mizal, The Apprentice Scrivener
I'm here on CYS primarily as a reader and reviewer. I have an interest in seeing good stories posted, and bad ones going away, and the site being a place readers can browse to reliably find quality work. I tend to be fairly busy during the week, but if you want general impressions or advice on a story or writing excerpt, feel free to PM me. (If you're new, just fyi getting advice and feedback is one of the things the Writing Workshop on the forums is for as well.)
Otherwise, past experience has taught me that the reason you're looking at my profile right now might be because I hurt your fragile feefees with critical remarks.
Haha I think Mizal has a gift for driving half-crazy members into full-fledged crazy :) - Will11
You made fun of something I am doing. That's not very nice. I want people to be nice. Please be nice. - some retard
Let me explain my approach to reviewing:
I said it just a moment ago, but I know words are hard, so I'll repeat: I'm here primarily as a reader and a reviewer. If I feel the thing I just read wasted my time, my review will reflect that.
A story, to be a story, needs an engaging plot, relatable characters and conflicts for them to overcome in a believable way. A rudimentary idea of pacing and structure and a creative idea or two thrown in the mix wouldn't hurt either! (Spelling, punctuation, grammar and proof reading are a given. Better to not publish at all if you can't even be bothered with that much.)
It's not any reader's job to pat you on the back for only failing to deliver in X or Y number of ways. When I see a story that's not a story, I rate it a one and move on. There are people happy to offer feedback, and you can write all you want for as long as you need, but once you hit that publish button you're throwing your work out into the wild and you'd better be sure it can stand on its own merits.
(Storygames with more focus on the 'game' part are rarer and have slightly different criteria, but they still need enough decent writing to hold them together, and above all need to be entertaining.)
Now, for all you kids just starting out, the Grammarly Handbook is a great resource, and above all I'd recommend you just read more books. Step away from comforting junk food like Warrior Cats a little while and challenge yourself by branching out to other genres, older books, and books above your age level. Whether you like them or don't like them, see if you can look at the author's choices from a meta level and identify why.
A tale told in verse. A text from your sister requesting a pick up from a party leads to a night of strangeness.
Inspired by Bucky's ballad contest. Though...I wouldn't call this a ballad. I'm not sure what I'd call it, actually, other than exceedingly stupid, and fun to write.
(Don't pay any attention to the scores, they're just for me to track which endings reviewers get.)
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Steve's Progressive! on 5/27/2017 10:32:27 AM
My uncle was born prematurely, so hey it turns out babies can actually survive and thrive outside the womb even at a development period where under normal circumstances they would still be considered fetuses and non-people and eligible for abortion.
But as for abortion in general, only a mother knows her own situation and whether she can handle the responsibility of bringing a child into the world at any given time, it's not something you can make a flat law for or against and have it fit every individual and their circumstance. It's not a decision that should be made frivolously either way, and not one that should be made based on anyone else's views and beliefs. It is her child. No one else should have the arrogance to think they get a say in whether a baby is 'defective' and doesn't deserve to live or 'lol just try again, who cares' any more than they should be able to force her to have a child she doesn't want in another situation.
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