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"march in the swamp"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
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A quite random game, about what a squirrel goes through just to get his breakfast.
I'll just say it right away. I didn't enjoy this.
First of all, it was very random (which you literally admitted in the description), and I couldn't even tell what was going on through all the linear writing and awkward, underdeveloped characters. All I know about Mandy is that she seems to get pissed really easily and knows boxing, but nothing much at all beyond that. Even for lolrandom games like this one developed characters are VERY important.
Then there was the fact that there was little to no branching (just about each link leads to death), and I really couldn't make any choices that effected the story without killing myself.
There were also some spelling errors, such as "sueal" and not "squeal." This is very annoying, because this story is incredibly short and this makes it feel like you didn't proofread at all, because stories so short with such little branching should be incredibly easy to proofread.
I didn't pick up on any emotion either, but hey, there's way worse on the site I suppose.
on 3/24/2017 12:42:02 AM
It was an average game for me. It had a nice amount of options and I liked playing a squirrel looking for nuts to eat. On the other hand, the not so great spelling and random deaths kind of held the game back for me. I suggest next time that you give a hint when I am close to dying.
on 4/28/2012 3:43:58 PM
Cute story. I really loved the pictures! All the spelling errors made reading a bit difficult
on 1/26/2017 3:02:19 PM
short, spelling was bad... but it was a good plot
on 4/26/2016 6:46:39 PM
Died every time....
on 1/9/2016 1:52:20 AM
I like the idea and branches out nicely, but this was filled with many, MANY spelling and grammar errors. And sometimes sometimes you would repeat a word.
Please go over your story after you finish it. For now it's a 3/8. But if you fix those errors then I might rate it higher.
on 10/31/2015 5:25:12 PM
on 4/25/2015 10:06:53 PM
It is a great idea for a book but the grammar was dreadful and I wish it was longer.
on 6/14/2014 9:38:52 AM
Life of a squirrel…interesting!
on 4/26/2014 5:34:19 PM
Ugh! Veary challenging!
on 3/24/2014 4:20:51 PM
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