You're just a kid with 10$ in your pocket and a goal. a goal to never return to the lab you were made in. You've just run off to the forest and have no clue where to go. In this story you will not only discover secrets new to the character, but also discover their past. Are you ready?

Thanks so much!

Well, that was a review! Thanks for the constructive criticism, I will DEFINITELY use your suggestions in my writing, which I need to do a lot more of! I think I’ve been a little lazy, and that needs to stop. If you or anyone else has further feedback to share as I continue editing, please let me know. With that feedback, my writing is going to change a lot! This is my first choose your own adventure story, so I don’t know what readers want. I’ll read other peoples writing and use that. I can’t write as much as I would like because of school, but I get out at an ok time so I can still write enough to (hopefully) please people.

Sorry if I'm taking too long to decide. Right now i just need to figure out if working with someone else is the best workstyle for me. 

Of course! anyone can! 

Thanks for all your help. I think at this point either you're my co-writer or i won't use one after all. Do you have any feedback on my story now that I've written more and done some editing? I'd love some constructive critisism to help me write better.

thanks for the site, i checked it out and it looks great. I'm willing to add things like blood and corpses, but not the other stuff i ya know what im sayin

Well, let me say first off, your idea is great and very well written. Also, thanks for taking my little joke lightly, it's good to have people like you on the internet. And you're right, i can't be picky. I'm a noob on this sight but i'm no noob to writing in general, and although that really has nothing to do with your post i just think it's something i should say. Thanks for being so helpful on this forum, i would love to work with you in any way, proofreading or co-writing.

 I'm gonna keep my story PG because it creates a wider age range and i generally don't enjoy writing dirty things.

Yeah, i overreacted. I can admit that. Thanks for the suggestions, I won't forget them. I'm just a little too fiesty for my own good, i guess. I'll write a bit more, and while I'm writing I'll keep your advice and everyone elses in mind. Who knows, maybe i'll write a good story!

She you mean. And yes, I am :)