mizal, The Master Scrivener

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Sagely advice for the children: Here and here and all over this wonderful internet only a single Google search away, you may find explanations of correct grammar and punctuation usage in English. That and proper spelling (most writing programs and even the editor on the site itself helpfully include a spell checker!) are the bare minimum expected of anyone posting a story on the site. If you're not willing to do that much, you're not remotely serious about writing. And if you don't care about what you write, then we don't care to read it. So don't bother.

Rating and reviewing other people's stories is still an excellent use of your time however and a way to accumulate points and respect on the site even if you don't write. It may also teach you a thing or two about writing and especially writing and structuring CYOAs, which are a bit of a different beast than a standard story. Reading books, and thinking about them on the meta level in the sense of the the things the author chose to include and how they were introduced and why is also a good exercise in sharpening your skills. Reading bad books and being able to identify why they're bad, even better! Read books above your designated 'age level' or whatever as often as possible. That whole system was created by people who think you're stupid and want to keep you that way. You'll never get better at anything unless you push and challenge yourself.

Sagely advice for newb authors: Read the articles. Especially the ones on the advanced editor and scripting. A basic knowledge of variables and scripting will save you untold headaches in the future and streamline the whole process. Learn what $DEST is for and how to toggle a variable within link if nothing else.

A regular story is challenging enough if you're serious about doing it properly. Meanwhile a CYOA is an exponentially expanding story on steroids and crack. You MUST make plans ahead of time about what you're doing and where it's going or it will get away from you completely.

Always back up your work. If nothing else, make a copy of anything you write just before hitting the button to save it. Glitches have been known to happen and a page can time out if it sits too long.

Many of the veteran authors here do all their writing in a separate program that can be more easily backed up and paste it over to the site when they're finished. Your words often flow easier when you tackle one path at a time and then go back to add in branches, treating each major path like its own complete story with variations within it.

Although, there are many ways to structure a CYOA and you may found a different system than the one described above works best for you, one thing that's important for any story to be satisfying is that it's structured like a story.

Behold the sacred precepts of S T R U C T U R E in all their simple, straightforward glory:

Spelling it out (for the blindies and others) in order for a story to BE a story you need to start off by establishing your setting, important characters, and the conflict they'll be up against. Smaller obstacles leading up to the major one will need to be overcome, and the protagonist will usually try and fail to deal with whatever the main source of conflict is, or it will be revealed to be more powerful or dangerous than believed. (Remember, an easily won victory is a boring one.) This leads into the climax, the point of greatest suspense where the stakes are highest and the characters have everything to lose. Once THAT'S overcome, the story enters a period of falling action where the tension winds back down and the fallout of resolving the conflict plays out. Finally, the resolution or epilogue where the themes or larger lessons meant to be learned might be reflected back on, and everything is wrapped up leaving a sense of closure for the readers and/or characters.

Finally, a quote, since that is apparently a thing we do:

"Your reviews for both the published storygames and the works in both the creative corner and writing workshop have undeniably helped countless users. Your site presence is a boon for the site by acting like a fiery furnace. You'll roast the worthless rabble and refine what's left.

If you never would've discovered this odd yet charming corner of the web, then CYS would be missing a beneficial and integral part of its very identity." --WouldntItBeNice

Given by Mizal on 01/15/2018 - Finally the M is capitalized. Gifted by Zake, so the other won't be so lonely and retarded.

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Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Thorough and consistent writing workshop contributions / excellent commenting. Having 1 Storygame(s) Featured Posting 6503 Forum Posts Given by BerkaZerka on 11/10/2017 - Forum and Site Contributions Not Unnoticed Given by EndMaster on 11/30/2017 - It's everything you've always wanted! Given by Will11 on 01/14/2018 - For Inseperable and your other great stories


Don't Get Date Raped!
A short, educational piece. Please remain sensitive and respectful in the comment section. (I'd hate to have to report you to an admin for bullying me.)

(DO NOT READ if you're at all easily offended or lacking in a sense of humor. There's nothing graphic at all in here, but seriously, I still cannot stress it enough, this story is not for you.)

WOWSERS! Triggers ahead!

Facts About the Planet and the Solar System
A compilation of some little known facts about the solar system, as well as the debunking of a few myths. In addition to the scientific explanations, there's a small story dramatizing it all. Hopefully young readers will find this fun as well as educational. :)

Featured Story Inseparable
It doesn't matter what they say...

Kirthia: Foundations
Kirthians are species with simple needs. (Humans of the future sometimes refer to them as 'stone aged hobbits who breed like rabbits and don't belong in space, damn them'.)

Early kirthians mostly just wanted to be well fed in a comfortable mud hut, and spread their offspring as far as possible across their world without too many coming to grief from the planet's many large and voracious predators.

Then, the Altora came from their tunnels of fire...

Now You Gotta Deal With This S***

A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.

Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.

(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)

Read My Stories or Die!



Silver Horn, Silver Hooves
When the weather is fine, you've been coming to this grove to drink from the pool for centuries now. Today, you meet a stranger and hear a story that changes all that...

A fairy tale adventure.

[AUTHOR'S NOTE: There's a heavily scripted scene that due to time constraints I didn't have the opportunity to thoroughly test. You'll know it when you see it. In addition to a save game link beforehand, I've provided the option to skip it altogether should you encounter problems. A PM describing those problems would also be greatly appreciated as I'll be revisiting this game once the crushing weight of December has passed.]

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CYS Forum Advice and Etiquette
A modernized guide to the forums. The path to internet popularity and happiness, and a few CYS specific do's and don'ts.

Recent Posts

Is My Friend Gay? on 2/21/2018 11:21:17 PM
I gave you pure gold and this is what you go with. S M H

Glorious Sleep on 2/21/2018 10:52:29 PM
I get 3-4 hours typically, 5 on a good night. I crave sleep constantly though and feel like I'm dying. I'll be working less after Easter so I might try flipping my sleep schedule around entirely to something more efficient.

Ever hallucinated? on 2/21/2018 10:05:55 PM
This is an uncomfortable reminder that I've been putting off scrubbing out the shower.

Let's get that motivation pumping. on 2/21/2018 9:45:02 PM
>with the wiseguy path being slated for a spin-off/sequel game down the line. It starts.

Third person limited: adding a character on 2/21/2018 9:44:13 PM
I mean I realize you can't make assumptions about the comprehension skills of your readers, but this is done all the time in regular fiction.

Ever hallucinated? on 2/21/2018 9:21:12 PM
Well this is just weird then. You're claiming everything you've said and done until now is some kind of elaborate performance art? You even took the time to project that onto your actual story instead of just like, writing the best story you could? I'm kind of torn now, if I don't believe you're 15 then I'm calling you a liar, but if I do believe it I have to accept you've been essentially trolling all along with a fake persona.

Ever hallucinated? on 2/21/2018 8:05:56 PM
There is no fucking way you're fifteen, though.

Ever hallucinated? on 2/21/2018 8:05:11 PM
I literally don't understand how it's possible to get bored and never had. Even in classically shitty situations like sitting around in a doctor's office for hours or at an airport, there is so much entertainment on hand even aside from things like, thinking. With your brain.

Ever hallucinated? on 2/21/2018 7:56:05 PM
Bunny, you should scroll down a ways and read lkiriakos' post since they've got some info that might be useful for your story and also are pretty knowledgeable on the subject. I'd also recommend just doing some research online because half the problem with this thread is no one can even agree on what a hallucination is or how it defers from sleep paralysis etc. even though this stuff is all pretty well documented and has been forever.

Ever hallucinated? on 2/21/2018 7:47:43 PM
I think they're called shadow people and it's a pretty common thing and also creepy as fuck.