The Life Story #1: Preschool

Player Rating3.04/8

"#467 overall, #48 for 2014"
based on 104 ratings since 12/19/2014
played 997 times (finished 110)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.

You are a little girl named Maddie. You are unaware of the dangers of preschool. What you choose decides your fate! Choose wisely!

Player Comments

Well it wasn't exactly BAD, just boring and not original in the slightest. It's really short as well, but there's not much that can be done with a narrow idea like this. It's why I've never been into storygames that are about spending a day doing whatever. They never turn out well and are boring.

The writing wasn't too bad, but some things need work. There's a part that talks about the mom introducing you to the door or something, so that was a little weird. Also, the kid's dialogue and mental proceeds are a little too advanced to be believable. I'd say tone it down a bit.

There's a few spelling and grammar mistakes that can be fixed as well, so I'd just take this down and work on it some more.

3/8
-- Nyctophilia on 9/27/2017 9:20:18 PM
Do;
Make it longer (too short for "Part of Series");
Write dialogue correctly (it's passable, but not 100% correct);
Include more interactions;
Make a conflict other than being left alone in preschool (example: bullies).

Good:
Writing skills;
Link choices (you had realistic choices);
Choice of words (not too hard for kids).

Note: It actually hooked my attention quite well. Keep up the good work!
-- Crescentstar on 12/11/2016 11:46:39 AM
I like it, reasonably interesting premise and well written. I've worked at a kindergarten in China and some of the children cried almost nonstop for 3 months when they first went but that might have been because they were 2-3 years old. The older children were 5 and 6 and after a few years teaching they knew the alphabet, the phonetic alphabet and can start to read short words, so out of boring teachery interest how old is the main character Maddie?
-- Will11 on 12/21/2014 12:24:37 AM
Good start to a story but you should have Preschool and Kindergarden in one.
-- Robin8 on 7/10/2017 10:32:20 PM
This is good.
-- UnStriped_Tiger on 6/25/2017 3:03:31 PM
This is NOT fun
It's Funny
-- ZombieGamer9188 on 5/28/2017 3:40:08 PM
Not much of a story.
-- Quorrah on 2/9/2017 5:25:44 PM
it was cute...
-- thebigE on 7/6/2016 5:33:42 PM
It was decent..kind of interesting, but I would have liked it better if offered more options.But overall, nice grammar and good job on the story game.

5/8
-- Snowflame on 1/8/2016 10:24:28 PM
4/8
Why?-I like how you can be a total brat and still get away with it, I find it amusing.
-- DeathIncarnate on 8/31/2015 6:56:31 PM
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