candyland

Well, that's the first time I've ever died to goldfish that came out of jello.

There weren't really any choices in this story at all. Wouldn't recommend.

Awful. Just awful. 1/8.

Holy mother of God, that was awful. Unless you're under the age of 7, there is no excuse for how awful that was. Honestly, this site is going to the retarded Warriors fans, and 4 year olds. I rest my case.

I just want to take a moment of silence to applaud this piece of horse shit. An eight-year-old bitch with Down Syndrome can write better than this.

That was almost perfect in it's awfulness for a few reasons:
1) The story was ridiculous and the grammar poor.
2) The "choices" were effectively 50-50 chances between life and death, both equally badly written.
3) There was no end game link after you died so like being trapped in a lift with someone saying random things with incoherent grammar there was no way out of the story.
I can only assume there were no end game links to MAKE people read your story which is an almost literally painful experience. On the plus side the title is a good one but should probably be spelt Candy Land.

it was barly a stroy it was either the right choice or death

You could definitely work on your capitalization and punctuation, not to mention plot.

And also, was it my imagination or were there more broken links than there were pages?

After finishing the "story", I just sat there, staring at what to write in the comment section. My mind was blank, empty, a hollow shell of its former self. I had no clue what the hell this shit was, but it sure as fuck is NOT a storygame. Sure there was somewhat a resemblance to a plot but with a set linear direction and some of the laziest writing, I wasn't even sure what to make of it.

On top of that, once you died, you couldn't even end the game. I had to continue on reading this rubbish of a story, spending about 4 minutes before mercifully reaching the end. That's four minutes of my life wasted, reading a story that just killed a few of my brain cells in the process.

After finishing the "story", I just sat there, staring at what to write in the comment section. My mind was blank, empty, a hollow shell of its former self. I had no clue what the hell this shit was, but it sure as fuck is NOT a storygame. Sure there was somewhat a resemblance to a plot but with a set linear direction and some of the laziest writing, I wasn't even sure what to make of it.

On top of that, once you died, you couldn't even end the game. I had to continue on reading this rubbish of a story, spending about 4 minutes before mercifully reaching the end. That's four minutes of my life wasted, reading a story that just killed a few of my brain cells in the progress.

meeeeeeeeeeeeep