adventure. Though there were many points lacking like any storyline. Also, there are only two links on a page. The game is far from linear but it is more or less like a pryamid.

Hmm beat it this time. And won by killing the evil caravan...

lol, this time i let them kill the girl, gave them my money, talked to the leader, sed it was urgent, and gave up... 93 eggs! and what is your quest?

I thought this game was pretty cool. Kept me busy at the blacksmith shop between customers. Oops! Gotta go sharpen some swords. Wait ... what's that dark cloud? Ahhhhhh!!!!!

Good game.<br>6 out of ten.

im not sure on the back story for this game but it was fun. good job.

What a crappy ending, you win by running away?<br>

Not bad but the choices weren't very tough. Also I found the plot and narratino lacking. It is a good length however, and decent for killing some time

Good game put pics on it make more.

It was a good trulfull game about what a knight would do

i ho[pe the unholy king is better....

aww man i was so cloase an died poo!

well it was ok kind of quick i beat in 1 in 1/2 minits

yeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa i won, i think....<br>Good game

i liked the game. it was easy to play and you thought it out . ill defanitely play it again

ive played this game a few times before and its fun but its short.<br>

its a great game. so much fun and has a great plot<br>

I think I'm gettin the hang of this!

I've got to try again, with my bow this time!

I thought this was a very cool game. I'm going to recommend it to my friends. Ive played it a couple of times, but i only won it once.

I made this game, and I am making a new one. The new one has a better plot and i think better gameplay. Not published yet tho, I plan to finish it soon.

Hey this game got really good! lol! Awesome! Needs some pics though, but the story line is really cool, and there are a lot of options. Needs a bit more of a story line maybe, but congrats on making a cool game!

now that is fun

it was a cool game and had a good story to it<br>

Guys, if you hate the game, thats fine. Just please stop cussing.

U NEED TO FINISH THIS GAME SO I CAN BEAT IT

Meh, it's okay. Pretty good game, has potential to be great if you put more work into it!

Ok<br>SO how do you win????