The Veil

Player Rating5.10/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 18 ratings since 10/08/2017
played 61 times (finished 3)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length8/8

"Even light has to break at the rest stop"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

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All your life you've had an uncanny ability. You always seem to win at games of chance; you've always known when to bet and when to fold. You've often convinced yourself it was merely luck or keen intuition, but strange events reveal there is something more going on. Others have found out about you and your talent, and some of them are not happy about it. They are after you, and you aren't sure what they're going to do if they find you...

 

This story is an entry for BZ's Summer Slam contest. It kind of rides the middle ground between the guidelines of super hero and spy. If you make it to the end, things get really weird, and if you pass through training, you'll know you got to the "true" end. How powerful you become will depend on what you do. For the first few chapters there are cheats and hints.

 

There are several achievements to obtain as you play. When the game ends your achievements will be listed. You cannot get all of them (without exploiting the game, that is) since there are a couple of mutually exclusive pairs, but choices you make will determine which ones you get.

 

Warning: In playing this story game you may encounter disturbing material, including deaths, accidents resulting in serious injury, terrified or injured animals, and graphic violence.

Player Comments

Captivating story. Although there are typos, overall it is a great to read.
-- futurehero97 on 9/22/2017 8:37:57 PM with a score of 0
Thanks for reading, everyone. I should warn readers that if you don't have images allowed on your browser, the dark background may not show up, making the story hard to read. There could be other browser issues as well. As long as everything is default, the dark blue backgound shohld show. It is an image posted in global scripts, so unless you are blocking images for some reason, there should be no issue.

Speaking of images: I mistakenly only credited one (ran out of time and forgot). All images come from either Pixabay or my girlfriend, and several are photoshoped by me. Pixabay is a free sight that allows you to use any image WITHOUT crediting the photographer. It is a great resource.

Also, use the cheat links in each of the early chapters! They will help you navigate through the important decisions and help with achievements, if that is something you care about.

Again, thank you all who read.
-- Battlemage on 9/21/2017 2:01:26 PM with a score of 0
Really enjoyed the story. Intermixes elements of physics and the supernatural quite well.
-- Sammy2118 on 9/21/2017 9:23:06 AM with a score of 0
Well, I honestly thought it was quite difficult to read with the different colors of the text, and I found the story interesting. It does have potential to be better though.
-- DiniTheWizard on 9/20/2017 11:02:03 PM with a score of 0
This is an interesting case where I got invested in the story, then was left confused and annoyed when I lost, to the point where I didn't want to bother with another path. Apparently listening to the mysterious people who help you means your heart and soul aren't ready.

Only got to chapter two, and it seems there were at least five given you credit an image from the fifth chapter.
-- Killa_Robot on 9/20/2017 9:55:26 PM with a score of 0
It was interesting, but not exactly engaging. Not that it was bad, it was well written and story meandered along with some good choices to make. But, I didn't feel any connections to the characters, which took a lot of tension out of the story in my opinion. Still, quite interesting and intriguing concept, and the climax was very satisfying.

Oh, and just a little nitpick, don't use light colored font on the white page. It was hard on my eyes and I took to highlighting the whole pages, which took away from the effect you were going for. Consider using a darker color, say dark purple or maroon.
-- RoyalGhost_007 on 9/20/2017 9:32:08 PM with a score of 0
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