Weird Outcome

Player Rating5.31/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 45 ratings since 07/26/2016
played 409 times (finished 49)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

The US government discovered about the fact that a crime organization known as "Inner Circle" is secretly being controlled by vampires. At first, they didn't believe it. But it turned out that it was the fact. Vampires are supposed to be a fantasy, but 'fantasy' things seemed to be real after all. The government kept this a secret to civilians.

Sharon and Leo are human-vampire hybrids who work as mercenaries, vigilantes, and bounty hunters. They tried to keep their origin a secret, but the US government discovered it. Both are visited by a young woman who claimed that she came from a different world -- another universe which is just like a fantasy fiction. The woman brought both of them to the FBI.

Both human-vampire hybrids were also caught for doing 'unpleasant' activities during their time before they got captured. Sharon and Leo were also used to be police officers who escalated to be SWAT officers. The FBI interrogated them about Inner Circle and facts about them. They were forced to tell everything they knew about them.

And both were tasked for an important mission -- to put an end to Inner Circle and the vampires once and for all. Inner Circle's base of operations is located in a city known to be full of merciless criminals and crime organizations. Should they succeed, they will obtain their freedom.

Seeing no other choice, Sharon and Leo accepted. They joined and collaborated with a famed private security company, Global Risk Security (GRS for Short) in their mission to take down Inner Circle. A battle-hardened veteran from Soviet-Afghan war will also assist them with his high skill and experience.

The vampires and their crime organization must be put down once and for all...

Well... this is going to be a very weird experience.

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This is more of a story rather than a game. This storygame is also NOT that serious.

In this storygame, you will play and control multiple protagonists. At a certain point (especially when moving to the next chapter), you will switch to a different character. Each character has different personality and background, and one is a female while the others are males. Each character also has different perspective.

Sharon, Leo, and Misha are the main playable characters. At certain points, you control multiple characters at the same time. Sometimes, you get to play a minor character such as a GRS contractor or even an enemy henchman, but it is only for a few pages before reverting back to the main character. These minor characters are also considered to be 'bonus' playable characters.

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This storygame contains vulgar words and violence. Viewer discretion is advised.

Special thanks to MasonjarGuzzi for proofreading and everyone who has motivated me.

Player Comments

This was some pretty good writing, Raven!

I found it quite innovative that this storygame didn't have a single perspective, giving different characters and scenarios to play out. The action was also pretty good, being quite descriptive and certainly exciting. It's really written quite well and makes this action driven story very fun to read through, choosing through the many choices that's in this story was quite rewarding.

I was a bit surprised at how much writing was in this, there's certainly quite a bit of story in this, but I never felt like it dragged on too long. This story had a good overall pace that kept it from being dull, so I had no issue with reading from beginning to end.

Also, points for some rather decent humor and the Rwby references were quite interesting to say the least. The vibrant writing and details really shows me that you genuinely had fun with crafting this story, at least that's my assumption.

While this isn't the most complex story, its definitely one with its share of excitement.
-- TharaApples on 3/21/2017 12:03:09 PM with a score of 0
I liked this :) You have spent lots of time describing an interesting story line, well developed characters and a plethora of tactical fight scenes without getting too bogged down in technical details which is good, the changing of different perspectives was also especially good, if reminiscent of computer games :D
Overall this was very good work and I enjoyed it a lot, though towards the end the steady stream of gunfights was starting to feel a little repetitive (can't we just settle all our differences with a few games of Rock, Paper, Scissors, winner takes all? :D). However this was one of the better games I've read on this site for a while and the hard work resulted in a great story, 7/8 :)
-- Will11 on 8/3/2016 9:17:41 PM with a score of 0
Great work on this. I played around with different options in combat scenes to see how it would impact the results. Something this storygame does very well, which many do not, is dying in fights feels fair.

It's not a random picking of an action in combat and hoping it works. Instead you're choosing a logical choice, then having the results play out in a way that fairly reflects that choice. There's also good text cues, to hint at what's best to do. And not every alternate choice lead to death, which was a nice touch. This shows a lot of insight and thought with your writing, along with adding to the immersion of the experience.

I found it interesting to have the changing protagonists throughout the story too. My main concern was that it would feel jarring to have it change up too much. However it worked pretty good and I found it worthwhile to have multiple perspectives within the events happening in the game.

The style of humor you used made it fun too. A certain toy scene was great. Trying to stay spoiler-free, there were some entertaining options. The ending was both surprising, yet oddly fitting by the time I reached that point.

Overall, I enjoyed it a lot. There were a few minor text errors, but nothing distracting. It's heavy on the story aspect, which made it feel more linear, but the story itself was well done. I believe the writing held up to this approach, the humor kept the reading relaxed, and I put a lot of weight in having combat that plays out smartly.
-- IronPanther on 7/27/2016 2:01:29 PM with a score of 0
Amazing story! Unfortunately there are tons of grammatical and spelling errors that make this hard to read. The length of story is impressive. Sometimes the technical details bored me cross-eyed. Which character we play as is not always clear. Break the story up or lose some weapon detail. For someone that doesn't play video games, fourth wall and some other stuff needs to be explained. Lastly, the story reads like the author's first language is not English. I strongly encourage you to re-do this -- it could be quite jaw-dropping!
-- Quorrah on 2/26/2017 8:03:58 PM with a score of 0
Good game
-- Multiverse on 1/9/2017 4:07:29 AM with a score of 0
I loved the story, and no, it isn't just because one of the characters has my name, It's really good! Now, as for the writing, the spelling could be improved on some, but over all, the plot makes up for that. Also, I loved how you broke the 4th wall but did it seamlessly.
-- Shinobi on 9/15/2016 12:56:34 PM with a score of 0
The thought and work put into the story is magnificent. The choices mostly make sense and the action is superb. There are a few spelling and grammar mistakes, but nothing too serious that takes away from the story. It's obvious you worked hard on this story and did your best with the detail and development. A little difficult but not extremely.
-- Apollo118 on 9/10/2016 5:43:22 PM with a score of 0
An interesting story, I really enjoyed it!
-- MrMustachio on 9/10/2016 4:27:34 PM with a score of 0
Max.

I don't think I'll make a RWBY fanfic since I focus on a WW2 storygame. I'm sorry.
-- Raven47 on 9/8/2016 8:10:46 PM with a score of 0
Hi, you spent a lot of time on that I'm guessing and it is just wow super good like I mean it really was a pretty wired outcome, but I didn't really understand at first and from reading a person's profile and it said that the person really liked rwby and they got hooked because of you, so I was wondering if you can make a rwby fanfiction.
-- Max on 9/7/2016 11:32:23 PM with a score of 0
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