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Two sentient dolls who remember previous lives as a prince and princess in another universe, go on a perilous quest across the United States to learn more of their origins. My first storygame so any constructive criticism is welcome. Now with 30% fewer typos! Thanks to Mizal for editing advice.
A young man's coming of age as he navigates an underground fairy city where time runs slower and his hometown as it evolves into a metropolis over the centuries.
Recent PostsHi, everybody! on 10/13/2018 3:37:53 PM
Welcome. Hope you enjoy it here on this site.
My OCD and Ratings on 9/20/2018 6:18:40 PM
Okay, they reappeared. I'm not sure what's going on.
My OCD and Ratings on 9/20/2018 6:17:01 PM
I just checked my game and my ratings have disappeared! What the Hell?
My OCD and Ratings on 9/19/2018 5:04:00 PM
The use of Metaphor by Kerouac and Virgil on 9/19/2018 4:33:02 PM
Don't get me wrong...I LOVE Bradbury. "The Martian Chronicles" is one the of most perfect books about space colonization I ever read. Of course, there is the story where Mr. K wants to murder the astronauts from Earth using his gun that fires electric bees. I was always like...Now are those REAL electric bees, or just a metaphor for electricity? Or was he using a metaphor instead of a simile to create a kind of tension in the reader?
The use of Metaphor by Kerouac and Virgil on 9/19/2018 3:07:40 PM
For narratives, it's probably best to use metaphors (and also similes) sparingly. Use them when they can help create a useful image in someone's mind when a detailed and lengthy description would just slow the pacing down unnecessarily. Ray Brandbuy is usually a good example because he would use metaphors sparingly (but appropriately) in some of his stories. Other times, he didn't seem to know how to edit himself and the page is just dripping with purple! Good examples of how he used it sparingly are short stories like "The Dwarf" and "The Small Assassin". His novel "Fahrenheit 451," on the other hand, shows when he seriously needed to take a red pen to his own work. The scene at the beginning of the novel when the fireman Guy Montague has just come up from the subway and is walking down the street and is about to meet the teenage girl, Clarice, is about as purple as Prince's entire musical career!
I found this site at school on 9/19/2018 2:57:22 PM
Hey, Parker. Fellow Texan here. I'm from San Antonio. A bit older than you, though...graduated college in 1997! Have fun on this site. Feel free to try to write a storygame if you want. But take your time. It's never a good idea to rush perfection.
My OCD and Ratings on 9/19/2018 2:53:59 PM
I hope so.
My OCD and Ratings on 9/19/2018 2:53:47 PM
Thanks. That takes load off.
My OCD and Ratings on 9/19/2018 11:46:08 AM
Who all here thinks the ratings system for storygames is a bit disheartening? I keep checking the ratings of my storygame and worry whenever the score goes down. I think my priorities have gotten out of whack. The point of this site is about being creative and getting your stuff out there. I'm pretty sure my Obsessive Compulsive Disorder has encouraged me to dwell on something rather inconsequential. Or is it? If your ratings go down too much, does your storygame get pulled from the site?