Custody Case

Player Rating4.17/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 21 ratings since 01/09/2018
played 90 times (finished 19)

Story Difficulty6/8

"wandering through the desert"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

You play as Jack, an honest poet. After experiencing plumbing issues in your house, you discover that your wife Jill has been keeping a child you were unaware you even had hidden from you in your boiler room. A custody case ensues.

Note: This story is based in a fictional country and thus is not meant to replicate an real court system.

This is my entry for the first anniversary of the December Ballad Contest. Enjoy!

Player Comments

Well, this was certainly a strange way to take what you had, although it was ultimately a very strange prompt. It mightn't have been a very accurate court drama, but ultimately I think it was quite a good story.

The writing was good, no real complaint there. There wasn't exactly much expansion of setting, which I just assumed was contemporary, or the characters, who we never really got a look at, but I get that you weren't going for some massive, all-encompassing story here, but just a short little bit. It could've benefited from a bit more length even though it was the type of the story that worked better short than long, just so that failing a question wouldn't lose you the case. Plus, a few more choices wouldn't go too badly, as so far it never expanded past two, even though it definitely could've had a few more options. Hell, given the more absurdist leaning of it all, I feel all choices could've had an additional "Just nonsensically spew poetry to the chagrin of your lawyer and confusion of the court", which would've been fun.

I thought that the idea of Jack just casually talking in ballads in poem form was pretty fun, anyhow. It wasn't some grand story or particularly emotionally-wrenching, but as a short, fun, strange story it was pretty enjoyable. I was certainly entertained for the short time during it, so well done, and best of luck in the competition.
-- Steve24833 on 1/12/2018 9:55:04 AM with a score of 0
You fight for custody of a kid. I still have no idea why Jill hid the kid lol, but great I got Jenny.
-- Earmuffsred on 1/14/2018 12:00:10 AM with a score of 0
Written alright, but with no character development or real narrative. The plot is nonsensical, and written by someone who has obviously never stepped foot in a courtroom.
-- Malkalack on 1/11/2018 11:42:12 PM with a score of 0
It's an alright short story (I won and got full custody) All you really have to do is choose two questions and answer two questions and see what the verdict is.
-- Euel on 1/10/2018 3:58:59 PM with a score of 0
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