The Time Machine Episode 2: The Dino World

Player Rating3.16/8

"#493 overall, #47 for 2006"
based on 117 ratings since 09/11/2006
played 719 times (finished 159)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

You have come to the time of the dinosaurs! While exploring, a ptranadon stole your time machine! You'll have to find it!

Player Comments

The introduction to this story makes it sound quite exciting. But well, after that it kind of went downhill. The first page only has a few sentences, and then asks me to click to go on. There’s no option there, so why is there a link? Why not just include those few sentences on the next page with the next few sentences?

Then there’s the text itself. Well, there’s not a lot there. There is a real potential here for quite an exciting and rich story that was really missed. There could be a lot more description about what the reader is seeing: you’ve put the reader in a prehistoric world! You could spend pages and pages describing all the new sounds and smells they are encountering. You could describe individual animals in detail as the reader learns and explores the new world around them! But instead we get “several furry animals.”

I do like the item use and the link with the item. It is nice to include the different options, but in this case, as another commenter has mentioned – the different options aren’t actually different choices. Instead, it is pick the right choice or die. And worse, there’s no clue at all as to which one might be the right choice. Authors, if you’re going to have a link lead to an ending, it is almost always more effective to have some kind of hint that it’s going to lead to death!
-- Ogre11 on 7/20/2018 3:26:22 PM with a score of 100
Basically a pick the correct choice or die game, really. I mean, about half the "choices" just kill me, and I don't think i'm exaggerating. If I am, not by much.

The first one was a lot better, because the plot was introduced less sloppily and the setting had enough detail for me to actually have a picture in my mind of what it was like. I'd say this is quite a drop in quality from part one to be completely honest.

There were a few grammar/spelling errors, I mean, even in the description. Before you make a storygame about dinosaurs, please learn how "pteranodon" is spelt.

I played multiple times, and no matter which "path" I chose, I died. It goes to show how many death links there are here, and how illogical the storygame was. The situations seemed completely random.

I think it's quite clear you didn't study about the dinosaurs very well, since you couldn't even get a bunch of the names correct.

2/8.
-- MinnieKing on 3/21/2017 7:24:47 PM with a score of 0
Fab!!!!
-- Dave on 3/25/2018 6:00:49 PM with a score of 100
The plot made more sense than the previous game, and I can tell this is a setting you're interested in. However, it lost the game element that you'd been successful with in the first game. This felt like it was just 50/50 guesses on whether I'd die or not a lot of the time, and other times it was just clicking through the links. There were also a few spelling errors that suggested you hadn't proof-read the story e.g. baerly, thte, cames, stalagtites, veloceraptors.
I'm looking forward to continuing reading this series. I'd advise you to take the good game mechanics from the first story, and combine them with the more logical plot of this story. If you can do that, I think you'd be looking at a vastly improved game.
-- tjwilliams555 on 2/16/2017 6:27:28 PM with a score of 100
this is a very exciting game and people will really enjoy it
-- Mohammed on 2/16/2017 9:20:31 AM with a score of 100
Thanks for the free point!
-- MasonJarGuzzi on 3/14/2016 11:51:24 PM with a score of 0
I thought this was written decent, but I was basically only running around the whole time. 4/8
-- Frontierloc on 12/30/2015 1:10:39 PM with a score of 100
Not bad.
-- Penworth on 7/21/2015 11:07:32 AM with a score of 0
when will the third episode come out?
-- keno351 on 3/31/2015 3:14:08 PM with a score of 100
It ends with death, however you play.
-- ShadowHunterJunior on 3/14/2015 10:21:21 AM with a score of 0
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