The Multiverse Chalkboard
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"wandering through the desert"
"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
There is a sequence of runes which can lead you to alternate dimensions. There is a scientist posing as a teacher who has figured out how to manipulate these runes. There is you, who is somehow getting mixed up in all of this.
That was ... dissapointing. The first thing that i came to notice was how bland the characters were, starting with myself, dissapointingly enough. I honestly find mildly funny how little this guy reacts to what's happening. There's this portal that brings you to other universes where anything can happen,and honestly he doesnt seem to give much of a sh*t, he seems a bit intrigued at best. The worst is that you are probably the least character of all the characters, and that's saying a lot, considering that the rest are: A jock, who hates you because ... because. A school diva, who you of course have a crush on. The childhood friend, who is your friend. I think there were other ones, that i sadly cannot remember.
And there's also our lovely professor, who for some reason decided it was a good idea to send teenagers on wild adventures in the multiverse, he is also not very good at choosing them. The strong jock and the nerd i guess i understand, but why recruit a person who doesn't respect your authority enough to not consult you before revealing the secret of your project? And what is the diva doing there? What did he see in her? Was he just desperate to find people?
Other than that, the narration is a bit lacking, this is a bit of a more personal note, but i would've prefered if it had been a bit more descriptive of the enviroment, the atmosphere and how the characters felt. My guess is that you ass the author didn't expect much of this story, but i still would encourage you to continue it with a bit more care.
on 8/10/2016 6:11:16 PM
While I enjoyed the story I couldn't help feel like it was meant to be much bigger. It's about a multi-verse yet only one other universe is ever explored.
Which brings me to my second point... of why? The motives of anyone aren't ever explained. Why is the doctor exploring these worlds? I thought his assistant had something to do with it at first, but he makes it clear he's sure he's dead. So why keep exploring when dangerous things are about?
Why use children to help explore, and why did the children agree? Why did they need more of them? Most of them seem to know just how dangerous it can be, yet they keep going. Did they just enjoy the novelty of entering new worlds? Did they stand to gain something by following the Dr?
Why were you invited? It seems the girl likes you, but what would that have to do with inviting you?
It's a cool setting, but I felt like it was left largely unexplored.
on 7/17/2016 3:24:30 PM
Good game. I liked it alot . I could play over and over!
-- Georgia Nader on 9/17/2016 10:33:26 PM
-- Mylo on 9/17/2016 10:31:47 PM
It would be better if there was more to this story. What is already here is really good though and I enjoyed it. But more would be nice.
on 8/1/2016 12:29:05 PM
If you made this one a book, I'd definitely read it. Definitely. I just started getting attached to the characters! C'mon man! (This was really good btw :D)
-- Stoic on 7/31/2016 4:00:49 AM
Very intriguing! Creepy... and sad that protagonist only had the choice of 2 dangerous worlds with whichever day he joins the multiverse traveling crew.
I would absolutely love more from this story exploring various multiverses. *_____*
-- Kyu on 7/25/2016 8:43:56 PM
Killa, wow that's a lot to cover. Looks like you under and over thought things in turn, I'll try to respond to all of your questions/critiques....
We actually explore TWO other universes in this story, not one. There's the zombie one and the doppleganger one. Why not more? Because at the end of either of these worlds things get too dangerous and they end the way they end (which should explain why there's no more to explore without giving everything away in a comment).
The doctor is exploring these worlds in the name of science. He's a scientist. Also, if he happens to find a world where say... gold is in such abundance that it's value is super low; he can bring it back to his home universe and be rich. He could find a new invention and steal it as his own. etc.
Why use children? Because they are eager and free labor and he is a man with limited moral values.
As for the danger, (which is actually a few of your questions)... Other than the 'assistant' who 'got lost', there has been nothing dangerous encountered until we pick up with this story; none of the students learn that there was any real danger in this universe hopping until one or two specific paths where Dr. Verrukt reveals what really happened to his assistant.
The precautions they are taking are not in the name of danger, they are to avoid running into a duplicate of themselves... which would presumably be very dangerous. So the students continue to explore from 'the novelty' of exploring new worlds... Though 'novelty' is a word that really cheapens the appeal. They're exploring alternate universes. I don't know a lot of people that wouldn't be interested in checking that shit out.
As for why were you invited; and this one pains me to answer b/c other than your "only one world to explore" this one was clearly answered in multiple paths; you are really good friends with 'the girl'. Dr. Verrukt said they needed more people for exploring, she trusts you due to long-standing friendship; and boom. She invited you along.
Hop that helps clarify some stuff for you. Thanks for reading.
on 7/18/2016 12:36:26 PM
destiny was first sexy and now she is à murderer
-- Måns on 7/18/2016 10:32:17 AM
its great for what it is but definitely way to short if it was longer and proceeded like this could be 10/10
on 7/13/2016 4:47:01 PM
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