mizal, The Master Scrivener

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Sagely advice for the children: Here and here and all over this wonderful internet only a single Google search away, you may find explanations of correct grammar and punctuation usage in English. That and proper spelling (most writing programs and even the editor on the site itself helpfully include a spell checker!) are the bare minimum expected of anyone posting a story on the site. If you're not willing to do that much, you're not remotely serious about writing. And if you don't care about what you write, then we don't care to read it. So don't bother.

Rating and reviewing other people's stories is still an excellent use of your time however and a way to accumulate points and respect on the site even if you don't write. It may also teach you a thing or two about writing and especially writing and structuring CYOAs, which are a bit of a different beast than a standard story. Reading books, and thinking about them on the meta level in the sense of the the things the author chose to include and how they were introduced and why is also a good exercise in sharpening your skills. Reading bad books and being able to identify why they're bad, even better! Read books above your designated 'age level' or whatever as often as possible. That whole system was created by people who think you're stupid and want to keep you that way. You'll never get better at anything unless you push and challenge yourself.

Sagely advice for newb authors: Read the articles. Especially the ones on the advanced editor and scripting. A basic knowledge of variables and scripting will save you untold headaches in the future and streamline the whole process. Learn what $DEST is for and how to toggle a variable within link if nothing else.

A regular story is challenging enough if you're serious about doing it properly. Meanwhile a CYOA is an exponentially expanding story on steroids and crack. You MUST make plans ahead of time about what you're doing and where it's going or it will get away from you completely.

Always back up your work. If nothing else, make a copy of anything you write just before hitting the button to save it. Glitches have been known to happen and a page can time out if it sits too long.

Many of the veteran authors here do all their writing in a separate program that can be more easily backed up and paste it over to the site when they're finished. Your words often flow easier when you tackle one path at a time and then go back to add in branches, treating each major path like its own complete story with variations within it.

Although, there are many ways to structure a CYOA and you may found a different system than the one described above works best for you, one thing that's important for any story to be satisfying is that it's structured like a story.

Behold the sacred precepts of S T R U C T U R E in all their simple, straightforward glory:

Spelling it out (for the blindies and others) in order for a story to BE a story you need to start off by establishing your setting, important characters, and the conflict they'll be up against. Smaller obstacles leading up to the major one will need to be overcome, and the protagonist will usually try and fail to deal with whatever the main source of conflict is, or it will be revealed to be more powerful or dangerous than believed. (Remember, an easily won victory is a boring one.) This leads into the climax, the point of greatest suspense where the stakes are highest and the characters have everything to lose. Once THAT'S overcome, the story enters a period of falling action where the tension winds back down and the fallout of resolving the conflict plays out. Finally, the resolution or epilogue where the themes or larger lessons meant to be learned might be reflected back on, and everything is wrapped up leaving a sense of closure for the readers and/or characters.

Finally, a quote, since that is apparently a thing we do:

"Your reviews for both the published storygames and the works in both the creative corner and writing workshop have undeniably helped countless users. Your site presence is a boon for the site by acting like a fiery furnace. You'll roast the worthless rabble and refine what's left.

If you never would've discovered this odd yet charming corner of the web, then CYS would be missing a beneficial and integral part of its very identity." --WouldntItBeNice

Given by Mizal on 01/15/2018 - Finally the M is capitalized. Gifted by Zake, so the other won't be so lonely and retarded.

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Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Thorough and consistent writing workshop contributions / excellent commenting. Having 1 Storygame(s) Featured Posting 8554 Forum Posts Given by BerkaZerka on 11/10/2017 - Forum and Site Contributions Not Unnoticed Given by EndMaster on 11/30/2017 - It's everything you've always wanted! Given by Will11 on 01/14/2018 - For Inseperable and your other great stories


A Stack of Cats
You are a man on a mission. The cats, they must be stacked.

A puzzling math and logic game I made just to put some of the scripting practice I've been doing to use. Have fun and please let me know if you encounter any bugs.

Should be solvable by middle schoolers, or those with same basic level of intelligence as a middle schooler.

Don't Get Date Raped!
A short, educational piece. Please remain sensitive and respectful in the comment section. (I'd hate to have to report you to an admin for bullying me.)

(DO NOT READ if you're at all easily offended or lacking in a sense of humor. There's nothing graphic at all in here, but seriously, I still cannot stress it enough, this story is not for you.)

WOWSERS! Triggers ahead!

Dedicated to the good people of COG.

Facts About the Planet and the Solar System
A compilation of some little known facts about the solar system, as well as the debunking of a few myths.

In addition to the scientific explanations, there's a small story dramatizing it all.

Hopefully young readers will find this fun as well as educational. :)

(Might not be the greatest story ever written, but consider this: it got me 200 points.)

Featured Story Inseparable
It doesn't matter what they say...

Love is for the Birds
...and the squirrels. Sort of.

Written in six hours, for no other reason than to avoid consignment to the SHAME pit after my other Romance contest entry didn't want to cooperate.

Now You Gotta Deal With This S***

A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.

Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.

(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)

Read My Stories or Die!



Silver Horn, Silver Hooves
When the weather is fine, you've been coming to this grove to drink from the pool for centuries now. Today, you meet a stranger and hear a story that changes all that...

A fairy tale adventure.

[AUTHOR'S NOTE: There's a heavily scripted scene that due to time constraints I didn't have the opportunity to thoroughly test. You'll know it when you see it. In addition to a save game link beforehand, I've provided the option to skip it altogether should you encounter problems. A PM describing those problems would also be greatly appreciated as I'll be revisiting this game once the crushing weight of December has passed.]

Kirthia: Foundations
Kirthians are species with simple needs. (Humans of the future sometimes refer to them as 'stone aged hobbits who breed like rabbits and don't belong in space, damn them'.)

Early kirthians mostly just wanted to be well fed in a comfortable mud hut, and spread their offspring as far as possible across their world without too many coming to grief from the planet's many large and voracious predators.

Then, the Altora came from their tunnels of fire...

Laurels of Triumph

Sun's Light, Moon Bright, Shadow's Blight
Entry for the 2018 EPIC contest.

The Last Realm

The Realm Lost

wild wild west 2.0
unpublished , coauthor

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CYS Forum Advice and Etiquette
A modernized guide to the forums. The path to internet popularity and happiness, and a few CYS specific do's and don'ts.

Recent Posts

Atlas Trolled on 9/25/2018 10:13:34 AM
Well, some people like really liked them and miss them. And not enough people actively disliked them to make it that big a deal bringing them back. Arguments about it not being 'fair' for long term members to have a points advantage over noobs I can see the logic of of course, the question is why anyone should care.

Sucide. on 9/25/2018 8:53:18 AM
I think most of us did that at least a couple times during the whole Warrior Cats thing. If any current users are going to off themselves though just a reminder of the site traditions there: 1.) sound financial sense is a must. We don't want to hear you bought a brand new rope when a belt out of your closet is equally functional AND free. 2.) write END DADDY on your naval and a draw a small heart next to your genitals. A marker will do if you don't have any lipstick handy and are in too much of a hurry to go to the store. This is even more important than the belt really because without that detail making it onto the news, how are we ever going to find out what happened to you? Romulus thought he was too good for that last step and now look, he gets only contempt for not entering the contest instead of pity for what Bucky drove him to.

Sucide. on 9/25/2018 8:41:09 AM
I hated middle school a whole lot but usually would just fake illnesses or intentionally miss the bus to avoid going. Self immolation is some next level shit.

The Newest and Best Work in Progress on 9/24/2018 11:37:31 PM
"The next edition will come out in a few months, filled with more varied events between time jumps including, politics, monsters, and more! Also will be adding the rest of the real story and the side branches in as well."


Contest SHAME 8: EPIC SHAME on 9/24/2018 11:20:43 PM
A lot of people in the chat seem burned out on them. Cutting them down to like 4 a year seems about right, at least for next year just to try it and give everyone a breather, we can see what participation looks like and go from there. One for you, Berka, Killa if he wants it and Bucky can have mine. You could always jump in with one of your unofficial ones once in awhile since you are the force of Chaos and I don't think anyone would complain, but please give them a quick and merciful deadline, I'm not sure we can take too many more of these.

Atlas Trolled on 9/24/2018 10:57:53 PM
By the way Will since you're right here and I never did get around to PMing you back, just wanted to mention that Killa said he'd be fine with adding daily points back (at some indefinite time in the future if and when things get rolling on updates)

Sucide. on 9/24/2018 10:18:03 PM
What if we know people we wish would kill themselves, does that count?

Contest SHAME 8: EPIC SHAME on 9/24/2018 9:10:47 PM
Pfft. If it's so easy, where's yours?

Drum Corps International on 9/24/2018 7:59:45 PM
Sure but I'm looking at your post history right now and six out of ten posts, with the addition of this one I'm replying to right now are like HAY GUYS DID YOU KNOW, I CAN'T SEE. JUST POINTING IT OUT BECAUSE ON THIS TEXT BASED INTERNET SITE, IT'S IMPORTANT FOR SOME REASON. (Two of the others are about MUDS which is a genre almost entirely taken over by blindies so technically those should count too...) And you did completely ignore Maya the last time you popped up. You made a thread complaining you couldn't use the editor, because you were blind, and she asked you wtf you were going on about. Anyway guess what, I don't know what you look like either. What's your point? How is this even a real thing a person on an internet forum would consider a factor? Anyway @Mayana please use your bat squeaks on this one, I feel like I just won't be able to communicate, because he's blind

New Article: Tips To Write Better Fanfiction on 9/24/2018 6:48:55 PM
Tip #3 is good, I know AU fic got really popular at some point when it used to be considered heresy.

I've only been tempted to write a couple fanfics and I guess that's what they would fall under. Although I used to have settings I thought about a lot without ever being tempted to write any of it down, because changing it up drastically was always part of the process and one simply didn't do that back at the time I was still intentionally reading fanfic, the fans were very protective of The Canon.

Although looking back it's not that I deliberately did the alternate universe thing so much as threw out anything that was dumb or didn't interest me, sometimes jettisoning central characters entirely and then liberally made shit up to fill in the blanks where I felt it was missing. Or sometimes I just wasn't sure what happened with a series and continued it myself (it wasn't always simple to just pirate shows or comics you suddenly didn't have access to anymore or even look up details on them back then). And sometimes I mashed a few different settings together for no particular reason, idk I was a bored kid. I think the Buffy universe was the greatest victim of this.