Of Ruin

Player Rating3.07/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 55 ratings since 11/27/2015
played 189 times (finished 43)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

Nothing remains of what was. All is lost, save what is left of the ancient buildings of man. No rushing rivers, nor lush vegetation. Only the cold, hard stone remains. That, and you. You, the last living being alive, forever in isolation, alone until the end of time. Your only purpose, although insignificant in the eyes of the universe, is all that matters to you. And that purpose... will never be found, by you or the universe. And yet, you try. Even though you know your attempts are futile, you try and try to find a meaning of your tiny insignificant idea that is life. Only by the will of the universe could a cooperation be decided that would show the true meaning of life.

This is a short story.

Listen to this while you read.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5LXhPbmoHmU

Player Comments

So... It's supposed to be a poetic story about the destruction of the human civilization. I am not a poet, nor have I ever liked searching for deeper meaning in sentences, but here we go:
Short. It's short. I understood that humanity probably killed itself, but I didn't understand anything else. Again, it could be to the fact that I don't like cryptic poems and that, so I'll give you the highest rating I find appropriate:
4/8, though I think a 3/8 would be more suitable.

I also see that your other story was the same thing. I don't think people around here like these kind of things, so maybe you should focus on writing longer stories with plots that involve characters and character development...
:) Happy Writing
-- Ronhil12 on 11/27/2015 6:04:34 AM
The first page is poorly spaced and the first sentence doesn't really make any sense, neither do a few others on that same page. I guess you're trying to wax poetic about an existential crisis, but do keep in mind that good poetry tends to have a clear meaning. Your objective should be to (ultimately) enlighten, not confuse.

There's the odd error here and there, nothing too distracting, and I do enjoy the concept of being the lone being left in an empty world or universe, but... I dunno. I kind of like this, but I think it could've benefited from some fine-tuning and the endings where you speak to the universe--while attempting to be deep--miss the mark.

I was also expecting some kind of explanation for what the MC is and why they're in this position, and it's never provided.

It's hinted at that they were probably human or a human-like being at one point, but they obviously aren't now, if they can wander the universe at their leisure and were the only surviving being from some... catastrophe, maybe? It seemed like a mystery that we, as the readers, never solved.

It has seven endings in total from what I read, and that's a lot for a short story, so I appreciate that the choices make a difference; I just find myself wanting more detail and clarity.
-- Kiel_Farren on 11/24/2015 5:00:29 PM
I think this has potential. It's a good concept but would have been better if the story was further developed.
-- crazygurl on 6/24/2017 9:15:12 PM
It was short and sweet, but didn't have much backstory, and wasn't very long.
-- Chickdove on 12/22/2016 10:46:43 PM
i was satisfied with what i have done... okay... but it was a really nice story! combined with the music... i liked it!
-- thebigE on 7/6/2016 5:27:11 PM
I found the true ending. Great story.
-- Eric on 12/17/2015 3:34:42 PM
Hmmm... I'm left confused. What did I just play, or read to be more accurate? Was it far too poetic and enlightening for a stupid man like me? Perhaps. Perhaps it was nonsense. I don't know.
Other than that, too short and not a lot of sense, but ultimately enjoyable.
-- Steve24833 on 12/16/2015 11:11:56 AM
Not a bad story, but defintly more story than game. I was hoping for a puzzle of some kind though. But all the detail was great, a perfect little five minet game.
-- Dmanxbox on 12/9/2015 12:15:45 PM
Description is longer than the actual story.
-- TheBossWriter on 12/7/2015 12:43:29 PM
Fascinating work. Well done.
-- mshub1246 on 11/28/2015 7:11:32 PM
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