mizal, The Apprentice Scrivener

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3/26/2017 2:57 PM

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1 win / 6 losses


Lauded Sage


"Don't tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass." --Anton Chekhov

I'm here on CYS primarily as a reader and reviewer. I have an interest in seeing good stories posted, and bad ones going away, and the site being a place readers can browse to reliably find quality work. I tend to be fairly busy during the week, but if you want general impressions or advice on a story or writing excerpt, feel free to PM me. (If you're new, just fyi getting advice and feedback is one of the things the Writing Workshop on the forums is for as well.)

Otherwise, past experience has taught me that the reason you're looking at my profile right now might be because I hurt your fragile feefees with critical remarks.


Haha I think Mizal has a gift for driving half-crazy members into full-fledged crazy :) - Will11

You made fun of something I am doing. That's not very nice. I want people to be nice. Please be nice. - some retard


Let me explain my approach to reviewing:

I said it just a moment ago, but I know words are hard, so I'll repeat: I'm here primarily as a reader and a reviewer. If I feel the thing I just read wasted my time, my review will reflect that.

A story, to be a story, needs an engaging plot, relatable characters and conflicts for them to overcome in a believable way. A rudimentary idea of pacing and structure and a creative idea or two thrown in the mix wouldn't hurt either! (Spelling, punctuation, grammar and proof reading are a given. Better to not publish at all if you can't even be bothered with that much.)

It's not any reader's job to pat you on the back for only failing to deliver in X or Y number of ways. When I see a story that's not a story, I rate it a one and move on. There are people happy to offer feedback, and you can write all you want for as long as you need, but once you hit that publish button you're throwing your work out into the wild and you'd better be sure it can stand on its own merits.

(Storygames with more focus on the 'game' part are rarer and have slightly different criteria, but they still need enough decent writing to hold them together, and above all need to be entertaining.)


Now, for all you kids just starting out, the Grammarly Handbook is a great resource, and above all I'd recommend you just read more books. Step away from comforting junk food like Warrior Cats a little while and challenge yourself by branching out to other genres, older books, and books above your age level. Whether you like them or don't like them, see if you can look at the author's choices from a meta level and identify why.

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Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Thorough and consistent writing workshop contributions / excellent commenting.


Now You Gotta Deal With This S***

A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.

Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.

(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)

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A modernized guide to the forums. The path to internet popularity and happiness, and a few CYS specific do's and don'ts.

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I've got a better idea, it needs criticizing. on 3/26/2017 2:37:42 PM
Glad someone said it. I was half expecting to wind up with another Azure situation at this rate. I'm not really familiar with Reigns, but based on others' reactions, sounds like this plot might need to be put under fanfic.

Original or canon characters in fanfic? on 3/26/2017 8:56:24 AM
Hey, what's going on in this th-- Ugh, someone get the nerd spray.

I have no idea what i'm doing here on 3/25/2017 8:37:46 PM
Surprised no one's popped in with the usual greetings yet. Welcome to the site, have a look at some of the top storygames (wait you've already done that...), drop by the Writing Workshop for feedback and advice or the Creative Corner just for fun, and start small and don't rush when it comes to your first storygame. ...I think that covered most of it? Oh right, and don't be an alt or a troll. Those last two are important.

Good Morrow on 3/25/2017 8:31:47 PM
Hi, welcome to the site. Yeah, I understand your feelings about the Sage thing, I would have rather been a Marauder. Setting personal goals regarding specific people to crush is still perfectly doable, though. Anyway, I'd recommend spending some time browsing the top storygames, and then even if you're not planning to create any stories for yourself just yet, the Writing Workshop and Creative Corner are good places to practice and get feedback. The Parlor and Reading corner tend to get left kind of lonely, so by all means if you're more of a reader, feel free to start some discussions there.

hello on 3/25/2017 6:03:21 PM
I've been wondering about those too, but thought he may just be waiting for Monday to restart fresh since they've started creeping further into the week. He hasn't really been posting though so who knows. @Seto ?

A random cooking thread on 3/25/2017 11:06:25 AM
I know what over hard is, it's a crime against both the egg and the chicken who made it. That's how my grandpa has to have his and as a result I barely consider him human. Though he also views putting hot sauce on eggs as a weird 'Mexican' thing, so don't expect to bond with him over shared disgusting eating habits. (And he'll eat eggs with bacon but not ham or pork chops. Old people are bizarre...) Anyway I guess it's just pairing citrus with beef that threw me. It'd be perfectly normal with chicken. I guess I'll have to try it.

A random cooking thread on 3/25/2017 10:54:32 AM
That sounds like regular pot roast right up to the bizarre inclusion of an orange. I'll need to look that up later to see if it's a real thing or if you're just being weird. (As befitting a monster who intentionally burns eggs.)

A random cooking thread on 3/25/2017 9:40:30 AM
I can't remember exactly, but I was helping my mom in the kitchen since sometime in elementary school. Not sure how 'helpful' I necessarily was at the time but I did do things like babysitting pork chops and catfish once they were in the pan. In the fourth grade my grandma walked me through making apricot and white chocolate chip cookies for some church thing and I won 2nd place, but I distinctly remember my solo baking attempts after that weren't as successful. A flaw in the recipes I was using, obviously. I'm not sure if simple stuff like eggs and toast counts as 'cooking' but I think that was the first meal I could make on my own. Deviled eggs are also ridiculously easy do and everyone loves them so that became the food for holidays or BBQs I totally made all by myself, praise me all you cunty aunts I don't even like all that much. :[ Anyway at some point I had all the basics down for making regular meals without needing to measure things or consult anybody, nothing fancy though and I think mainly through osmosis from just hanging around while my mom was cooking. It was during my retarded and thankfully brief vegan phase in high school that I really got into 'experimental' cooking and looking up weird complicated recipes. I guess the fanciest dessert I've made is my mom's lemon meringue pie with a pecan shortbread crust. As for regular food...idk, tamales? They're not so much complicated a time consuming and tedious enough no one ever wants to do them more than once a year. I've experimented around with jellies and wine, but that's more my dad's hobby so I mostly leave him to it.

The genie needs more info to grant your wish... on 3/24/2017 7:54:12 PM
I think armyman got himself banned.

[SITE] 1 EXP for commenting on a story on 3/24/2017 6:27:32 PM
You've made these kinds of suggestions before, does it get under your skin that much that most readers don't leave comments? Three for a featured review is a bit much, but there's a finite amount of space for those and it'll eventually level out and get tougher. Two for any comment at all (let's not pretend character limits are a barrier, it'd just mean more work for admins due to people using the obvious loopholes) would leave everyone drowning in points for doing essentially nothing. I wouldn't wipe my ass with most of the completely voluntary comments we get now as it is.