Silent Night

Player Rating4.83/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 24 ratings since 12/24/2018
played 169 times (finished 29)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

A very questionable Christmas special.

It's Christmas in Hub City. One might expect that even criminals would take the night off, but you've learned the hard way that crime doesn't sleep. While the rest of the city is tucked into their homes in the company of loved ones, you're on the hunt in a silent city, making sure that things stay that way.

The Question is copyright DC comics. So yeah, don't sue me.

Author's Notes: Did I say I was definitely not going to write a Question fanfiction for this contest? Because what I meant was I didn't mean to but I had to squeeze something out before the contest's end. And with Christmas so fast approaching, what better than a Christmas special, eh?

Player Comments

This story was really quite good. The writing in particular was solid. All different interesting sentence styles, an immediate noir tone to the narrative voice, and a really good sense of authentic dialogue structure.
I love when storygames give me interesting, developed text for the choices--not just "take them to a soup kitchen" or "fight them" but choices that give motive and character, like " Desperate or not, a crime's a crime. I crack my knuckles and prepare to go to work." Now that's a well-written choice! Now, I'm not just choosing fight/no fight but what kind of guy I am. So I was hooked right from the first choice.

That strength in the text of the choices extends to make an actually interesting fight: I often see choices like dodge/punch/kick with no reference to the story. If you carefully read the text of the story, the choice to make becomes obvious. The man is large and burly--better to dodge and duck. So again, the choices and the body of the story work well together. That doesn't happen easily, and I appreciate the work that went into that.
The second fight was quite good too, although I think I would have liked perhaps one more tactical choice there, since I enjoyed that in the first fight--the second fight feels a little less characterful, perhaps because it's less personal feeling.

My one comment about narrative flow is that the paragraphing needs work. There are a few times when multiple speakers all speak in one paragraph, and it does get a bit confusing:
"Don't mention it, kids. You need a place to stay?" They look to each other for a moment, before shrugging as if figuring "what the hell" and nod their heads. "Well, there's a shelter a few blocks that way." You point in the direction of the homeless shelter. "Only place on that street that's lit up. They'll let you stay there, even feed you."
That's a pretty interesting moment that loses some momentum without more clearly breaking it out into multiple paragraphs.

All in all, this was seriously impressive as a piece of fanfiction. It was well-written and managed to create some narrative suspense, as well as make me makein-character decisions about morality and combat tactics.
-- Gower on 9/3/2019 6:08:04 AM with a score of 0
I thought the moral choices were pretty thought-provoking (well, as thought-provoking as two opposing sentences can be) and gray, different people would have different answers to those dilemmas.

I also like how you can tell which option is going to get you killed beforehand if you're really trying to avoid dying. No tricks or anything. For example, when someone throws a punch at you it sounds pretty implausible to just grab their swinging fist and break it. However it's not overly obvious so you can still die if you're not thinking that hard about it.

My favorite part (I'm pretty sure I played through every page unless there were hidden variables) was when the Question rushes in at the eight men and then gets pushed/kicked into the water and starts drowning. Obviously it gives you the "Dead" ending, but I thought it was realistic that there's an option to just give in and die, anyone might have a little part of them thinking that if they get beat up and shot and pushed into cold water. I liked "It doesn't hurt." It kind of made the scene better than if it had been "You sink into the freezing water, your whole body hurts, you want it to end, it really hurts, finally death brings you sweet relief", that was probably what I would expect to happen. I guess maybe you put that because he was numb from the cold. But still, I thought it was good and a little unexpected.
-- jodithewitch on 12/25/2018 1:49:24 AM with a score of 0
Despite being short and quite linear it was still enjoyable because the scenes were descriptive enough and your style, as usual, was very similar to that of an actual comic. As Jodie said, the fact that the right choices weren't always obvious also gave a nice touch to the story.
-- undr on 12/26/2018 4:14:24 PM with a score of 0
I really enjoyed this.

It was short and sweet, well written, but it felt very linear. I would have liked to have seen choices that didn't strong arm me. There were multiple endings(different results for the fight and some bad ends), but the choices felt a little empty because they all lead to the same fight no matter what.

Besides that, it was descriptive and engaging. I had fun reading it and wish there was more of it to read.

Great job!

I give it a 4/8, would have been a 5 if it wasn't so linear.
-- simplesabley on 12/26/2018 10:54:47 AM with a score of 0
Pretty cool story
-- Faervel on 12/25/2018 7:08:08 PM with a score of 0
Hey, Chris wrote another storygame. Since he said it won't be a question fanfiction, I wonder what it is?
Oh... It's a Question fanfiction.

Anyway, it was a short story and all, but it did have a nice amount of FEELS for the length. Plus, it's sorta CHRIStmas themed, so that's fitting.
-- WouldntItBeNice on 12/25/2018 1:05:36 AM with a score of 0
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