mizal, The Master Scrivener

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7/19/2019 2:42 AM

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NOTICE: I can only access the internet on my phone right now so response times to messages and beta reading requests will be even slower than usual for the time being.

Sagely advice for the children: Here and here and all over this wonderful internet only a single Google search away, you may find explanations of correct grammar and punctuation usage in English. That and proper spelling (most writing programs and even the editor on the site itself helpfully include a spell checker!) are the bare minimum expected of anyone posting a story on the site. If you're not willing to do that much, you're not remotely serious about writing. And if you don't care about what you write, then we don't care to read it. So don't bother.

Rating and reviewing other people's stories is still an excellent use of your time however and a way to accumulate points and respect on the site even if you don't write. It may also teach you a thing or two about writing and especially writing and structuring CYOAs, which are a bit of a different beast than a standard story. Reading books, and thinking about them on the meta level in the sense of the the things the author chose to include and how they were introduced and why is also a good exercise in sharpening your skills. Reading bad books and being able to identify why they're bad, even better! Read books above your designated 'age level' or whatever as often as possible. That whole system was created by people who think you're stupid and want to keep you that way. You'll never get better at anything unless you push and challenge yourself.

Sagely advice for newb authors: Read the articles. Especially the ones on the advanced editor and scripting. A basic knowledge of variables and scripting will save you untold headaches in the future and streamline the whole process. Learn what $DEST is for and how to toggle a variable within link if nothing else.

A regular story is challenging enough if you're serious about doing it properly. Meanwhile a CYOA is an exponentially expanding story on steroids and crack. You MUST make plans ahead of time about what you're doing and where it's going or it will get away from you completely.

Always back up your work. If nothing else, make a copy of anything you write just before hitting the button to save it. Glitches have been known to happen and a page can time out if it sits too long.

Many of the veteran authors here do all their writing in a separate program that can be more easily backed up and paste it over to the site when they're finished. Your words often flow easier when you tackle one path at a time and then go back to add in branches, treating each major path like its own complete story with variations within it.

Although, there are many ways to structure a CYOA and you may found a different system than the one described above works best for you, one thing that's important for any story to be satisfying is that it's structured like a story.

Behold the sacred precepts of S T R U C T U R E in all their simple, straightforward glory:

Spelling it out (for the blindies and others) in order for a story to BE a story you need to start off by establishing your setting, important characters, and the conflict they'll be up against. Smaller obstacles leading up to the major one will need to be overcome, and the protagonist will usually try and fail to deal with whatever the main source of conflict is, or it will be revealed to be more powerful or dangerous than believed. (Remember, an easily won victory is a boring one.) This leads into the climax, the point of greatest suspense where the stakes are highest and the characters have everything to lose. Once THAT'S overcome, the story enters a period of falling action where the tension winds back down and the fallout of resolving the conflict plays out. Finally, the resolution or epilogue where the themes or larger lessons meant to be learned might be reflected back on, and everything is wrapped up leaving a sense of closure for the readers and/or characters.

Finally, a quote, since that is apparently a thing we do:

"Your reviews for both the published storygames and the works in both the creative corner and writing workshop have undeniably helped countless users. Your site presence is a boon for the site by acting like a fiery furnace. You'll roast the worthless rabble and refine what's left.

If you never would've discovered this odd yet charming corner of the web, then CYS would be missing a beneficial and integral part of its very identity." --WouldntItBeNice

"I love bird vore." --Cricket

Given by Mizal on 01/15/2018 - Finally the M is capitalized. Gifted by Zake, so the other won't be so lonely and retarded.

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Thorough and consistent writing workshop contributions / excellent commenting. Having 2 Storygame(s) Featured Posting 10756 Forum Posts Given by BerkaZerka on 11/10/2017 - Forum and Site Contributions Not Unnoticed Given by EndMaster on 11/30/2017 - It's everything you've always wanted! Given by Will11 on 01/14/2018 - For Inseperable and your other great stories


A Stack of Cats
You are a man on a mission. The cats, they must be stacked.

A puzzling math and logic game I made just to put some of the scripting practice I've been doing to use. Have fun and please let me know if you encounter any bugs.

Should be solvable by middle schoolers, or those with same basic level of intelligence as a middle schooler.

Featured Story Agent of Order
Orbiting a barren planetoid in a system full of nothing just past the edge of the frontier, The Last Outpost is just another refueling station. Strategically important, true, but on a routine stop you never expected to spend longer than a couple hours there, let alone a couple of days fighting for your life...

There are five epilogues, but some may be difficult to discover. Note that actions have consequences, but not always immediate ones. (And if you just need an End Game link, go play around with the probe.)

Another Damn Wolf Story
I have no idea why I wrote this. All I can say in my defense is that it seemed like a good idea at the ti--wait no that's a lie, I said, repeatedly that this was stupid and shameful every time I mentioned working on it.

The truth is I needed to publish something before the end of the year and there is CLEARLY a burning need for wolf stories in the psyche of children using the internet. But then they write them badly, or make their wolves behave like clans of cats. So here is a simple straightfoward story of a young wolf leaving his pack in search of a better life. Maybe no one will ever feel the need to write another one now, or if nothing else maybe this will give them ideas for how to do it in slightly more minimum-standards-meeting ways.

Don't Get Date Raped!
A short, educational piece. Please remain sensitive and respectful in the comment section. (I'd hate to have to report you to an admin for bullying me.)

(DO NOT READ if you're at all easily offended or lacking in a sense of humor. There's nothing graphic at all in here, but seriously, I still cannot stress it enough, this story is not for you.)

WOWSERS! Triggers ahead!

Dedicated to the good people of COG.

Facts About the Planet and the Solar System
A compilation of some little known facts about the solar system, as well as the debunking of a few myths.

In addition to the scientific explanations, there's a small story dramatizing it all.

Hopefully young readers will find this fun as well as educational. :)

(Might not be the greatest story ever written, but consider this: it got me 200 points.)

Featured Story Inseparable
It doesn't matter what they say...

Love is for the Birds
...and the squirrels. Sort of.

Written in six hours, for no other reason than to avoid consignment to the SHAME pit after my other Romance contest entry didn't want to cooperate.

Now You Gotta Deal With This S***

A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.

Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.

(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)

Read My Stories or Die!



Silver Horn, Silver Hooves
When the weather is fine, you've been coming to this grove to drink from the pool for centuries now. Today, you meet a stranger and hear a story that changes all that...

A fairy tale adventure.

[AUTHOR'S NOTE: There's a heavily scripted scene that due to time constraints I didn't have the opportunity to thoroughly test. You'll know it when you see it. In addition to a save game link beforehand, I've provided the option to skip it altogether should you encounter problems. A PM describing those problems would also be greatly appreciated as I'll be revisiting this game once the crushing weight of December has passed.]

Aphrodite's Orphan
unpublished , coauthor

A teenage girl living on a Venus out of 1930's Pulp Science Fiction must search the planet with her robot tutor to find the killers of her parents.

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CYS Forum Advice and Etiquette
A modernized guide to the forums. The path to internet popularity and happiness, and a few CYS specific do's and don'ts.

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Heterosexual Mythological Creature Contest on 7/19/2019 2:38:57 AM
Sure, the fact that I was dodgng his question doesn't make it any less true. Just giving up on edge and embracing this official CYS mom role for real at this point.

Heterosexual Mythological Creature Contest on 7/19/2019 1:46:27 AM
Everyone is a winner. You're all special to someone. Usually that person is your mom, but it could also be God, or the hairy old man that hides in the bushes outside your window. But the important thing is, you're all unique and you matter and your drawings matter. Except you, Liqquitty. You broke my thread, so you can get fucked.

Edithe Zilonis by Madhattersdaughter on 7/19/2019 1:33:13 AM
I know you guys don't pay attention to shit, so just pointing out that Madhattersdaughter just showed up after a multi year hiatus and published a story out of nowhere. It's pretty good, and very weird, about an undertaker that gets philisophical (and sometimes flirty) with the dead. Definitely worth a look.

A Letter to the Next Poster on 7/19/2019 1:05:17 AM
Dear Ford, I'm answering on behalf of DerPrussian since he flushed his phone and went off the grid. He wasn't making a lot of sense, going on about how it was an inside job and that the government was reading his thoughts with satellites and gay frogs, but he definitely said something about wanting to crush on you in person. I'm enclosing directions to his shack in the woods. Mind the trip wires and punji sticks. Dear Next Poster, Why did you do 9/11?

EndMaster's Succubus Story Contest on 7/19/2019 12:53:08 AM
I've been quietly looking forward to people with no sense of where the line is having their stories deleted because their only experience with sex in fiction is their erotic fanfictions. Was briefly disappointed you warned them with this, but now everyone gets to second guess themselves and wallow in fear and self doubt so I consider it a net improvement.

I really hope no one has expectations about mine since I'm basically treating this as an experiment in word spewing and I needed a story I didn't care about to make it work. But since I've been directly grouped with noobs I'm suddenly not too worried.

Except I suppose for my reputation as a whole, which has apparently dropped a few levels to the point where I'm now getting grouped in with noobs...

New Contest Theme: Lone Hero on 7/18/2019 8:07:06 PM
Official list of entrants: Chris113022 Ozoni Fluxion Chanbot Ficsean_Chef SpartacustheGreat Zealot Ninjapitka lordkarstark Jacoder23 corgi213 Official list of entrants where I have no idea whomst the fuck they are: jster02 Kooky_von_Koopa JCjr For the couple of you who were on the fence, I couldn't stand to see you in such indecisive torment so I went and pushed you in. @Reywalker786 You crashed my thread to fawn over Endmaster, you're in it now bitch. Best get to writing.

What do you do for your posture? on 7/18/2019 3:44:41 PM
What ninja said if you're having troubles, although it's not something I think about much beyond making sure I'm sitting properly at the computer and not leaning forward to look at the monitor. Sitting down for long periods is awful for you though, not just for your back but your circulation and everything. The human body was just not designed for that. You should be getting up a few minutes every hour to walk around or stretch.

A Letter to the Next Poster on 7/18/2019 10:45:44 AM
Dear Corgi, Thanks! I knew I could count on you. :-) Dear Next Poster, Some damn mutt got into the chicken pen again. Animal Control doesn't operate that far outside of civilization, I'll need you to call in a specialist.

EndMaster's Succubus Story Contest on 7/18/2019 7:58:50 AM
Mine will be finished by Monday night. How's everyone else coming along?

New Contest Theme: Lone Hero on 7/18/2019 7:55:21 AM
You can't fake like you don't know how to write anymore. I'm gonna expect an entry from you so better get to it.