Halfway Decent

Player Rating4.32/8

"#357 overall, #21 for 2014"
based on 204 ratings since 06/16/2014
played 5,959 times (finished 300)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

A lighthearted story of two people who can't seem to shake free of each other's influence, no matter how old they get. Simply, a romance...progressive, to say the least.

I know that this story is a bit of a romantic cheeseball, but bear with me. It's my first romance. ;)

NOTE: This is my first story on this site. It is a short story, while I work on a much longer one (currently WIP). Please feel free to comment, message, criticize, compliment, whatever! I welcome the feedback. :)

Player Comments

Cheesy things taste delicious...

Your first romance is a good romance! Another beautifully sculpted piece without too much need of words.

God, you misunderestimate yourself. There is no such thing as "cheese" on this thing, it's filled with what I can see to be genuine emotion (at least during the most romantic times in a relationship).

Your wording is excellent, very few if there were any errors that I found. The storyline was not too grandiose, as it is only about the development of two people's love for each other, but you make up by meticulously fleshing it out with many details.

The progression of their ages after choices goes fast, but I like it that way. Sort of like documenting the points of interest in their lives (surely make-outs and intriguing things don't happen ALL the time, eh?).

But even this wasn't perfect. The ending felt lacking (at least the HAPPY ENDING which I got), because it's like you rushed to a final conclusion that you will live happily ever after with Candace, eveb though you only said something related to proclaiming how far you'll go just to maintain loving her.

But at least everything else was good, and that is why this story is worth every cent. 6/8.
-- AgentX on 4/20/2017 4:08:18 AM with a score of 0
Not bad.

I liked the writing style, and the emotion the characters felt were really easy to feel and relate to, thanks to the detail you provided about how the characters felt sad, or happy, or loving.

The branching was average. Some choices didn't seem to relate to the rest of the story at all (the first one or two choices), but later on I enjoyed finding the three endings.

This was really cute, and I liked seeing the relationship develop between two kids from when they were wee children to when they were grown.

However, it was very linear. I guess that's sorta impossible to avoid when you timeskip 5-8 years every page or two.

Character development was pretty good, I liked seeing the characters personalities develop as they grew older.

4/8, not bad at all.
-- MinnieKing on 3/28/2017 1:26:26 AM with a score of 0
This was pretty interesting to read, the pictures in the beginning were cute to say the least.

I would've liked to seen the romance properly build to be honest, because there's not much that we know about two of the main characters. The story almost seems rushed in a way with how much time passes with each choice, but it does redeem itself somewhat with having the choices at the end effect which ending that you'll achieve.

I honestly found the writing to be cute and charming in its own way, but there's not much here when it comes to depth and choices in this storygame. But for a first this isn't bad actually, the writing and romance and general could have used some expanding on however. I think stories like this one in particular should try to connect properly with the reader and make them feel and care about the characters, but there's not much characterization in this story unfortunately.

Despite some of my issues, I found this to be enjoyable enough. Good work! :)
-- TharaApples on 3/24/2017 1:12:41 PM with a score of 0
This was pretty cute. A good, quick read.

The first person perspective is something that I don't usually see, and it works very well with this story. The tone and writing style also contribute to the feel that I'm being told a story by someone. The dialogue is funny and the narration has some well-placed jokes as well.

There were some drawbacks, however. The spacing between paragraphs was weird sometimes, which isn't a big deal, just strange. Sometimes while reading, it was difficult to tell the difference between what's happening in that moment and what the narrator is thinking as an afterthought. There's a couple typos as well, but the biggest problem is that some paths overlap in places that are confusing for the reader. Sometimes a choice will lead to a path where the reader has missed a key detail to understanding the narration on the page, or the narration assumes something happened that didn't.

Overall, it was alright.
-- Megumeme on 4/22/2020 6:18:53 PM with a score of 0
Good story and idea, but way too short and should show more of the relationship. Although I can find plenty of clichés, there are few choices, and the story is short, still a good story.
-- Anomynos (I Can't Spell, OKAY? on 7/19/2019 10:30:16 AM with a score of 0
Very cute! A little cheesy, but in the right way. I loved the little touches of humor, and how the main character was fleshed out through them.
-- Sarah on 5/28/2019 9:38:21 PM with a score of 0
Celine is a whores name
-- Meow on 2/2/2019 3:44:45 PM with a score of 0
pretty good! awfully short, though.
-- RocketDraco on 1/9/2019 9:08:44 AM with a score of 0
Gud for beginners. A nice short story.A little bit cheesy.
-- john conner on 12/22/2017 11:19:59 AM with a score of 0
Pretty good I enjoy that it was not 100 paragraph but wish it was a little longer
-- E-Tizzle on 7/6/2017 9:20:53 AM with a score of 0
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