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Two sentient dolls who remember previous lives as a prince and princess in another universe, go on a perilous quest across the United States to learn more of their origins. My first storygame so any constructive criticism is welcome. Now with 30% fewer typos! Thanks to Mizal for editing advice.
A teenage girl living on a Venus out of 1930's Pulp Science Fiction must search the planet with her robot tutor to find the killers of her parents.
A young man's coming of age as he navigates an underground fairy city where time runs slower and his hometown as it evolves into a metropolis over the centuries.
Recent Postsstuff about Quatrains on 12/11/2018 5:34:16 PM
Thanks for the shout-out, mizal. Don't know how much of an expert on poetry I am, but I appreciate your high opinion of me concerning such matters. I mostly limit myself to free verse.
The Eugenics Wars on 12/5/2018 7:33:46 PM
Gattaca was an interesting movie, but I still thought the scene near the end of the movie when whats-his-name challenges his genetically superior brother to a swimming race and the brother starts drowning was kind of dumb. The brother only starts drowning as proof for some trite argument being made by the screen writer that gene tailoring doesn't make the better person...or some trite Hollywood message movie crap. They already had the thing about Jude Law's genetically engineered character in the wheelchair. The swimming scene just made the movie idiotic. Well, that and the end when they all go to Saturn's moon of Titan while wearing three-piece-suits!
The One Who I'm Looking For on 11/28/2018 3:14:18 PM
I think this is nicely done with its declamation in each stanza building up to the dramatic crescendo. I only think you can replace "beacon" with a term and image less cliched. Other than that, this poem works rather well. I understand (at least in traditional sonnets from the Elizabethan and Jamesian periods) that the rhymes are supposed connect in such a way as to add up to an intricate conceptual tapestry...but then I was never very skilled at analyzing traditional sonnets. All told, I think this is a very skillfully constructed poem. Kudos.
In Memory Of The Great Banyan Tree on 11/28/2018 3:07:40 PM
I think this is a very well written poem. I really don't mind the line about the banyan tree standing like a problem because you expand on that simile that touches on the human condition. I particularly like the parallel between the dream tree at the end and banyan in the rest of the poem. There's some subtle use of metaphor here that delves into the psyche and the unconscious and the whole notion about how individuals interact with society as a whole.
Another Fantasy Question on 11/24/2018 10:21:11 AM
I think Tolkien was the first writer to use the term "orc" in the context of a fairy race. The way he had it in is Middle Earth stuff was that the original Dark Lord (Sauron's mentor) bred elves into an evil warrior race known as Orcs and some of the Orcs eventually found their way to the mountains and the caverns within and de-evolved into goblins. In Norse and Tuetonic Mythology, Goblins were the Dark Elves and there was no mention of Orcs. Tolkien took creative license where he saw fit, like with female Dwarves having beards so humans assumed there were only male Dwarves. The Norse thought of Dwarves as creatures of the earth (originally shaped from rock instead of clay) and that they were only one sex and, like Trolls, would turn to stone in sunlight.
Bonjour! on 11/14/2018 5:31:17 PM
Greetings and best of luck to you. World War I is a great topic. I can understand why that'd take you a while on the research-front. Writing your Zombie Apocalypse Storygame will give you some experience which will come in handy later when you do the Historical one. Be sure to read as many Storygames on this site so you can get a better idea as to possible options you might have in doing your own stuff.
Should Batman just freaking kill the Joker already on 11/13/2018 11:13:17 AM
He's my favorite! :)
Hey There! I'm.. A complete newbie. on 11/13/2018 11:08:53 AM
Welcome. The best advice I can give is to keep reading the different kinds of storygames to see what options are available. Storygames are usually in one of two categories: Interactive Story and Dungeon Crawl. The interactive story is more along the lines of the old Choose Your Own Adventure books, where you make choices to further a basic plot. The Dungeon Crawl is more along the lines of the old text-based computer games like Zork, where there is no overarching plot per-say, but a series of places you can move freely about in to collect treasure, find an important item, explore, ect. Between these two extremes, you'll find many storygames that fall somewhere on the spectrum. The more you read, the better you'll get the feel for how they are put together. Plus, you can always ask for help. There are plenty of seasoned veterans here who will gladly answer questions and give you feedback.
Howdy! on 11/7/2018 6:23:56 PM
Greetings and Felicitations, DragonClaw66! Hope you enjoy it here on the site. There's a wide variety of storygames (both of the Interactive Fiction and Dungeon Crawl type) to give you some ideas as to what's possible with this medium. Also, there are some articles here that will help you with things like punctuation and grammar and also give you tips on telling stories and developing characters. My advice is to just start reading the different storygames to get a feel for the whole shebang. Good luck and have fun!
Interesting comments 3 on 11/2/2018 3:37:44 PM
Well, I'm glad your work paid for it. Medical bills can be steep!