Don't Hurt Me Again

Player Rating5.63/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 30 ratings since 10/31/2018
played 429 times (finished 41)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.
This is an entry for BZ's Creatures of the Night Contest. There are two different kinds of monsters. One is a monster because of what they are, like vampires or zombies. Others are monsters because of what they do. They wear human flesh, but they are not human.

Player Comments

I thought the story was pretty well done, for the contest anyway. I also like the way the story went and how the flow of it was, changing times and memories. I thought it was very original and only saw a few mistakes. Overall, 7/8
-- Unkindcrab on 3/10/2019 4:58:00 PM with a score of 0
It's good, it's sad and it's short!
-- Kuro on 3/6/2019 5:25:04 PM with a score of 0
Good. Too short; not enough choices.
-- Quorrah on 12/30/2018 11:15:54 AM with a score of 0
The quality of the writing is quite good overall, but there are still several mistakes in the first few pages that I'll point out here.

-"foreword" is the beginning of a book, not a direction. Unless the author typed this on a mobile device, it's probably not a typo.
-"This is" the first time I've ever seen the contraction "this’s". Quite creative but unfortunately doesn't actually exist.
-"You’ll get to rests soon." should have "rest" instead of "rests". "Get to" and similar verbs are almost always followed by a plural verb.

As for the content (spoilers, obviously):
-I did realize that I would be playing as the dead mother of the girl from the first page almost immediately.
-The illusion or whatever that happens after your character's daughter declares "I'm going to a hospital, mother" is presented in a really confusing way, and I still couldn't understand it after read through several times.
-The story was extremely linear, with every choice except one always being a bad ending.
-The ending was abrupt, and the story feels very incomplete.
-- Victim on 12/10/2018 8:08:10 AM with a score of 0
Solid story. The sudden jump to repeatedly slapping the kid, and how normalized it was for the protagonist, was interesting. It helped illuminate the madness of being a monster.
-- Fluxion on 11/5/2018 11:16:56 PM with a score of 0
Truly wonderful. A bit shorter than I thought, but very good in that short time.

Loved all the bits making fun of the fat teacher. The protagonist sounded like an absolute shit.

One more thing, I loved the_
-- corgi213 on 11/4/2018 11:03:49 PM with a score of 0
Loved the imagery.
-- LuvLee on 11/3/2018 12:00:08 PM with a score of 0
Still love your writing. :)
-- Crescentstar on 10/31/2018 8:52:32 PM with a score of 0
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