Player Comments on Rainy mood

I liked it, but it was very sad ;-;

I could feel emotion for these characters, because of the backstory and the character development. Despite this being very short, it was a good storygame because you had enough detail to keep me entertained.

There were multiple grammar and spelling mistakes, such as:
"And this were her last words."
I think you meant, "and these were her last words."

You should have made it longer, because what little you wrote, I enjoyed. I think this storygame is kind of underrated honestly, but I guess the not so good rating is because of the length and stuff :P

Also, on the first page, I have no idea what i'm choosing, so it's a guess the correct choice or lose thing.

4/8.

This was very short and had little explanation, however I made sure to check for every single page to get each little bit of information.

The premise was interesting enough I that I really wanted to know more, even while I fully understand that it would probably be a let down if I actually knew more of the story.

I never rate games this short highly but yours has gotten the highest rating for a story of this length I have given as the writing, the style and the incompleteness all worked for it.

Next time, if you can, please write a much longer story game as I would love to read more of your work.

This is interesting but too short, it's a promising lead in to what could be a larger story, after this sort of prologue you could move onto "Three years ago... Chapter One". I'm a English teacher so I'm bias into giving you extra points just because I know how hard it can be to write in a second language and you do it very well. The story is on the sad side and seems rather personal, a happy ending is not compulsory of course but even a half-imagined rays of hope might offset the bleakness a little? :) 6/8

5/8 - kinda confused but also liked it. It was a bit sad as well.

It was very...Linear

This is literally just a short story. Nothing about this has choices except to just stop early or start again. You aren't even told what the heck you did. The only thing that saves this from a rating worse than a 4 is the writing.

I don’t really have much to say. It was sad. I got the implication on why the relationship was screwed up at the beginning of the story or I assume I did.

The story doesn’t add much context to the situation though or any exploration of trying to achieve a better outcome. You could even have made it where these paths end similarly to the main one you’ve got here that once the damage in a relationship is done it’s permanent.

Only comments are I’d like to have seen more because what you had written was good.

Omg this is so sad but also so good

... What the fuck did the guy do?

For how short it was, the mood building and development was excellent. Of course I'd like to see this longer and more in depth, but it's pretty good as it is.

The characters are believable and you can really put yourself in the protagonist's shoes. The dialogue makes you want to know more about what happened and what led up to it. I loved the short pages that conveyed so much emotion with so few words.

One of the things I didn't like was, of course, the spelling. I noticed you said English isn't your first language so I'll cut you some slack.

Overall, I like it a lot. It could do good to make it longer, but I like it in its current state. I'd leave a better rating, but with the spelling issues and the shortness of the story, I can't. Good job though.

4/8

So, this was a good piece, with good writing and story.
Some nice little improvements are considering the swears. It's not so nice to contain those words in a romantic story, and I would suggest censoring them.
Another thing that I want to mention is it was very sad. I cannot find a possible way to win her heart, so it's a bit hard for the reader.
The story was short, but considering I chose the shortest ones on purpose, it wasn't anyone's mistake. Some readers who like short stories (like me) would really appreciate this one.
Overall this was good and for a little phrase to describe this story...
Good work :)

The ending was getting somewhere, but it should have gone further. I would have liked for something hard and long.

Since all this is based on something that hapened three years ago, I feel that maybe you should explain what happened three years ago? The stuff that you had was good, really. But I just ended feeling a little bit... confused.

wow. that's depressing. seriously?????? he couldn't leave her alone? creepy stalker of a guy.

Very touching. I would have wished if there were more options and the game was longer, but otherwise it was nice.

Interesting. You did an okay job of capturing emotion. Wished there were more of a backstory and some character development, which would have made this much more engaging. You're writing is pretty decent as well. Short, but I was intrigued.

Christ. This was heavy with emotions and I was really drawn into it by the end of the longest route. I think it would be nice if you could actually change things between you, because every single route was literally pain. Which I didn't mind so much, but...they're all bad endings, effectively, just in varying degrees of internal suffering.

Some more background information would be nice but I get what kind of atmosphere you were striving for and the overall effect was one which gripped me to the end.

Cool

Lack of details.

Should I what? No, information on what chose I am making.

weird

I guess it was okay. It had some plotholes.

Well..good for a first try

Really nice. I liked the lack of information and how you can find out more hints to character backstory by losing in different ways.
5/8.

I liked it. They were few grammar mistakes, which happily surprised me, and the story, while quite good, could be a little longer, perhaps add slight descriptions of the surroundings such as the house's front door color or the style of it, something small. Overall it was a pleasant read.

i didn't get it. Try to be more foward. In my pack, we are completely foward and expect it.

soooooooo what hapened

Sooooo what happened?

Numbers ten and lower are typically typed out.

Wish I knew more about the backstory.

What is this?

Interesting, will we ever find out qwhat the main character did to the girl?