I'm leaving

Hahaha, I love reading unpublished storygames. I died of laughter after this one.

I really enjoyed the narrative's hurt and honest tone. The author is obviously very skilled in consciously putting on another person's skin and write from that point of view. This ability allowed for this whole story to come alive, and it was almost as if a child truly talked to me through the screen.

Mizal is indeed a menace to this site. Luckily, there's a ban button in the works. Keep your eyes peeled to one of the upcoming updates!

Mizal is a mean, mean. Shame on him for making this little boy cry!

That Mizal, he can be tough but fair.

lmao

Mood. ????

Take criticism young one

You should've posted this in the forums, instead of making a storygame.
Also, yes, someone's going to swear in the comments. Not everyone's going to be like "OMG BEST STORY EVAAA!!!!1!1". But you won't see this comment, because you left this website.

I was actually 9 when I discovered this, then I wrote a story and there were no positive comments (I did write a WC story, but that doesn't matter). I stayed. If you're so easily offended, you shouldn't have joined.

A showcase of an onionskin...

Learn to take criticism, madam, especially the constructive criticism kind.

Until you do, you're a walking hazard that we need to stay far away from. 1/8.

This probably would have been much better as a forum post, seeing as it's really short and not interactive. Still, to critique it, leaving was probably a good idea this is the Internet, after all, and it's not made for easily offended 10 year olds.