You Feel Me (Prologue)

Player Rating3.00/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 22 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

An interactive novel where you play as the main character Jazmine "Jazz" Hardwick. As you try to find your way through life, There's many challenges the reader must face. Help Jazz get out of the grasp of "Lotus", an infamous gang in Kambuki. You can choose to lead a life of crime or become a voice for the voiceless. Your choices will deeply affect the storyline as you unlock hidden secrets behind the origins of  Kambuki...

*This is my first interactive story! If you wish for more please comment. Anything you didn't like about the story or confusing please tell me! The story is still in the works,and needs a editing! Have fun!!!

Player Comments

Thanks for the all the comments. By the end of this moth, I will have this part of the story extended and re-edited.
-- theawkwardblackperk on 7/16/2015 8:44:58 PM
As Chris said: Parts are never good for anyone. You should actually finish the story before you publish it, and if you want feedback before then, you should put it in sneak peek mode and post a link in the forums.
-- ISentinelPenguinI on 7/14/2015 11:34:09 AM
Very suspenseful, and a good effort to try and develop that abusive, heartbeating scene. However- and this may just be me -but I felt as if it were a little repetitive. Anyways, good job. You have potential :3
-- imagine13 on 7/11/2015 4:12:27 PM
Don't split your story into parts.
-- Chris113022 on 7/9/2015 12:15:38 PM
Not content with parts new authors are now splitting their stories into prologues :D That's my only criticism, the writing here is phenomenal and hugely enjoyable, the story draws you in and makes you interested and I only wish it was longer. I think it will be difficult to maintain this high level of quality through a full-length story and I'm not sure where you will take the story from here, this seems like a stand-alone piece of writing rather than a story to me. Switching to culinary metaphors I'd describe this as a starter, now I'm really keen to see what the main course, the story itself, is like :D
-- Will11 on 7/9/2015 3:30:49 AM
Not bad. But please do not divide your story like this. It would have been way better if it was longer and if the font was the same all throughout.
-- Penworth on 7/9/2015 12:51:54 AM
There shouldn't be any blank pages in a completed story...
-- Kiel_Farren on 7/8/2015 10:55:06 PM
Aww, it ended! I was just starting to get into this game. This was actually looking like a pretty good game- I recommend you add much more on to it, as well, and also perhaps have your experience with the cat influence your memories... anyhow, this was a pretty good game. The cons were the font changes and short length. 5/8. This has a lot of potential!
-- GMB13carat on 7/8/2015 7:03:39 PM
Worth reading, but would be better if:

-Text did not change
-Was not that short, this was enjoyable but a slight bit disappointing
-Add Prologue to the other chapters for one long story

-- At_Your_Throat on 7/8/2015 1:55:59 PM
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