Bob and His Adventure

Player Rating3.39/8

"#690 overall, #82 for 2013"
based on 185 ratings since 07/26/2013
played 1,400 times (finished 211)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

A teenager named Bob is stuck in a village but wants to travel the world. The villagers see him as an insane teenage boy because they believe that they are the only inhabitants of the entire world. Still, Bob refuses to believe this, and decides to go on a life-changing adventure.

Player Comments

3J was right about this story, it's way better then the title makes it seem.

I liked how it seemed strange, but turned out to be a fun storygame to play. While it was linear and the plot seemed to be quite... unoriginal and generic, I would read more from you if you were to brush up on adding detail to your storygames and using better plots :)

The writing overall wasn't exactly bad, it was just lacking a lot of motivation. Remember, don't force your writing or else the outcome might not be as nice as you'd like it to be.

More character development and emotion would has been great, because I felt the characters were just generic figures who I know little to nothing about.

It wasn't the shortest storygame i've ever read, but you could have added a few more sentences. I found there to be about one paragraph per page and a number of links.

I feel like you had trouble taking a plot and sticking to it, because it felt very linear and jumped from one situation to another quite quickly.

3/8, not bad.
-- MinnieKing on 3/19/2017 2:56:20 AM with a score of 0
Bob and His Adventure was better than I was expecting from the title. The author did not seem to be particularly inspired while writing this adventure but he understood the need for a non-linear plot and this, at least, was appreciated.

The author would do well to craft an actual plot with developed characters for his next storygame so that we can get a feel for whether or not he can actually write.
-- JJJ-thebanisher on 3/24/2014 10:42:23 PM with a score of 0
No offense, but this isn't really as good as I hoped. I mean, it isn't a complete crash, but there were some bumps and bruises to be taken care of. First, a storyline. This is Choose-Your-STORY, not Choose-Random-Links. As entertaining as the childish format was, I think it would have been better with a solid background, and not just to the characters. Another thing. It seems like a childish story, but really, I didn't even know how to rate this. I mean, I have no idea how old you are, and if this is honestly the best you can do. I judge the same for everyone, and I hope you improve.
-- awesomeness1242 on 8/12/2013 9:43:44 PM with a score of 0
snow fuck yourself really hard
-- sucks a lor on 11/11/2019 2:24:25 PM with a score of 0
Very funny and I love MC HONEY
-- Zak on 6/20/2019 4:43:15 AM with a score of 0
Good and cute story. You should make it longer next time though.
-- ILLUMINATI on 6/18/2018 2:45:04 PM with a score of 0
The pages were very short, but that didn't bother me. The probably though is that I ran into a path that made me lose no matter what decision I made, which really irritates me when I play a game. It take the purpose out of it.
-- TheOnlySolution on 4/30/2018 5:26:37 AM with a score of 0
Somehow entertaining, although more detailed narrative or descriptive writing could've gone a long way to improving this.
-- llImperatorll on 12/28/2017 1:12:32 PM with a score of 0
"Stay with the sharks

Bob and MC Honey become best friends with the sharks. And they all lived happily ever after."

Well that certainly is unusual! ;)
-- TestingJest on 12/21/2017 1:18:17 AM with a score of 0
Ah, CYOA at its simplest. Or so I'd like to think. Good spelling and grammar, nice writing, some nice choices which allow us to explore the world around us and actually interact with things...

Unfortunately, it's also very bland. It's Bob does this, bob does that. It felt like the narrator was some kind of robot. it lacked emotion and character, really. It was all about plot and action, and that's fine if executed correctly - but it could do more.

I enjoyed it for what it's worth, but I feel that Bob could reach greater horizons than this.
-- Saika on 7/25/2017 7:40:39 AM with a score of 0
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