Hastings, 1066: Aftermath

a Edutainment by TheWriterInTheDark

Commended by mizal on 8/19/2018 6:04:13 PM

Player Rating7.29/8

"#51 overall, #2 for 2018"
based on 115 ratings since 08/18/2018
played 2,300 times (finished 151)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length8/8

"Even light has to break at the rest stop"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

In 1066 England, all is chaos. King Harold has been killed by the Norman, William, who has usurped the throne. The sky is darkened by smoke and reddened by fire. Carrion crows circle and swords clash. The fate and future of England is at stake. Blades will strike. Men will die. Blood will flow.

 

 

A Brief Note: I am somewhat hesitant to classify this storygame as 'historical'. Of the fifty-two endings, only a couple bear any resemblance to actual history. Many of the people and places are real; however, many more have been fabricated. I decided very early on to sacrifice authenticity in exchange for enjoyment. Please play this game knowing that it will be full of anachronisms and other a-historical events, and please DON'T use it to study for your upcoming history test. Despite its inaccuracies, I still had a lot of fun writing it and I hope that you, the reader, are equally entertained while reading it.

Player Comments

This is what happens when a good concept meets a competent writer.

A common error is thinking that to write something historically accurate you have to adopt the style of the time; this usually prevents the reader from understanding you and feeling involved in the story. Here instead the historical setting is interesting without feeling overbearing (apart from one or two repetitive descriptions of the Norman armor), and that's thanks to your clear and effective style that manages not to feel anachronistic.

There are minor typos here and there but the general grammar is good, and in well-written stories of this size you usually tend to overlook any errors.

The pace is balanced, usually fast but with some strategically placed descriptions to inform the reader. I usually have little patience for detailed descriptions of settings, so if I succeeded in reading through them without being bored, anyone can.

Regarding characters and plot, I got the "Irish Wolf" epilogue and I liked both Dierdre and the bits on Irish culture as a whole, while the English characters were never annoying even if conventional.
One of the only flaws for me was the whole "Your current relation with [character]: Awful/Excellent" at the end of the page that was used only twice, while the rest of the time the opinions of others probably influenced the story but weren't displayed in this way. Also, before attacking London from the South my character explains the plan to Eamon and then in the very next page proceeds to explain the exact same plan to Dierdre, resulting in the unnecessary repetition of a whole paragraph.

The story in itself feels quite linear in the sense that different branches end up the same, but that's not necessarily a bad thing.

All in all a very good story with an immersive atmosphere, 7/8.
-- undr on 9/23/2018 9:57:12 AM with a score of 39
This was absolutely great! I have had to save my current spot in the story as it is a 170K Monster! (I killed myself by attacking William in order to comment on this because it is great)


Concept: This story is obviously set in the Norman invasion of England. The development is spectacular although I would have liked to see a bit of a backstory that happens before the actual invasion. I like how you give the reader a good idea about the equipment and the landscape ETC Prior to the battle. Another positive thing is that, like most other stories, when violence occurs it often does not have many concepts of which are similar to the development of the protagonists' personalities. But in your story, when the battles occur, you do a good job of representing King Harold and Lord AeuthuflWulf's love in war, and their love of fighting.

Structure: In your story, most of the time only the major events that occur are written about. Most of the time minor details could have been shown to give the reader a better understanding of what they have to do. Also, it is quite linear and regardless of the choices that the reader makes they will usually end up in a similar place in which they would be as an effect of choosing something else.

Characters: You did a great Job at expressing the characters emotions and feelings towards certain events and situations. You were able to make it evident when a protagonist was feeling down or worried, or if they dislike someone else.

Details: You did a good job at giving detail to what you wrote, and the number of words that were in each page made it quite simple to read, this enables the reader to just be able to go straight ford in the story. But a lot of the time it is actually a bit too simple if you added more detail to the certain events that would have been great!

Grammar: Out of what I read in your story, I didn't pick up any mistakes, and as another comment; the flow of your writing really suited the timeline of events and it was really effective in showing what's happening.

Conclusion: In conclusion, I think that you did a great job on your story; also, great job on being commended by Mizal! I only noticed that recently, anyway... You don't need to take this whole comment seriously as I haven't read much of your story yet.

Overall rating: 6/8

-Rattler
-- Rattler on 8/21/2018 8:32:31 AM with a score of 15
Absolutely wonderful!
-- Bootboy on 5/5/2019 8:10:27 AM with a score of 49
I lasted longer than I thought
-- ChooseYourStuff on 4/14/2019 1:44:57 AM with a score of 15
I love historical fiction, and this is one of the best 'amateur' stories I've run into. Characters are believable and fleshed out. Very nice
-- amoralmushroom on 3/14/2019 8:36:31 PM with a score of 15
Wow, just wow
-- delta1324 on 3/14/2019 11:49:14 AM with a score of 39
really good
-- jazel on 3/8/2019 1:13:40 PM with a score of 50
This is very good ! I can't be sure on what to choose as all are intriguing choices. I will play thin again once in while ! Gave it the highest rating !
-- Kuro on 3/7/2019 5:14:39 PM with a score of 23
This game is amazing, and as far as historical fiction goes, this is one of the best pieces I have ever played or read. I love the complexity of this game, and it deserves to be in the top five on this site, in my opinion. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to seeing what else you put out in the future.
-- ThatHarryPotterGuy on 3/5/2019 10:06:52 AM with a score of 43
Loved the non-Irish story the best! An excellent bit of story telling and highly recommended to all!
-- Robert Harrison on 3/1/2019 12:20:34 PM with a score of 45
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