Blue Light Saga

Player Rating4.20/8

"#384 overall, #24 for 2014"
based on 169 ratings since 09/11/2014
played 1,380 times (finished 193)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

Enter a world where the only light is that which you carry.

Choose your path and decide your fate.  Don't let fate decide for you.

Player Comments

Interesting start. It makes for a nice setting and beginning to the story. I’m not sure why I thought my ID wasn’t there before…before what? If I have no memories, I’m not sure how I’d think about something being there before I found it. Also, while a single item choice can work well with scene changes, by the third page I’m starting to wonder if there are any choices coming at all. All the pages at the start without any choices could likely just be added together into one page and that would eliminate the apparently pointless clicking to get to the next paragraph.

When I got to Azure, the page was quite confusing. It added Indigo. Who is that? Is that supposed to be me talking? I really can’t tell if there are two people there, Azure and me; or if there are three: Azure, Indigo, and me. And I guess the italics was for, well, I’m not sure what it was for. Sometimes it was feelings, sometimes it was describing actions, so I’m not sure what the italics was supposed to mean. I also wasn’t sure who was talking towards the end. Someone was a solider stationed in Kuwait. Was that me? Was that Azure? Maybe Indigo? Or it might even have been the midnight man.

This story was pretty good and has lots of potential. It has a neat idea, though I think it could have had more detail related to the idea and the story. And with a few edits to fix the subjects and fonts, I think this could be a really good story. Thank you for sharing it with the site.
-- Ogre11 on 7/1/2018 5:05:17 PM with a score of 0
Not bad, I guess. I liked the overall story, but I didn't really like the way you have written it. I don't know if you did it on purpose, but the movie-script type of writing isn't exactly nice to read. It really distances the reader from the story itself and makes it hard to identify with the characters. I'd also advise you to write some descriptive text, instead of describing your characters through a list of descriptive features.

I also found the story a bit vague, but though I'd love to have had some more background, etc. I guess that it kinda fits with the general mystery theme of the story.

I also find it a bit of a shame that you labeled the endings as '...'s ending'. I think I would have liked it better if you gave me a choice like 'Azure does this and this' so I still have to guess what is going to happen.

I have given your story a 4/8, mostly because I liked the story, but I didn't really like the way it was written (see above).

Good luck writing!
-- Romulus on 9/13/2014 6:53:50 AM with a score of 0
This wasn't a bad storygame. There was definitely a fair bit of plot and character development. I have mixed feelings about the vagueness of it all. I felt like in some ways it fit this story well but at the same time I think you didn't tell the reader enough for them to become invested in the story.

I have to agree with Boringfirelion about the lack of choices; while at first sight it looks like there's a lot of branches, only certain choices get you to the more interesting endings.
-- 31TeV on 9/11/2014 12:47:12 PM with a score of 0
This is actually a touching story, though there aren’t very many different endings, and you kinda just pick one in the end. Great as far as stories go, but not much of a CYOS. But it’s really good! Keep writing for sure!
-- writeyourstory on 3/8/2021 1:32:37 PM with a score of 0
First the typical spoiler warning. If you read this before reading the story, expect to be spoilered.

First things first. I did not notice any major grammatical errors. I'm not a native speaker so I am no pro at that, but I noticed nothing that disturbed the flow of reading.

The story itself had some very short pages with very little description. I'm still undecided if that fits well with the mystery setting or if the game lacks description.

The structure was very different than many stories I read. I guess the Azure and the Indigo ending were the only real epilogues I found. If that's the case then the very first decision you make is a quite important one. The first few pages with only one choice could have been put into one to erase the clicking to just read on.

The branching seemed quite excessive at first but they rejoined again later on quite often which lead to most paths enabling you to reach the "real endings".

5/8 from me for the innovative style and writing style.
-- LJacko on 3/2/2020 3:10:42 AM with a score of 0
-- Ava on 10/4/2019 2:12:45 PM with a score of 0
This was an interesting little storygame. Emphasis on little. I liked the game, but just when I was starting to feel invested in the game, it ended. Please make more storygames. I'd like to see more.
-- Cupcakitty on 8/30/2018 12:50:54 PM with a score of 0
Midnight: Welcome home, son.

Well, that seems to imply home can only be reached alone. As in home alone. ;)
-- TestingJest on 11/13/2017 11:33:17 PM with a score of 0
A romantic soul wrote this...
-- Blu on 2/25/2017 5:11:05 PM with a score of 0
I thought it was ok
-- WolfPackGaming on 1/17/2017 8:54:48 PM with a score of 0
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