mizal, The Expert Scrivener

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10/17/2018 2:22 AM

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Sagely advice for the children: Here and here and all over this wonderful internet only a single Google search away, you may find explanations of correct grammar and punctuation usage in English. That and proper spelling (most writing programs and even the editor on the site itself helpfully include a spell checker!) are the bare minimum expected of anyone posting a story on the site. If you're not willing to do that much, you're not remotely serious about writing. And if you don't care about what you write, then we don't care to read it. So don't bother.

Rating and reviewing other people's stories is still an excellent use of your time however and a way to accumulate points and respect on the site even if you don't write. It may also teach you a thing or two about writing and especially writing and structuring CYOAs, which are a bit of a different beast than a standard story. Reading books, and thinking about them on the meta level in the sense of the the things the author chose to include and how they were introduced and why is also a good exercise in sharpening your skills. Reading bad books and being able to identify why they're bad, even better! Read books above your designated 'age level' or whatever as often as possible. That whole system was created by people who think you're stupid and want to keep you that way. You'll never get better at anything unless you push and challenge yourself.

Sagely advice for newb authors: Read the articles. Especially the ones on the advanced editor and scripting. A basic knowledge of variables and scripting will save you untold headaches in the future and streamline the whole process. Learn what $DEST is for and how to toggle a variable within link if nothing else.

A regular story is challenging enough if you're serious about doing it properly. Meanwhile a CYOA is an exponentially expanding story on steroids and crack. You MUST make plans ahead of time about what you're doing and where it's going or it will get away from you completely.

Always back up your work. If nothing else, make a copy of anything you write just before hitting the button to save it. Glitches have been known to happen and a page can time out if it sits too long.

Many of the veteran authors here do all their writing in a separate program that can be more easily backed up and paste it over to the site when they're finished. Your words often flow easier when you tackle one path at a time and then go back to add in branches, treating each major path like its own complete story with variations within it.

Although, there are many ways to structure a CYOA and you may found a different system than the one described above works best for you, one thing that's important for any story to be satisfying is that it's structured like a story.

Behold the sacred precepts of S T R U C T U R E in all their simple, straightforward glory:

Spelling it out (for the blindies and others) in order for a story to BE a story you need to start off by establishing your setting, important characters, and the conflict they'll be up against. Smaller obstacles leading up to the major one will need to be overcome, and the protagonist will usually try and fail to deal with whatever the main source of conflict is, or it will be revealed to be more powerful or dangerous than believed. (Remember, an easily won victory is a boring one.) This leads into the climax, the point of greatest suspense where the stakes are highest and the characters have everything to lose. Once THAT'S overcome, the story enters a period of falling action where the tension winds back down and the fallout of resolving the conflict plays out. Finally, the resolution or epilogue where the themes or larger lessons meant to be learned might be reflected back on, and everything is wrapped up leaving a sense of closure for the readers and/or characters.

Finally, a quote, since that is apparently a thing we do:

"Your reviews for both the published storygames and the works in both the creative corner and writing workshop have undeniably helped countless users. Your site presence is a boon for the site by acting like a fiery furnace. You'll roast the worthless rabble and refine what's left.

If you never would've discovered this odd yet charming corner of the web, then CYS would be missing a beneficial and integral part of its very identity." --WouldntItBeNice

Given by Mizal on 01/15/2018 - Finally the M is capitalized. Gifted by Zake, so the other won't be so lonely and retarded.

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Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Thorough and consistent writing workshop contributions / excellent commenting. Having 1 Storygame(s) Featured Posting 8639 Forum Posts Given by BerkaZerka on 11/10/2017 - Forum and Site Contributions Not Unnoticed Given by EndMaster on 11/30/2017 - It's everything you've always wanted! Given by Will11 on 01/14/2018 - For Inseperable and your other great stories


A Stack of Cats
You are a man on a mission. The cats, they must be stacked.

A puzzling math and logic game I made just to put some of the scripting practice I've been doing to use. Have fun and please let me know if you encounter any bugs.

Should be solvable by middle schoolers, or those with same basic level of intelligence as a middle schooler.

Don't Get Date Raped!
A short, educational piece. Please remain sensitive and respectful in the comment section. (I'd hate to have to report you to an admin for bullying me.)

(DO NOT READ if you're at all easily offended or lacking in a sense of humor. There's nothing graphic at all in here, but seriously, I still cannot stress it enough, this story is not for you.)

WOWSERS! Triggers ahead!

Dedicated to the good people of COG.

Facts About the Planet and the Solar System
A compilation of some little known facts about the solar system, as well as the debunking of a few myths.

In addition to the scientific explanations, there's a small story dramatizing it all.

Hopefully young readers will find this fun as well as educational. :)

(Might not be the greatest story ever written, but consider this: it got me 200 points.)

Featured Story Inseparable
It doesn't matter what they say...

Love is for the Birds
...and the squirrels. Sort of.

Written in six hours, for no other reason than to avoid consignment to the SHAME pit after my other Romance contest entry didn't want to cooperate.

Now You Gotta Deal With This S***

A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.

Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.

(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)

Read My Stories or Die!



Silver Horn, Silver Hooves
When the weather is fine, you've been coming to this grove to drink from the pool for centuries now. Today, you meet a stranger and hear a story that changes all that...

A fairy tale adventure.

[AUTHOR'S NOTE: There's a heavily scripted scene that due to time constraints I didn't have the opportunity to thoroughly test. You'll know it when you see it. In addition to a save game link beforehand, I've provided the option to skip it altogether should you encounter problems. A PM describing those problems would also be greatly appreciated as I'll be revisiting this game once the crushing weight of December has passed.]

Kirthia: Foundations
Kirthians are species with simple needs. (Humans of the future sometimes refer to them as 'stone aged hobbits who breed like rabbits and don't belong in space, damn them'.)

Early kirthians mostly just wanted to be well fed in a comfortable mud hut, and spread their offspring as far as possible across their world without too many coming to grief from the planet's many large and voracious predators.

Then, the Altora came from their tunnels of fire...

Laurels of Triumph

Moon Bright, Shadow's Blight
Entry for the 2018 EPIC contest.

The Last Realm

The Realm Lost

wild wild west 2.0
unpublished , coauthor

Articles Written

CYS Forum Advice and Etiquette
A modernized guide to the forums. The path to internet popularity and happiness, and a few CYS specific do's and don'ts.

Recent Posts

Random Eternal Theory on 10/16/2018 7:36:53 PM
Btw Alex bb just letting you know you left the fridge open a crack this morning, and it didn't get closed till 9:07 AM when your mom poured her first glass of wine and then went to let the mailman in. That wastes a lot of electricity, please be more careful.

The Kingdom on 10/15/2018 11:07:46 PM
It all happened so fast it's really just a blur, but I wouldn't doubt a death god's word, nor should any of you. Glory to Cystia.

BZ's Creatures of the Night Contest! on 10/15/2018 7:53:31 PM
Well this should be interesting. Wasn't expecting anyone but desperate SHAMED burnouts to enter this one tbh. e: forgot you were also SHAMED by that was quite awhile ago in Internet time. Still it'll be interesting to see how your writing style has developed.

BZ's Creatures of the Night Contest! on 10/15/2018 7:52:45 PM
Hey I made pretty decent progress yesterday, and will do more tomorrow. You have to understand I wrote my ass off Friday and Saturday, so that when I sat down yesterday to try and redo what had been eaten I realized that I would literally rather die. It just was not meant to be. But two thirds of the replacement story will use the same plot just modified for the new setting so whatever. I'll see what happens.

A little favour on 10/15/2018 7:07:45 AM
Nah that was the IRC channel we used to have. All the cool kids use Discord now though and making my own server was better than letting hapless noobs accidentally stumble into Ford's.

A little favour on 10/15/2018 4:39:49 AM
It works basically like a forum / chat hybrid and is incredibly addictive and bad for writing right up till you realize everything not in the writing or cute animals channel is garbage white noise that should be muted and ignored. I have a thread for my CYS server in the Lounge.

Most of the recent CC short stories were made by people we locked in a channel with a gay furry and Brad's gay dragon bot for various real and imagined offenses and forced to write 1000 words to earn their freedom.

On mobile it looks like this:

Random Eternal Theory on 10/14/2018 10:38:19 PM
I'm glad you're having fun with your new pet.

BZ's Creatures of the Night Contest! on 10/14/2018 5:19:10 PM
Great news I've...started a new story. Everything is fine. :)

BZ's Creatures of the Night Contest! on 10/14/2018 12:36:28 PM
Well I've had a little setback now in the form of at least eight pages being deleted because Scrivener doesn't play nice with cloud storage.

A little favour on 10/14/2018 9:33:21 AM
It is a good story and written in a style we don't get here often. Everyone in Discord is pretty aware of it, not sure why that hasn't translated to more reviews. The average site goer of course doesn't bother to check the new storygames list, or parlor room threads. Really, one questions what they do around here at all.