Welcome to Camp

Good setup and good idea for a story. I like the first page and the tense setup to get me fully immersed in the story. I liked that I had options from the start, but one was confusing – if I talked to both guards, I could no longer go to the admissions office, I had only one option and that was to go to the train station. Of course, that directed me back to the admissions office, anyway, but still.

It was interesting that I could go back to the train station and talk with the old guy a second time. I thought it would be a loop, but it was not, so that was quite nice. There were a couple tense issues with verbs here and there that were jarring as the tense jumped from past to present, but not often enough to really put too much of a dent in the story.

It was a neat and fun story. I liked the pace and the options that kept me entertained for a bit. I did like the different options and was pleased to find that there was more than one way to escape. Sure, it could have been longer, but it was certainly nice for what was there, and it did feel like a complete story. Thank you for sharing this story with the site.

This was pretty good :) The writing was superb and there was a obvious effort put into this to make it quite enjoyable, which it was. I wouldn't mind reading a continuation after that ending though :c

I'm going to give it one more look before I pass final judgement concerning the score. I for one love the twisted second look at animal crossing. You had good sized pages and decent writing with minimal typos. None the less it could have used some more proofreading. Consequences were not always very logical. For example, working with Cody would actually draw more attention to what he was doing. I don't see how it would keep him safe. What dragged the story down the most is the linearity. The player doesn't get to control story progression very much. Really not bad though. I'd like to see another.

Fun good job

Stinky

ok so I retried the game and Cody and I escaped, but what happens now? We don't know where we're going and we could die out there.

Yay, I get to go home and tell everyone about Camp Happy Trails.

Nice setup for your story. The only problem is, there isn’t a problem! Good game, 7/8

Awesome and FUN game!Brings you joy and really fun to learn from your mistakes.......I almost died!

Not a good game