Player Comments on Zombie in house: 3:00

You almost sleep. Guy near you shout straight to you face "Dont sleep!!!"
And that’s a dead end page. Am I being too generous giving this linear garbage a 2?

In the words of Marlin the Clownfish:

"You know, you're really cute! But I don't know what you're saying!"

Oh boy... You apologized for your English at the start, I know, but at least learn some basic grammar before making a storygame. Other than the English, though, the characters barely had a personality, and there was one paragraph per page. I chose "go sleep" and there were no links, forcing the reader to go back. At least make a link that goes to the last page.

1/8 for me, sorry :(

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I see why apologize for your english.

Grammer errors almost everywhere
Short story
Practically no character development
The paragraphs were extremely short and uninteresting
Pointless Items
1/10 Would rather eat a rotten tomato

I have to give you props for putting the story up. Not many people have the guts to put up their stories, but you Sir are one of those few. This being said, I do have to say the story isn't all that good. For one thing, it jumps around from point to point without any kind of real plot. I went from having the option to sleep or talk to the guys in the car to falling into a room and being hit on the head with a falling gun. Another point which detracted any enjoyment is the grammar. I could barely understand was what going on for the 3 minutes it took to play your game.

Pretty good but grammar is bad

Please make a really long part two because I enjoyed it

It wasn't that bad although you could work on your English. I won't blame you too much on that as you are from Poland. I also think the maturity should go down, the only bad thing in there is the word "Motherfucker", it's not even gory. I think you could get higher ratings by unpublishing this and fixing it up a little.
-Icestorm

Its alright

not very long. doesn't make u think at all. to simple

I really don't think this should be "Appropriate for all ages." when it has a use of the word "Motherfucker" in it.

It's pretty cool but too short for a zombie story !

The story is not strong (because i could barely read it) your writing is good for someone from Poland but you got the idea from Resident Evil that slightly makes it a small insult to certain peoples intellect but it is fairly fun.

I really happy you tryied you best. keep up you work!
anyway, sorry for bad english

Not bad! Your English is definitely better than my Polish ^_^

It's a good plot. I enjoyed it, even though the grammar is wretched. Sadly, I can't, with good faith, rate the game high with this many errors.
So basically, it's a good game, and with a little tweaking, can get a higher score. 4/8

it was ok other than the bad grammar, but i can't balme u for that.

No care of grammar as well as vocabulary. But at least you have tried wonderfully.

nice read

Not bad for someone who's just learning English.

Not bad for a second language!

Even though the spelling and grammar was a little bad, you did a great job considering you're Polish. I'm trying to learn French, and I know barely any articles haha. Other than that you wrote a good story.

you suck!!!!! at spelling... goodbye, you now have the aids virus

this was an interesting game with a fairly good plot. good job.

Fixed Seth, it is now fan fic.

Shouldn't this be in fanfic? I mean, Raccoon City, Umbrella Corporation, zombies. . .

Could be better, you need to brush up on your english, or i hope you don't find this rude, don't write until you do, or write stories in your native language and people know your writing it like that.

I'm no expert, but I'm pretty sure that this was...erm...inspired by Resident Evil. Also, I thought it was too linear.

E for Effort. . . Unfortunately, an E is below a D, and thus a fail.

really good and i liked it but it could be quite easy to ask an englishman for help with ur spelling

Not bad. I liked the use for items (although, the same could have been done without them really). The choice with zombies was hard for me, I died twice before getting passed them. It's just that Resident Evil has taught me to conserve ammo. Other than that, nice job. 4/8