a Sci-Fi by Orange

Player Rating4.98/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 17 ratings since 11/12/2020
played 49 times (finished 6)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

When the scientists at HappyCo created a one time injection that makes you feel nothing but happiness for the rest of your life, people lined up to get it. Unfortunately, the world soon found out that happy people aren't motivated to do much of anything and the global economy collapsed. There's no real estimate on how many people didn't get the mandatory injection but Mike, a serial killer in Texas, is determined to find as many of them as possible.

Player Comments

During my first read, all I had on my mind was how a story with this much stuff had less than 2000 words. Honestly, I was baffled. You had the happy™ killings, the big choice, the groups, and the endings. It all felt really complete and tied together in one solid storygame. You used the first choice as a clever disguise, while it did branch back to the same point, I didn’t feel cheated because of it. It added enough on its own to add to the story, while also making it seem bigger.

Now I could cry about the fact serial killers, who are mostly anti-social, form groups in this world, but I won’t. It added to the atmosphere of your world, where you either kill happily or are happy™ and killed. That’s also the tone of this story, like an old Tom and Jerry cartoon, it displays violence in a humorful manner while adding just enough seriousness in it to make it all work.

The one thing I do want to add, is that the breaks between the lines (in the poem that sounded more like an upbeat corporate theme song) and paragraphs were big, probably due to usage of the advanced text editor.
-- enterpride on 4/29/2020 6:49:32 PM with a score of 0
I loved everything except the Poem at beginning. I loved the way you described Mike and the TEARS. Really a great Job! I am jealous of your work!
-- poison_mara on 4/29/2020 8:21:47 AM with a score of 0
Before anybody complains this is too short, just pointing out it was written for the Tiny 'Topia challenge with a limit of 2000 words. (http://chooseyourstory.com/forums/creative-corner/message/26405)

I don't necessarily think anyone will complain though, because despite the brevity this doesn't feel incomplete at all. Just like a short and goofy (and very Endmaster-ish) idea you ran with, and I love it.

The whole thing was hilarious. Having to dump the Happy family one by one out on your lawn was the part that had me laughing the hardest.

Very nice and uplifting poem kicking this off with too, really sets the mood for our hero and his plight.
-- mizal on 4/28/2020 12:32:28 AM with a score of 0
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