Player Comments on The Life Of A Bull Terrier

Well, let's start with a quote from the beginning.
"You wake up. What do you do next?"
That is the most linear and undetailed beginning to a story I have ever seen in my life. There were hardly any details in the storygame, in fact.

The writing wasn't extremely bad, but it was boring. I mean, there's not even any meaningful choices. Despite there being a lot of links, there's very little branching.

The choices didn't even do anything as far as I know. You can just do nearly every link and end up back in the same place. This storygame is like going in a figure eight over and over again.

This really had no plot at all. It had no goal, no real character development, not much detail at all, a really linear beginning, a linear storygame overall, and a lack of meaningful choices and branching.

I'll give this a 1/8, please try harder.

Well on the bright side I've now experienced life as a Bull Terrier and I am glad that I can go back to being a person now. A plot or at the least some little doggy adventure would make it more appealing but it would still be a story about dogs doing dog things. I think it is a good story for the right readership but that readership is not especially mainstream, in terms of craftsmanship (writing quality, structure etc) it was very good :)

The main plot of this story is basically you just being a dog and doing dog-like things. Although this is a seemingly okay-ish plot, I don't think it really qualifies as a "story".

This doesn't have a rising action, climax, falling action, and conclusion. In fact, the only part of a real-story plot would be the exposition, only because it tells you that you are a dog owned by fantaspray1. And not even that is descriptive. The main fault of this story is that its overly repetitive. This whole story just has you clicking links to do dog-things, like pooping, sleeping, eating, which leave you off at "You did this, you are done, do something else!" As a reader, I can't say I found this story amusing. Because you have no way to win, or lose for that matter, I can't say this qualifies as a game. It has no real challenge, just live life as a dog. Since there is no challenge to this "storygame", we can conclude that there are no real choices to do, because it doesn't affect the story one measly bit. As there are no choices, there are no consequences, and come on, what type of game is that?

The writing is not very descriptive, with only an average of one, less than ten words long sentence on every page of this story. Literally, this is the description if you choose to bark at the next-door-neightbor's dog: "That dog is very annoying...". And that's it. So, you can see how lack of context this story has.

I don't feel this has the qualifications of a storygame. If it does somehow qualify as one, then I feel that it is a waste of time. No offence to the writer or anything.

3/8

I liked it even if it was a short read with a little description. I mean it was simple and the infinite loopback links were annoying, but it was amusing at times.

I don't know why but one of the links was broken and the lack of an expanding story like a dog's journey or maybe exploring the dog's relationship with humans could have boosted it to a higher rating.

fun but add more

First off: I liked the fact that there were "rather" more options to choose from - does not mean that I liked the qualitiy of your options, though. That is the one "positive" point.

It is always strange to read a story from the perspective of an animal (tough there are exceptions - that is not one of them; and I dont know exceptions myself at the moment).
Problem is: We really cant be sure what they are thinking exactly, but you are the writer and that is your choice (Although, do you think that a dog knows what a pastry is?)
There is obviously a lack of desire and interest in bringing your small little world some much needed life. Dogs are heavily dependent on their smelling sense (normally), but you dont bring it up even once! Believe me, that is a big flaw in a book with a dog as the main protagonist.
I wont bring up the lack of plot and meaningful character, because that is quite obvious.

I think the story was not really a story. The descriptions seemed like they were put together with a minimal effort. I'm sure dogs can use their senses and it would have been better if this did not start with such a blunt sentence. Instead, it could have been a description of how your sleep was as a dog! Yet, this was very cute and short. I wish it was a little bit longer with more descriptions.

it is lazy and not very creative its a pile of poop

It's stupid and boring the best part was the end because I was done with that crap

'You do a poo' about sums up the whole story.

Very sweet :)

Cute, short and sweet. I'll play again :)

dogs are fun 10/10

Nice, simple, cute. This would be good if you were feeling a little anxious and wanted something to do. Puppies make everything better!

Cute game!

Meh.

Umm.....

A little unusual for my liking. But it is good because you've used real life ideas to make a story.

The diction is simplistic and repetitive. Seeing as how this is about a rather lazy dog, the simplistic word choice is forgivable. However, I would really like it if you would work on the repetitiveness issue.

It was very simple and consist of repeating boring choices for no reason.

The back garden page glitched and left me outside. If you want to allow the reader to get back inside -every- time, you can't use "previous page" as the destination or you risk trapping them outside. Link it directly to where they're trying to go.

Your dog must be awesome!

About right for the title. Got any more up your sleeves?

D'awww... I find this game pretty fun! :3 Maggie seems like a trouble-maker, at least the way I played the game, hehe.. *Stuffs mouth with crossaints* DE-ISHIS!

If this is your dog, then he is one of a kind.