Halfway Decent

Player Rating4.50/8

"#227 overall, #15 for 2014"
based on 147 ratings since 06/16/2014
played 4,027 times (finished 226)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

A lighthearted story of two people who can't seem to shake free of each other's influence, no matter how old they get. Simply, a romance...progressive, to say the least.

I know that this story is a bit of a romantic cheeseball, but bear with me. It's my first romance. ;)

NOTE: This is my first story on this site. It is a short story, while I work on a much longer one (currently WIP). Please feel free to comment, message, criticize, compliment, whatever! I welcome the feedback. :)

Player Comments

Cheesy things taste delicious...

Your first romance is a good romance! Another beautifully sculpted piece without too much need of words.

God, you misunderestimate yourself. There is no such thing as "cheese" on this thing, it's filled with what I can see to be genuine emotion (at least during the most romantic times in a relationship).

Your wording is excellent, very few if there were any errors that I found. The storyline was not too grandiose, as it is only about the development of two people's love for each other, but you make up by meticulously fleshing it out with many details.

The progression of their ages after choices goes fast, but I like it that way. Sort of like documenting the points of interest in their lives (surely make-outs and intriguing things don't happen ALL the time, eh?).

But even this wasn't perfect. The ending felt lacking (at least the HAPPY ENDING which I got), because it's like you rushed to a final conclusion that you will live happily ever after with Candace, eveb though you only said something related to proclaiming how far you'll go just to maintain loving her.

But at least everything else was good, and that is why this story is worth every cent. 6/8.
-- AgentX on 4/20/2017 4:08:18 AM
Not bad.

I liked the writing style, and the emotion the characters felt were really easy to feel and relate to, thanks to the detail you provided about how the characters felt sad, or happy, or loving.

The branching was average. Some choices didn't seem to relate to the rest of the story at all (the first one or two choices), but later on I enjoyed finding the three endings.

This was really cute, and I liked seeing the relationship develop between two kids from when they were wee children to when they were grown.

However, it was very linear. I guess that's sorta impossible to avoid when you timeskip 5-8 years every page or two.

Character development was pretty good, I liked seeing the characters personalities develop as they grew older.

4/8, not bad at all.
-- MinnieKing on 3/28/2017 1:26:26 AM
This was pretty interesting to read, the pictures in the beginning were cute to say the least.

I would've liked to seen the romance properly build to be honest, because there's not much that we know about two of the main characters. The story almost seems rushed in a way with how much time passes with each choice, but it does redeem itself somewhat with having the choices at the end effect which ending that you'll achieve.

I honestly found the writing to be cute and charming in its own way, but there's not much here when it comes to depth and choices in this storygame. But for a first this isn't bad actually, the writing and romance and general could have used some expanding on however. I think stories like this one in particular should try to connect properly with the reader and make them feel and care about the characters, but there's not much characterization in this story unfortunately.

Despite some of my issues, I found this to be enjoyable enough. Good work! :)
-- TharaApples on 3/24/2017 1:12:41 PM
Pretty good I enjoy that it was not 100 paragraph but wish it was a little longer
-- E-Tizzle on 7/6/2017 9:20:53 AM
Short but sweet.
-- Quorrah on 3/5/2017 2:32:05 PM
It was ok but if there could have been another ending I would have totally liked it because I also have a soul just learned that now.
-Applesauce
-- Applesauce on 4/8/2016 12:15:12 AM
I got all 3 all it was so happy and sad...I cried so now I finally have a soul...thank you video games, and the creator
-- TitanOfShadows on 1/9/2016 1:12:25 AM
i like it
-- 41610cutie on 9/5/2015 5:36:47 PM
Kind of short, but still fun to read.
-- FaithRomeyer on 7/22/2015 7:04:31 AM
that was pretty good for your first. keep writing!
-- Wolfina on 4/20/2015 2:18:49 PM
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