Revenge for honor

Player Rating3.73/8

"#372 overall, #43 for 2012"
based on 101 ratings since 12/15/2012
played 1,227 times (finished 121)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

My life was getting harder and harder as I was growing up. I was all alone after the death of my parents and relatives, all were killed by the town members because they couldn't pay the taxes within the alloted time. But I was left alive and who have witnessed the death of my all the family members by my eyes. Few were burned, some of them were thrown into well, my parents....and all...all....were dead. The only thing that was left for me was revenge for the thirst of blood. And from that day, I promised, no one will have mercy.

WARNING: This is my first storygame and as you many guys know English isn't my first language.

Player Comments

Stupid ended sooooo fast one coice was death the other wasent
-- Happy golucky on 7/25/2018 3:51:54 PM
the story is good but the freedom with the choices are really either death or the other
-- MathieuConsuelo on 5/1/2018 1:56:52 PM
I realize English isn't your first language, but it doesn't make the grammatical problems easier to get through. I would have recommended having a native speaker do a quick run through this at the very least.

'There was a blood dripping out from his body when I shooted twenty bullets into his mouth. I knew I've killed one of my enemies but now police would be again next to me.'

Just one example of many, but one I found funny for whatever reason.

I'm going to assume in the years since this has been published you've figured out how to punctuate dialogue and so not spend time going into detail on that, other than to note it's another persistent problem here.

The story's pretty much entirely linear, but as a normal short story it would work just fine. There's enough content here that I could tell effort was put in and for the most part there's nothing wrong with the plot...the big exception being that the death of the character's parent and thus their entire motivation is spelled out in the story's description, yet absolutely nowhere in the story itself.

(And honestly, even what's in the description doesn't make a whole lot of sense. It sounds like a fantasy setting with people being thrown down wells etc., but then, wait, they're killed not by an evil dictator, but by other townspeople out of...I guess moral outrage at the shirking of their civic duty? And then the story itself turns out to be in a modern setting and it all suddenly makes even less sense, so who even knows.)
-- mizal on 7/3/2017 11:07:38 AM
Really linear, but that was a good story.
-- crazygurl on 6/12/2017 10:49:49 PM
lol loved the different options, keep it up
-- ZergRush305 on 2/9/2017 10:22:47 AM
A fine game, but I'm wondering why the author rated his own game.
-- lolitup4 on 3/11/2016 3:13:41 PM
Good one. Wish it was longer. Though, nice attempt
-- RobustSporadic on 2/5/2014 6:18:09 AM
Completely awesome game!!
-- Negative on 1/8/2014 7:45:08 AM
Is that the end?
bit of a cliffhanger.
-- walker on 8/16/2013 3:38:35 PM
This story is just so good but required more choices and length
-- Genius_Guy on 1/10/2013 10:36:31 PM
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