Escaping Dystopia

Player Rating3.69/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 74 ratings since 08/24/2014
played 555 times (finished 75)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

hey, Jackels here.

This story is for my english creative assignment, 1000 words. therefore i didn't get to develop into different paths as much as i would of hoped, but there is a main story. Enjoy this short story. 

This story is about the hardships of living in modern times with depression, with a background message about race and gay acceptance. 

Player Comments


Honestly, this game surprised me. I read the first three pages or so, and they weren't very well written. However, as I progressed, more effort seemed to be put in. Quite odd, since usually the beginning will be good and the end rushed, but it was a pleasant surprise.

The length was a problem. This felt like more of a good start than a complete story. Please spend more time on this.

This story had quite a disturbing element, but in my opinion that just reflects on how good the author is at fleshing emotion out.

The characters needed more development, more details on them would have been wonderful for this category.

A few grammatical errors riddled the story throughout, but overall I enjoyed it. Spend more time on this and you'll have something really great.

-- MinnieKing on 5/15/2017 11:41:35 PM
This was an interesting little trip (hehe). I liked that after your choices were made there was ample description of the consequences, and the pretty forest picture after I got high was a nice touch. There was a little bit of conflict with the main character about the character's sexuality, which I thought was a nice touch. I can't complain about the length because it seems the point of the story is about pretty much one decision.

I do have to ask, however, about one thing: Why would you name an Asian character "Opium?" I mean that seems kind of odd considering the actual Opium wars and it's effect on Chinese people. Just something I thought was odd.
-- Battlemage on 4/11/2017 4:11:39 AM
I'm not exactly sure what that was. I want to ask "Is the author ok"? I didn't like it. As someone that has a background in psychology, it bothered me. Not a good time. (Are you ok, author?)
-- Quorrah on 1/23/2017 3:11:49 PM
Ha! That's America a century later in a nutshell.
-- TheMonitor on 11/24/2015 11:40:53 PM
The description and writing style is awesome. Although the story is short it conveys a powerful message about what our society has become. I hope you write more.
-- corgi213 on 9/23/2015 12:34:51 PM
not bad but not much of a story
-- AthenaT on 5/10/2015 3:00:12 PM
Not bad I guess... not much of a storyline and could definitely benefit from a thorough edit.
-- insanebutvain on 8/25/2014 6:43:38 PM
It was okay.
-- coins on 8/22/2014 10:46:17 PM
The story was not bad, and grammar was very good from what I could see. However, others might think that the maturity level you set for the story should be put to 5/8. Otherwise, it was a good job: 5/8.
-- LeoScales7 on 8/22/2014 3:24:29 PM
This was really well done.
-- Malkalack on 8/22/2014 11:19:49 AM
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