ENG4U1 Seminar Game

This story was interesting. I guess I would call it a lot more game than story, because there really isn’t a lot of story to the game. Oh, there could be! I think there’s great opportunity here to really increase the storyline and make more of a story. Each page could be enhanced with great descriptions and details about what’s going on at that moment. As it is, the pages are really just factual pages that give you simple choices. Clearly this was written to meet an assignment in a class, but since it was an English class, I can’t imagine that the author couldn’t have put more behind each page.

In addition, it seemed like in many places you were given an option related to how you wanted your character to develop. Some options were more neutral, some were clearly evil, and others were somewhat good. However, those options really didn’t seem to have any effect on the story at all! I think a great opportunity was missed here to have those options affect the story later on. I did certainly appreciate all the options, this game did have a good number of choices that affected the story, even if many of them quickly led to end story links.

Overall this is a nice, classic story with great use of the different choices and options. It is a good CYOA, but I think it has potential to be even better in a few different ways. Thank you for sharing this story with the site!

The gameplay was decent enough. Yeah it could use a bit more story but that's just a personal opinion. My biggest complaint is some of the links. I understand putting some personality but seeing a # in an otherwise classical fantasy setting screwed with me. But on the whole not a bad little adventure.

So fantasy-like! I enjoyed it!

Short but fun.

So I played the good adventurer and shared the mountain of coins and wonder what would happen if the coins were taken by me alone? ;)

Pretty good game, I like it.
5/8

I only found out recently what Leroy Jenkins was. Lol, fun game.

It's a good story, but there isn't much description and the items aren't really used. The length is actually pretty good, but the story needs flesh.

Eh... it is a good rough draft. Try adding more small details. Such as pictures instead of generic items.

It has a few problems. First of all, it has very random page titles and you can't really use the items you get. Second of all, the story is short.

I think that if you fix those two things and make it longer, this story could become a well-written story many players rate highly.

Thanks :)