mizal, The Apprentice Scrivener

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5/23/2017 10:02 PM

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"Don't tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass." --Anton Chekhov

I'm here on CYS primarily as a reader and reviewer. I have an interest in seeing good stories posted, and bad ones going away, and the site being a place readers can browse to reliably find quality work. I tend to be fairly busy during the week, but if you want general impressions or advice on a story or writing excerpt, feel free to PM me. (If you're new, just fyi getting advice and feedback is one of the things the Writing Workshop on the forums is for as well.)

Otherwise, past experience has taught me that the reason you're looking at my profile right now might be because I hurt your fragile feefees with critical remarks.


Haha I think Mizal has a gift for driving half-crazy members into full-fledged crazy :) - Will11

You made fun of something I am doing. That's not very nice. I want people to be nice. Please be nice. - some retard


Let me explain my approach to reviewing:

I said it just a moment ago, but I know words are hard, so I'll repeat: I'm here primarily as a reader and a reviewer. If I feel the thing I just read wasted my time, my review will reflect that.

A story, to be a story, needs an engaging plot, relatable characters and conflicts for them to overcome in a believable way. A rudimentary idea of pacing and structure and a creative idea or two thrown in the mix wouldn't hurt either! (Spelling, punctuation, grammar and proof reading are a given. Better to not publish at all if you can't even be bothered with that much.)

It's not any reader's job to pat you on the back for only failing to deliver in X or Y number of ways. When I see a story that's not a story, I rate it a one and move on. There are people happy to offer feedback, and you can write all you want for as long as you need, but once you hit that publish button you're throwing your work out into the wild and you'd better be sure it can stand on its own merits.

(Storygames with more focus on the 'game' part are rarer and have slightly different criteria, but they still need enough decent writing to hold them together, and above all need to be entertaining.)


Now, for all you kids just starting out, the Grammarly Handbook is a great resource, and above all I'd recommend you just read more books. Step away from comforting junk food like Warrior Cats a little while and challenge yourself by branching out to other genres, older books, and books above your age level. Whether you like them or don't like them, see if you can look at the author's choices from a meta level and identify why.

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Now You Gotta Deal With This S***

A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.

Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.

(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)

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Questions about copyright on 5/23/2017 9:46:23 PM
Published where?

Writing Prompts Week #16 on 5/23/2017 8:55:11 PM
Well jeez now I feel bad for not finishing my story, but I kind of lost motivation when the power went out Sunday and after that figured I wouldn't have time. I still need to do something with the outlines I had for last week and that statue picture from whenever. Guess I'll have plenty of writing exercises in June if I try playing catch up with all the threads I missed.

Hello kitty on 5/23/2017 7:36:39 PM
@Idontahvethebestlife I realize you're not a Warrior Cat so don't rush, but I didn't have any other threads for this. Your profile fascinates me, please elaborate. You'll find nothing but sympathetic listeners here. :)

A "report post" button. on 5/23/2017 7:32:23 PM
I would personally tag every one of your embarrassing puns, and so would everyone else. This would probably be more annoying to the admins then just suffering through them on their own, yes. There was an unusually long period where no one was around to deal with the spam yesterday, but most of the time there really is pretty much zero need to officially report a troll. I'm not sure why some people always panic and start tagging admins in the first place tbh. They'll see a bunch of new posts or threads with names like 'Endmaster is a meanie face' when they log in and until then we've all got a new toy to bat around if that amuses us.

Manchester Bombing on 5/23/2017 6:52:50 PM
I feel like I should be more upset too, I mean like I acknowledge that it's awful but it's just not the world stopping event it would have been 20 years ago. It took a long time but I think I'm finally just getting completely jaded about this kind of thing appearing on the news? It's been so gradual it's hard to tell for sure but it seems to me the news itself doesn't even dwell on tragedies anywhere near as long as it used to before jumping to something else. Though this one has an eight year old girl and association with a celebrity so that may give it some staying power. Anyway this sort of thing is a potential outcome in any large crowd or event now, honestly. It probably doesn't help that people are looking at their phones instead of the people next to them and just don't seem very aware of their surroundings half the time. But as far as security goes, security people are very very aware that this is a real threat, they're not just fucking around, they're doing their very best to spot anyone suspicious before it's too late. I'm not sure how much tighter security in these kinds of situations can realistically get before everyone is living in a dystopia.

Wiblander on 5/23/2017 6:21:19 PM
Romeo and Juliet having been brought up...somewhere in this thread, I was wondering whether anyone is planning to watch Still Star-crossed?

Manchester Bombing on 5/23/2017 6:14:23 PM

Manchester Bombing on 5/23/2017 6:13:29 PM
Hi, so uh, is this your first time seeing a news story this decade? I'm not sure what being an Ariana fan or not has do do with anything here, but fwiw I imagine ISIS probably isn't.

Manchester Bombing on 5/23/2017 5:37:37 PM
Heard about this a little earlier but wasn't able to get any details. (I was actually waiting to watch the local news because that's what I'm having to resort to at this point...) It's awful and I'm not sure what else there is to say. Terrorists are fucking evil, I'm just going to go out on a limb there with this controversial opinion.

A "report post" button. on 5/23/2017 4:40:53 PM
It's not that there's anything wrong with the basic idea, it's just I don't see the community as being big enough that any of this would get used as intended very often at all, and there are other, more important things JJJ would probably rather spend his time on first, even if he had time to update the site at all right now.