Player Comments on America: Made Apocalyptic
There are a lot of issues with the structure of America: Made Apocalyptic, but it was somewhat entertaining.
You start off in a bunker a few months after the nuclear apocalypse, and the narration is in present tense. Then, the narration switches to past tense as if you are thinking back on what happened. However, the story continues in past tense, even when the time is explicitly said to be two years after the story started, and nowhere do you end up back in the bunker.
The absurdity of the events such as the Canadian, moose-riding militia is entertaining, but the reader chooses what events happen rather than what the character does. Rather than feeling like a CYOA, it feels more like reading a strange bedtime story and deciding what you are going to have happen next. Maybe some will enjoy that more than I did.
I did get a laugh at the part when you are stationed in
Wisconsin. That was the best part for me, because I have totally known a Frank, several really. It made me wonder if the author has lived in or near Wisconsin, or maybe the reputation of Packers fans has spread across the country.
If the formatting and structure had been less screwy, this might have been a very entertaining story.
on 5/9/2019 5:06:02 PM with a score of 0
This is one of the funniest fucking things I've read on this website. Really fun mix of social commentary with absolute, ridiculous absurdity. I was ugly laughing by the time the Canadians invaded on mooseback.
There were typos and grammatical mistakes sprinkled throughout, but it was mostly minor stuff; homophones, incorrect use of apostrophes, etc. For the most part, your syntax was fine.
Really cutting stuff. I look forward to your next endeavour, and hope it involves more Candians. I rate this story a solid 6/8. Good shit, OP.
on 12/18/2016 9:37:37 PM with a score of 0
This had a nice humor element, and it was well written and a good idea in general. Very original.
Although, while I loved it, I'm just warning you other people might not. These types of things really piss people off, as they can be sensitive about people expressing their opinion this way.
While you should be prepared for some bad reviews from people who can't take a joke, I think you should definitely keep writing. This was definitely a great and fun way to kill a few minutes.
I did notice a few flaws, but nothing unfixable. I hope you continue publishing, 6/8 :)
on 12/16/2016 4:56:57 PM with a score of 0
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on 9/12/2019 4:11:46 PM with a score of 0
I thought this was pretty funny and overall a good way to spend a couple minutes. The absurdity worked well in that it was funny but wasn't completely unbelievable.
on 5/23/2019 12:32:42 PM with a score of 0
Poorly written, terrible grammar, and such, but... yeah... there was an attempt(?)
on 5/17/2019 4:28:16 PM with a score of 0
Not bad, could be better, but it's pretty good!
on 5/16/2019 4:10:40 PM with a score of 0
It was funny i guess ? Could have been longer and there was only one ending. :-I
on 5/1/2019 9:31:57 AM with a score of 0
on 2/17/2019 4:29:33 PM with a score of 0
This was f##king funny as hell and actually pretty great, there were some grammar mistakes (there were very few and because of that i can't think of a mistake off the top of my head) also the choices you make often lead to a choice you could have just took a shortcut too that isn't a problem for me but i know some people do not like that
on 1/26/2019 4:45:26 PM with a score of 0
Absolutely hilarious, especially the bit about Trump creating a police force which stopped people leaving/ entering America, calling it 'treason to the US'. Good game, just wished that there was more than one ending.
-- Szy on 11/4/2018 8:54:51 AM with a score of 0
on 9/17/2018 5:11:43 PM with a score of 0
Very good job a lot of effort was put into this
on 6/7/2018 4:43:19 PM with a score of 0
I think this game was really fun. BTW, does anyone know how to domesticate a moose?
on 4/15/2018 9:55:49 AM with a score of 0
This was good. It deserves a higher rating than it has. It's not 8 worthy, but it should certainly be up there. Good work on this.
on 1/27/2018 11:53:32 PM with a score of 0
I have gotten respect for one other person's humor in my life, and this has been the author of this story. May their puns live forever. *salutes*
-- RandomRedHead on 11/1/2017 2:30:37 PM with a score of 0
so depressing and real 8/8. Would totally play it again to find another ending.
on 7/10/2017 11:00:48 PM with a score of 0
I didn't understand it. Sure I didn't agree with the political commentary, but the main thing is the humor. It just didn't make any sense to me. It's so divorced from all I consider funny that I just read it without emotional reaction, and unable to really process what I'm seeing.
It sounded kind of German.
on 3/10/2017 6:08:06 PM with a score of 0
Quite good as political satire goes and wholly in agreement with the fears of many worldwide :) Could be longer or better developed with more branches, 5/8
on 12/17/2016 1:41:58 AM with a score of 0
This was pretty humorous :)
The Canadians were my favorite group of characters in this story.
on 12/16/2016 11:40:09 AM with a score of 0
best storygame ever. truly a masterpiece among masterpieces. 8/8
on 12/16/2016 11:12:01 AM with a score of 0
Some people are really going to hate this, but I appreciate the fact I got to piss myself in the face of an invasion of moose-riding Canadians, then got shot in the back while trying to defect to their side by a coworker I'd previously pushed off one of one of the president's walls.
on 12/16/2016 11:06:01 AM with a score of 0
I cringe at your stupidity. I normally don't say that, but this's just horrible.
on 12/16/2016 11:03:15 AM with a score of 0
Lol. I'm just going to give this a 8/8.
Though, some people voted for Trump for other reasons other than wanting him to win. Kind of the "lesser than two evils" thing.
I normally hate when people try to push political opinions into storygames, but I'm in a strange mood today.
on 12/16/2016 11:01:50 AM with a score of 0
Stupid biased shot
on 12/16/2016 10:46:33 AM with a score of 0