Player Comments on The Lemonade Business 2

Well it was a good idea, but things didn't work out with the writing. The choices weren't even really choices. The reader was forced to choose an option on the very first page. That defeats the purpose of writing on this site, as you could just go and do that on another that isn't about how linear your story is. This needs to be fixed.

Speaking of bad choices, I sold sugar and called it lemonade. I made money from this, and that's just wrong. Things like that are realistic at all, and make no sense in this story. Another thing that doesn't make any sense is the pet store. What's the point? All I did was cuddle a bunny that I wanted to put in my lemonade.

The writing was bad, the story was linear, and I lost interest after the first few pages. It needs a lot of work and proofreading as well, because I caught numerous mistakes that take away from the story. I'll give this a very generous 3/8.
-- Nyctophilia on 8/30/2017 6:45:02 PM with a score of 0
I just played this game and to say the least I am kind of disappointed.

The thing that killed this storygame most was probably the length, which ended way too abruptly. I was hoping for a tycoon sim game, but I got a story where you make lemonade from various ingredients. Although it was sort of amusing to make lemonade out of the different products (cow urine, unicorn feces,) avaliable, it was still very short.

I can see you were trying to use variables and items to manage the story, but in the end, the money didn't necassarily make a difference at all and, again... all you do is make lemonade from various ingrediants (items).

I suggest you do make a Lemonade Business 3, but at least have some sim/RPG aspects embedded, otherwise we are just going to get another linear remake of Lemonade Business 1.

The writing was at least better. However, I personally felt that there were too many exclamation points in the writing (These things: "!").

Lastly, and this isn't a big thing at all, but when you select the choice of making the second ingrediant, it tells you (not actual quote): "Alright, time to make lemonade! Put in your first ingrediant!" This confused me a bit, and I first I thought it was just a loop mistake, so I restarted the process of making the lemonade, and instead put the second ingrediant at the first ingrediant screen (if that makes sense). It told me that I put it in wrong, but I noticed, if you select "put the next ingrediant" and make your lemonade, there is NO way to make the lemonade wrong. There is no certain combination, anything goes pretty much.

I think, if you're just going to make a game about making lemonade out of various ingrediants, you should atleast let the reader know how exactly it tasted, based off the ingrediants instead of giving us a "Good" or "Interesting" option and then "Everyone loves your new recipe!" You don't have to tell us what the customers thought it tasted, just what it tasted to the protaganist. That could have probably added onto it and made it a little more amusing.

3/8.
-- Fazz on 8/5/2014 5:35:45 PM with a score of 0
This storygame was actually pretty good considering its length, and I was about to rate it a 4 or 5 when I read this: "This game is supposed to be cute and funny so please rate it as so" Now I have rated it a 3 because that is a form of begging the reader to rate the story high, and I am not rating a story higher than a 4 if they are begging for higher ratings.
-- stargirl on 2/20/2021 4:06:03 PM with a score of 0
Honestly, I really liked the simple premise of this game, and I think you could've done a lot better with it just by expanding on it a little. You got the use of items down. We successfully made our lemonade... And then the game ends.

Shouldn't we be selling our lemonade now? Buying more ingredients to make more lemonade? Improving our recipe? Hiring more workers to sell more lemonade, paying for advertisements to promote our lemonade? Growing our own lemon tree? Starring in the famous porno, "Lemon Stealing Whores?" I really think you've underestimated just how much you can achieve with lemonade... Still, it was fun while it lasted. ^_^
-- Avery_Moore on 7/14/2020 10:09:06 AM with a score of 0
first better
-- 7layers on 6/15/2020 11:55:37 PM with a score of 0
I want a lemonade business 3!!!!! It could use a little work such as maybe it could be a little bit long but I liked it!
-- FoxheartFireFlame on 3/23/2020 9:25:39 AM with a score of 0
Haha we need more of these!
-- BgirlStories on 5/10/2019 5:21:54 PM with a score of 0
I sold chicken blood instead of lemonade and made 100k. I’m confused
-- Austinc on 1/14/2019 1:14:33 PM with a score of 0
Okay, to be honest, the first lemonade was WAY better than this. The storyline could have been better by a lot. And the overall plot could have been richer. I like how Fishy and the new bunny has some actual "purpose", unlike the last game. Overall, really could have improved. 3/8

Looking forward to the next lemonade.
-- TheSurvivalist on 10/10/2017 9:27:51 PM with a score of 0
The story was very boring. The spelling, (no offense) was awful and you didn't really need to include damn or crap in there since it had no place.

The plot of the story was really strange. I didn't quite like it that much. This could be WAY better if you had installed Grammarly on your laptop, and if you had actually EDITED your work.

I don't understand how artificial cow urine, unicorn shit, and chicken-blood can make a goo- I mean EDIBLE tasting lemonade?

I'm also guessing that you had meant to make this game comedic, but it didn't make me chuckle because I was noticed the misspelled words, and this game also made me question your sanity.

Please work on this game, and next time in the future MegLuvMTrench, please spell *customers correctly. It isn't costumes.

-- DiniTheWizard on 9/30/2017 10:37:29 AM with a score of 0
Very linear, but it was a very cute little story
-- Zulutrader on 9/26/2017 8:40:28 PM with a score of 0
There is potential here, but needs refinement.

1. Needs to be longer.

2. Making a silly/funny story is fine, but simply making it possible to make lemonade of preposterous ingredients, regardless of what is used the result is the same, still, rainbow colored unicorn dung with sparkles was worth a chuckle.

3. Variables need to be more then for show, as the money aspect did not seem to affect the story in the least.

All and all a decent attempt, keep it up!
-- MrSnuggles on 9/19/2017 4:47:51 PM with a score of 0
Wait, was that it? You buy items, then use just one item (doesn't matter if it's chicken blood or shit or a bottle of water) and sell it, and you win? I know it's not meant to be serious, but come on. This could be way better.
-- Saika on 7/25/2017 11:08:14 AM with a score of 0
It was very good and really funny!!! Can't wait to play lemonade business 3!!!:)
-- liz on 4/22/2017 11:57:52 AM with a score of 0
I got kicked out of the mall for punching a lemonade salesman then gave people chicken blood mixed with cow urine and it was a huge hit. I got super rich off blood and urine. Maybe this game is a satire of capitalism in and of itself and says that you can sell anything to the public if you market it right.

But really though, this game had little to no spelling and grammatical errors so that was nice. The writing was funny and interesting! However, it was a bit short and I think it didn't really matter what you bought to make lemonade so that was pretty pointless. Other than that, I quite enjoyed it.
-- Orange on 3/4/2017 9:29:41 PM with a score of 0
So...? Cow Urine, Chicken Blood and Unicorn Feces make me rich? Okey then.
-- lejama88 on 2/9/2017 9:52:51 AM with a score of 0
I literally used a bottle of water and sold it as "lemonade".
-- Naomi14 on 12/31/2016 1:22:00 PM with a score of 0
Can you please make lemonade bissnes 3
-- Crazycraft316 on 10/16/2016 6:49:58 PM with a score of 0
i made lemonade out of cow urine?
-- epix on 10/13/2016 8:14:46 PM with a score of 0
MONEY is 100093. whoa. one day and i've got !@#$@# wow!
-- thekid on 6/6/2016 6:35:45 PM with a score of 0
Eh... Needs some improvement... But other than that, it was AWESOME!!!
-- Flowerlynx on 4/1/2016 7:04:47 PM with a score of 0
HAHAH I used chicken blood and said it tasted good. Then i got rich lOOL
-- CurseOfTime on 3/22/2016 11:32:01 AM with a score of 0
They only loved it.
-- DeathIncarnate on 8/31/2015 7:09:09 PM with a score of 0
2/8
Why?-I agree with DerpBacon and ISentinelPenguinI, also why is it that no one likes chicken blood and cow urine lemonade.
-- DeathIncarnate on 8/31/2015 7:07:27 PM with a score of 0
I was dissappointed that you couldn't put the bunny in the lemonade mix.
-- ISentinelPenguinI on 5/19/2015 10:17:42 AM with a score of 0
The first game was better than this. The original game focused on the protagonist being a future lemonade tycoon, showing his/her process of running the lemonade business. However, this is only about buying a least two items and making a new recipe. Then, it's done. This needs more.
-- DerpBacon on 11/10/2014 3:42:32 PM with a score of 0
fml i suck at this game
-- MegLuvMTrench on 11/8/2014 8:35:08 PM with a score of 0
Really easy. If you want to make this better make it more of a challenge. It seems more like an experiment using varible then a completed quality story game.
-- Jordi P on 10/1/2014 12:57:50 PM with a score of 0
Wait, cow urine is good?
-- jelly on 7/21/2014 8:58:55 PM with a score of 0
That went like toooo fast
-- jelly on 7/21/2014 8:56:38 PM with a score of 0
I made lemonade with water... I din't feel like leaving a rating so..... Yeah.
-- 11302 on 7/16/2014 9:14:12 AM with a score of 0
It was just great pure awesome. You should continue to do what you do best. Making fun story games and lemonade.
sincerly, 24freddy
-- 24freddy on 7/10/2014 4:50:04 PM with a score of 0
It is fun
-- Ripplestone on 7/8/2014 9:17:36 AM with a score of 0
Please make an #3
-- Adry1816 on 7/4/2014 3:39:08 PM with a score of 0
good lemonade wiht unicorn fences lemons blood and urine
-- crazykako24 on 6/24/2014 7:07:19 PM with a score of 0
I must say, I'm very happy that my lemonade that consisted of chicken blood, cow urine, and unicorn feces was a big hit ^_^
-- HolyFrax on 6/20/2014 5:59:09 PM with a score of 0
My thoughts mirror on what Fireplay said. I understand it is intended to be lighthearted, but the lack of an actual plot makes the game kind of pointless. The concept has potential if you create more of a sense of purpose.
-- Bucky on 6/18/2014 5:50:39 PM with a score of 0
Not very imaginative. Not much of a storyline. Some bugs in the game.
-- insanebutvain on 6/16/2014 9:40:43 PM with a score of 0
Decent story. For some reason I was unable to buy any water so you should fix that. It's okay though, I just used another liquid substitute.
-- Danaos on 6/16/2014 10:47:58 AM with a score of 0
LMAO!!!
-- bearclaw01234 on 6/16/2014 12:07:51 AM with a score of 0
Your choices are simple and usually obvious. The wrong answers are just U-turns for the reader and don't add anything to the storygame.

But your use of items is basic and as far as I know your use of scripting is also basic but good. (Not sure what the 'Yum' value was for)

So overall I would call it a short diversion from whatever the reader was doing before moving on. 3/10
-- Fireplay on 6/15/2014 11:26:17 PM with a score of 0
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